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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Kayles86 on October 15, 2017, 09:26:58 PM
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Hi all its been a while,
Ive started some lines of some lyrics but im having a block so if anybody wishes to help out please drop me an email at agelesspixie86@googlemail.com basically the song is about going through some hardships and trying to pull through but somehow nothing seems to go right.
V1) Sometimes my bad feelings need healing,
I forget sometimes why my head inside is bleeding,
the scars on my arms dont deny all my past and im not gonna lie its been real hard,
head under water my lungs fill up throw my head
please help lol apologies its very short but im having a severe block. Many thanks for reading :P
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Hi Kayle,
Sounds like a heavy song.
What about a powerful chorus to show some real anx. Keep the Chorus Lyric simple and project some real pain.
Something like:
Chorus: Hook
But I need your arms
Yeh I need your arms.....to hold me
My heads in a storm,
Yeh my heads in a storm...trying to make you see
.....Why dont you hold me.
Just a few ideas.
Hope they work for you.
Andy