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Title: Girls From The Countryside
Post by: PerGunnar on October 06, 2017, 04:54:18 PM
Per Gunnar Vik Mjølhus - Girls From The Countryside

*Intro*
 
I grew up on a tiny, tiny island
Where all were country girls
 
*Verse 1*
 
I know where every girl is kind to me
Where they always smile to me
Where humble they're trying to be
I know where every girl is fun loving
Where their true drum's drumming
With daizy dukes, yum, yum, yum, yummy
Your haunting eyes
I love being sides, girls from the countryside
 
*Chorus*
 
In the countryland
Lives my dreamgirls
Whom has captured my heart
Whom I will always love
We meet with haunting eyes
Girls from the countryside
Are the sweetest you'll ever find
 
*Verse 2*
 
I know where every girl's adventurous
Where they love their hands with dirt
Where they're like a man that works
I know where girls got their feet on grass
Where they will kick your ass
Where they will drink your glass
Oooh, your haunting eyes
I love being sides, girls from the countryside
 
*Bridge*
 
Ooh, take me to the place where girls care for little stuffs
Where they handle brittle cuts
Where their moods not ficklenuts
To the girls from the countryside
 
*Chorus*
 
In the countryland
Lives my dreamgirls
Whom has captured my heart
Whom I will always love
We meet with haunting eyes
Girls from the countryside
The sweetest smiles you'll find
 
Title: Re: Girls From The Countryside
Post by: Neil C on October 12, 2017, 04:21:23 PM
Hi Per,

I like this a lot. It has an innocent charm and playful wordplay. I guess English isn't your first language, so I think ' I love being slides' might be ' I love being besides'
What are you plans for it?
 :)
Neil
Title: Re: Girls From The Countryside
Post by: PerGunnar on October 12, 2017, 06:55:22 PM
Hi Per,

I like this a lot. It has an innocent charm and playful wordplay. I guess English isn't your first language, so I think ' I love being slides' might be ' I love being besides'
What are you plans for it?
 :)
Neil
Hi Neil!

Thanks for your feedback! I'm Norwegian heh!

I am aware that it should be "besides" like you said. I just kinda made up the word "sides" because I had to write it down quickly while I had the flow in my mind, and "besides" didn't flow as good at that time. But I think "besides" will work just as fine now.

Well my plan is to record it and release it. Sometimes I get distracted by things, or I end up giving up and getting depressed, wondering if anyone will care if I release my music. I live in total solitude on a secluded island you see. So I'm struggling to stay motivated. And it's hard when I have to record all by myself. So you know, it's a challenge. Your feedback is encouraging me though!
Title: Re: Girls From The Countryside
Post by: Nicolajane87 on October 18, 2017, 02:43:19 PM
Hi PerGunnar,

Great Lyrics, you should defiantly get it recorded would love to hear it.

NicolaJane
Title: Re: Girls From The Countryside
Post by: 2tuoo on October 19, 2017, 10:01:43 AM
Hice flow and great message

I had to google "ficklenuts" and couldn't find this word. Then I found the "fickleness".

Is this an intended wordplay for the "nuts" or this word is real in its form as you wrote it?