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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: moraamarolaloba on November 26, 2017, 01:27:10 PM
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Life and Time walk together carrying us inside... And when we realize our insignificance... It is the perfect moment to laugh....
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4FDoBeg_sLM (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4FDoBeg_sLM)
Sometimes when I look back
I realize that Time
is an instant after another,
it just happens,
moving you away,
like that foot that on the road
kicks away the stones,
and thus launched
I fly in a mirror fragment
in the space of my dreams
surrounded by that music
that one sings to ward off fear,
to push away the black
and to remain.
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Hi Mora.
Very, very cool. I think this is my favourite song of yours so far. It's really hypnotic, and that ambient dance rythm just holds it all together really well. The video is really cool too. Lyrics really well put together, great poetry again.
I think there is great artistry on show here. Enjoyed immensely. Cheers Micky.
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Hi Mora,
This is a great track. Really liked it. You cant go wrong with a dopebeat and a heavy bassline.
sounds a little Trip Hop. Portishead style.
Very cool video too.
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Not my style but is good
I think the voice is little autotuned? or it isnt?
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Nicely produced, some great sounding samples/synths/loops or whatever you used.
For me this is one of those songs that leaves something to the imagination and forces you to think. Some nice effects in the video and I think this added to the experience.
I could tell you enjoyed making this one.
Well done.
Yodasdad
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More great production, vocals and poetry. I got the portishead (but a shade darker) vibe too. Very cool and I really liked the understated echo/reverb guitar that came in and out. Video was brill. You’re a clever cookie :) Cx
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Lovely stuff Mora. Well thought out deep and dark :)
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Hi Mora
Great soundscape. There are lots of interesting musical additions to hold our attention throughout. Fine lyrics that I would like to see developed further. There is certainly space for more to really engage the listener with your story. Production sounds very good.
Well done
Paul
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Hi Mora.
Very, very cool. I think this is my favourite song of yours so far. It's really hypnotic, and that ambient dance rythm just holds it all together really well. The video is really cool too. Lyrics really well put together, great poetry again.
I think there is great artistry on show here. Enjoyed immensely. Cheers Micky.
Hi Micky, thank you, it makes me happy you enjoyed it so much. See you. Mora
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Hi Mora,
This is a great track. Really liked it. You cant go wrong with a dopebeat and a heavy bassline.
sounds a little Trip Hop. Portishead style.
Very cool video too.
Many thanks, you are very kind. Portishead style...? Surely, I am unable to apply a style to my songs...
See you soon. Mora
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Not my style but is good
I think the voice is little autotuned? or it isnt?
Hola Pacho, thank you for commenting. Autotuned? No, I mixed my voice with chorus at the end. Be well. Mora
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Nicely produced, some great sounding samples/synths/loops or whatever you used.
For me this is one of those songs that leaves something to the imagination and forces you to think. Some nice effects in the video and I think this added to the experience.
I could tell you enjoyed making this one.
Well done.
Yodasdad
Hi Yodasdad, many thanks. You always say wonderful things on my work. I call my songs "Songs of Thought" in the playlist I did on my channel. I enjoyed a lot making the vid too, I like to become a clown.
Be well. Mora
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More great production, vocals and poetry. I got the portishead (but a shade darker) vibe too. Very cool and I really liked the understated echo/reverb guitar that came in and out. Video was brill. You’re a clever cookie :) Cx
Hi Caz, thank you for your funny comment... clever cookie? hahaha I am not sure of that... Big kiss.
Mora
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Hey this is great! really trippy!
super cool song actually...only note i would have would be that the drums need a bit more clarity with the bass/low frequency elements, perhaps a more prominent side chain?
other than that really great work!! ;) love the lyrics and overall vibe
Be excited to hear more from you! keep em comin'!
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Hey this is great! really trippy!
super cool song actually...only note i would have would be that the drums need a bit more clarity with the bass/low frequency elements, perhaps a more prominent side chain?
other than that really great work!! ;) love the lyrics and overall vibe
Be excited to hear more from you! keep em comin'!
