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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Cawproductions on October 03, 2017, 08:50:22 PM
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Hi All,
Been messing with this track for a while and Me and Mikey finally got it finished.
Loads of noise, all you rockers out there, rinse your ears with this.
https://soundcloud.com/cawproductions/rebound (https://soundcloud.com/cawproductions/rebound)
And for the Lyricists, here are the finely crafted words......I think not.
REBOUND:
I’me on my own….Thats what I told you
you couldn’t see that I wasnt telling the truth
Things you should know about me
lay off your questions and quit giving me the third degree
We came outta nowhere, we came out of the blue
and I don’t want to see it through again…..without you
Were on the rebound.........I gotta make you see
Were on the rebound………you don’t know a thing about me
are you the only thing I really need, thats a definite maybe
I can only look at you and wish that I, I can afford the fee
we were getting close…were in the danger zone
Coz you’re hitting my phone…I kinda like your tone
You gotta give me a shining light or something, just a sign
you gotta pretty strange attraction… that gunna makes me feel alive
Enjoy.......
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Total rockin' song dudes! Full of naked sweat and filthy rock n roll enzymes.
I think scaling back the lead guitar might be a good idea though, it didn't need to go all the way through IMHO.
It's a great song guys, let it digest.
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THIS SOUNDS MEGAAAAA, can i add it to my Indie Rock playlist on spotify, it actually sounds so big, you guys can get somewhere with this ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Thanks for great feedbacks guys, not everyone's cup of tea but hope it got a few heads rockin
Wanted the track to be full on from the start,
Please feel free to add to your playlist, hazza.
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I like it. Production is a little too polished for me. Would prefer it a little dirtier. Morefrog Jones really nails this style of songwriting. I would listen to his tunes for inspiration. Cheers Micky.
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Yeah ! - This really rocks :) It's very well put together. I love the lead vocal, It has a sort of Oasis feel to it. Mega guitars and bass. Excellent stuff guys :)
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I kind of agree with the Oasis theme to it, but i reckon you could make songs fit better with longer solos, as the sound you have is great!
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It does what the it says on the tin. A rockin' number. grab our attention and holds it for the duration of the ride. Great to hear the track relax before slipping back into gear before the end. Well done.
Paul
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Hi Guys and gals, (can we even say that anymore)
Great feedback,
It does what the it says on the tin. A rockin' number. grab our attention and holds it for the duration of the ride. Great to hear the track relax before slipping back into gear before the end. Well done.
Paul
Cheers Paul, Its say loud on the tin, so we did.
I kind of agree with the Oasis theme to it, but i reckon you could make songs fit better with longer solos, as the sound you have is great!
For those guys who mentioned Oasis, They were the band from my time when I was in my prime so to speak..., so I suppose you couldnt help but soak up some of that manchester rock n roll scene. Anyone whos around late 40's in age will know what I mean.
I not a fan of singing but strangley when I step up to the mic, theres a little bit of me that thinks he is Liam Gallagher, But hopefully in a good way, coz that guy has had his moments of being a tool.
Anyway, enough of my rambling, appreciate you all giving it a listen, gotta go and smash up my room and throw the TV out of the window........ROCK N ROLLLLLLL.
Andy
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i reckon you could make songs fit better with longer solos
YEAH!!!!!!!!!
Andy never gives me room for a face melter, I'm working on him though :D
Thanks for the kind words, glad you like the song
Mikey
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Yeah....love the drive/power/energy. Got me by the balls right
from the off ;D Great feedback, should be more of it.......
I thought the solo guitar parts could be more random/anarchic/wild,
and use that feedback more ;D
loved it ;D
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That's a "definite maybe" - ha, little Oasis reference there... And the "third degree" is a nice little line.
I do like a bit of changing rhythm to create a bit of tension and that works really well here. When the drive comes back in it's all the better for it. I also like lead-as-rhythm twiddly guitar fills too and they add lots of personality.
The harmonies work well - I don't usually like so much vocal processing but here it's a good choice.
#madforit!
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That's a "definite maybe" - ha, little Oasis reference there... And the "third degree" is a nice little line.
I do like a bit of changing rhythm to create a bit of tension and that works really well here. When the drive comes back in it's all the better for it. I also like lead-as-rhythm twiddly guitar fills too and they add lots of personality.
The harmonies work well - I don't usually like so much vocal processing but here it's a good choice.
#madforit!
Hi Adam,
I am a massive Oasis fan as you can prob tell from the vibe of this, The music of my time so to speak.
Mikey was taking the P**s out of my vocal saying..did I have my parker on and the mic stand really high...It showed..Hes a cheeky..so and so.
Loving the new Liam Gallagher album too.
