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Title: That bloody War.
Post by: Vintage54 on November 18, 2017, 07:26:33 PM

                                That bloody war.

                           I need a fix
                           But the man's not showed up yet
                           It's the only thing
                           That helps me to forget
                           Once i was clean
                           Clean and dry as a desert flat
                           But the war
                           That bloody war put paid to that

                           I used to run
                           Run every day around the block
                           I was strong
                           Now i push wheels or do the hop
                           Two legs went marching
                           But only one came back
                           That war
                           That bloody war took care of that

                                There's a wall in Washington
                                That throws your image back
                                Pause a while there Mr President
                                Before you plan your next attack

                           This house had love
                           And the smell of sweet perfume
                           A woman's touch
                           A vase of flowers in every room
                           Her colored scarf
                           Used to hang beside my hat
                           But the war
                           That bloody war put paid to that

                           I'd call my friend
                           But i know that he's not home
                           He's just a ghost
                           A dead number in my phone
                           I can't leave a message
                           And he can't answer back
                           That war
                           That bloody war took care of that

                                Will it be the same old story
                                Different singer same old song
                                There's guts but there's no glory
                                When the war you wage is wrong

                          I'm so tired
                          But i'm afraid to go to sleep
                          One time ago
                          My dreams they used to be so sweet
                          I never rode a nightmare
                          I could sleep like any cat
                          But the war
                          That bloody war put paid to that

                                There's a wall in Washington
                                That throws your image back
                                Pause a while there Mr President
                                Before you plan your next attack.


                                    Vintage54
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: Neil C on November 20, 2017, 11:29:58 PM
Vintage,

Nothing really needs to be said to those lyrics..

But I have to... regarding the last verse. There's a talented US songwriter https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Darden_Smith  (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Darden_Smith) who I've had the privilege to have been taught by who founded Songrwriting for Soldiers programme in the US. This provides songwriting retreats for vets, and from what I heard its the mental scars that are often the hardest to deal with.

 :)
neil
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: 2tuoo on November 21, 2017, 12:55:54 PM
Super intense!

I'm not sure why but this line :
Quote
That helps me to forget
feels like the "to" is unnecessary there

the emotion in this song is very clear, great delivery!
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: Paulski on November 21, 2017, 08:52:58 PM
Well there Vintage - you've wordsmithed another poignant and solid lyric  ;D
You put us in the uncomfortable position of this guy's headspace and we begrudgingly learn from the visit. Damn you for sending us down such pathways of hardship. And bless you for it as well for it's thankfully the closest thing we'll have to living them. ;D

Paul
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: tomcrocus on November 23, 2017, 06:18:56 PM
Hi Vintage,
                 i see you're still churning them out,it's perfect and very poignant,
i love it all but especially the 4th and 5th verses,
                                                                       best wishes,
                                                                                           Tom.
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: finestrat on November 27, 2017, 09:22:23 AM
Powerful lyrics well structured - fantastic
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: hardtwistmusic on December 09, 2017, 05:57:58 AM
For the longest time, meaningful songs were taboo. I think (given the economic and political climate) they will be back soon.  You're (hopefully) only a little ahead of time.
Title: Re: That bloody War.
Post by: lillypilly on December 09, 2017, 08:49:14 PM
WOW