Hi, many thanks for your comment. Yes, I think the drums could be better, I have changed my earphones today to reach a better mix. Be well and good chance with your music too. Mora
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I love this track!
I love your voice and the production is fantastic. Reminds me a lot of the stuff that David Bowie was doing toward the very end of his career/life. I dig it a lot. No nits. Nice work!
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Hey there..........interesting.........strange....different......captivating.
A very authentic sound. A compelling listen, for sure.
Good stuff, moraamarolaloba
-Tom
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I love this track!
I love your voice and the production is fantastic. Reminds me a lot of the stuff that David Bowie was doing toward the very end of his career/life. I dig it a lot. No nits. Nice work!
Hmmmm. Are you calling me Mummy? Do not worry, it`s a joke. Thank you for commenting. Hasta pronto. Mora
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Hey there..........interesting.........strange....different......captivating.
A very authentic sound. A compelling listen, for sure.
Good stuff, moraamarolaloba
-Tom
Hi Tom, thank you. I also like your music. Hasta pronto. Mora
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Seriously cool. Loved the video. Everything works so well together, the beat, your voice and lyrics, and the images. Fantastic and beautiful.
Lynn
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Yeah...this one stopped me in my tracks...I thought it was really brilliant. I don’t know how long you’ve been doing this, but the whole thing had the feel of someone who’s pretty much on top of their game.
Very impressive :)
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Cool and quite sophisticated song, good lyrics but felt they could've developed a little more..
liked the vocal effect and delivery :) :)
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Eartha Kitt is alive and well and living on the forum!
Very imaginative use of synthesisers. I like songs that don't follow the usual route and that tickle your ears if you know what I mean. I liked this very much - mysterious, deep and enigmatic. I too think that you could have explored the idea a little more but it's great as it is.
M
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Eartha Kitt is alive and well and living on the forum!
Very imaginative use of synthesisers. I like songs that don't follow the usual route and that tickle your ears if you know what I mean. I liked this very much - mysterious, deep and enigmatic. I too think that you could have explored the idea a little more but it's great as it is.
M
Me he quedado muerta! I watched a vid of Eartha... she is wonderful, really, different and powerful. Many thanks, I am honoured by your comment but I think she has a very defined style and I have to find me yet, meanwhile I drink from a lot of styles that I discover I have inside. Hasta pronto, Mora
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Great moody piece - well done.
Like the low vocals and the trippy hippy beats.
There's got to be a market for this in film or sth.
It needs to be heard ;D ;D
Paul
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Listened yesterday and was immediately taken in but too tired to comment.
Lovely feel to it...cool groove. Yes, trippy hoppy but reminded me also of those 80s things by Grace Jones and Marianne Faithful came into my head too. I'm not a great video watcher so didn't really notice...sorry!
Great groove. Supercool! Thanks for that!
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Really like this!
Lovely voice! and so well produced. Good arrangement
great lyrics, poetic.
So much to enjoy here.
Thanks for sharing!!
Rightly.
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Great moody piece - well done.
Like the low vocals and the trippy hippy beats.
There's got to be a market for this in film or sth.
It needs to be heard ;D ;D
Paul
Many thanks Paul. You are very kind and make me feel my work is good. See you. Mora
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Listened yesterday and was immediately taken in but too tired to comment.
Lovely feel to it...cool groove. Yes, trippy hoppy but reminded me also of those 80s things by Grace Jones and Marianne Faithful came into my head too. I'm not a great video watcher so didn't really notice...sorry!
Great groove. Supercool! Thanks for that!
Thank you! Mora
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Really like this!
Lovely voice! and so well produced. Good arrangement
great lyrics, poetic.
So much to enjoy here.
Thanks for sharing!!
Rightly.
Many thanks for watching! Hasta pronto. Mora