Cheers
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Diesel and dust with Liam at the microphone. Makes me wanna empty a pint.
All the ingrediens necessary are here for sure.
Love the delivery of "I wasnt telling the truth". Exactly the right amount of the irritability and "who gives a f**k". Lovely.
I have never been a solo-guitar lover so that doesn´t kick it for me but luckily I haven´t got the final say in taste (more synths d*mm*t! ;D )
Drums are solid (love the short breakdowns) and the rest sounds like it should.
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Thanks Skogge,
Never very confident in my vocal capabilities....But i think I am getting used to hearing my own voice...
Thanks for the boost.....
ps, always rooms for synths, My next track has a sneaky one goin on.
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Aw...I can’t believe I didn’t comment on this...I listened a while back but must have got side-tracked :-[
Anyway...sounds great...fat and punchy. Nicely paced rocker that bounces along nicely. I liked the chord changes here and there...helped keep the interest levels right up and the lyric is neat and accessible. Maybe I’d have sneakily turned the lead guitarists amp down a little here and there whilst he was distracted...but that’s just a tiny personal thing.
Great number and the kind of thing I’d like to hear more of :)
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Maybe I’d have sneakily turned the lead guitarists amp down a little here and there whilst he was distracted...but that’s just a tiny personal thing.
Thats you off my Christmas card list then!
Seriously though, thanks to everyone who took the time to listen, and thanks for the great comments, glad you enjoyed it.
Mikey
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Yeah, great stuff, I also had the Gallagher brothers come to mind when listening but its not just a pastiche, has its own vibe too.
I really liked the percussion in the pre-choruses, and the chorus melody itself. I always feel I have to take a chorus melody 'up' to make it fly but here you take it 'down' and it just smashes it. I'm going to study this to learn why it works so well.
Nice one, our kid (<- written in a Manc accent).
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I can't believe you have any issue with your voice. That's just silly. What's not to like?!
Fun song. Had me bopping around the room.
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Sounds like you guys had a ball.
I love the vox,btw. I think everyone has hang ups about their voice,just keep doing it. :)
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Definely maybe you're rocking it!! Great sound - plus I'm back in m home town :). Fab vocals and lyrics. Brill outro. All works for me. Having another listen now. Putting my parker back on and wearing shades indoors, hehe. cx
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Final, Comment from me,
Just a thanks for the vocal confidence boost, I am still trying to get comfortable with hearing my own vocal, My own worst critic.
Thanks to everyone who took a listen and some really great comments. Rock on....
I love the way each person picks out something different....its what makes us human. (oops song right there maybe....Definately)...enough already.
Now, where are those shades and parker.
Cheers guys.
Andy
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Andy
This would be on Jeremy Clarksons playlist!
Yes, this hits you in the face, but with a great melody to go with it.
Vocals & harmonies are excellent as is the lead guitar work.
Really enjoyed it.
James
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Thanks James,
Would love to see it on a playlist somewhere, maybe I start one, then add loads from the forum.
Hoping to get a load of my stuff on spotify next year so can maybe do that on there,
Cheers
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Well..what a good rockin number this is!!! sounds great VERY loud 8) 8)
not hearing much bass though...
good hook mate :) :)
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Thanks KN.
When mixing its always a problem get the bass to cut through enough to translate on all systems.
Thanks for the heads up, I got a set of KRk rokit 8 and treated mixing space, ie Bass traps overhead sound absorbers, reflection treatment, , they all produce great low end but am conscious that if you dont have a system that can do this, how will it sound. Always a concern of mine.
Always striving to get that perfect master.
Glad you like the track, I always start with the Hook and write backwards, not sure if anyone else does this.
Cheers
Andy
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Thanks KN.
When mixing its always a problem get the bass to cut through enough to translate on all systems.
Thanks for the heads up, I got a set of KRk rokit 8 and treated mixing space, ie Bass traps overhead sound absorbers, reflection treatment, , they all produce great low end but am conscious that if you dont have a system that can do this, how will it sound. Always a concern of mine.
Always striving to get that perfect master.
Glad you like the track, I always start with the Hook and write backwards, not sure if anyone else does this.
Cheers
Andy
That's a good idea starting with the hook..might give it a go sometime,
I'm listening with Genelec 8030's and a 7050 bass bin in a well treated room..bass traps, ceiling absorbers..etc....still a little bass shy I thought...I always listen to my mixes on a crappy portable cd player before finalizing it...usually shows up a problem or 2... :)
best to you, Kevin :)
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Thanks
Kev, sounds like a nice setup, normally try them in my car and a few other places, Iphone ear buds,
Crappy CD player, good idea.
Cheers
Andy