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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Petebrennan on August 22, 2017, 10:40:18 AM
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Throw us a bone, Pete :)
Lyrics, a little background to the song, a "hello" even...
That is my view :D
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No worries.
Lyric video up on youtube @petebrennanmusic
Background is i wrote the song as a fuck you to everybody who ever told me I can't sing or write or play or had no talent and dedicated to anyone who received similar comments
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Ha ha...I like it already :)
I'll head over for a listen this afternoon.
Cheers!
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Yo Pete.
You have misrepresented yourself quite badly.
I clicked on the tube vid expecting to hear some pitchy caterwauling,but yet all I heard was a very pleasant and individual sounding singer. If I'd paid good money to hear some pitchy caterwauling,I'd be bitterly disappointed. :(
I like the 'in yer face' lyrics,they fit well with the anthemic feel to the song.
There are timing issues here and there between the chugging guitar and the drums,plus when the song builds,your vocals are completely overwhelmed. You can here this clearly from 1.44 to 2.29 where your voice sits well in the mix,then fades away in the build up.
Maybe a little on the long side,overall?
Still,all that is is fine tuning.The item itself is a very listenable,cool song. :)
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Thank you
I'm planning to sort the vocals and trim by a minute when I go back in the studio.
Thanks for the feedback.
Will check out your link when I get home
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Well that song is dedicated to me too! Nah but seriously great song man!
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Thank you
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Great song with great vocals, there is a very current sound to your voice. There is a good contrast between the verses and chorus, I felt it could use more backing vocals in some places but a really good listen.
Mikey
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Thanks Mikey
I've followed you on soundcloud
Your from my neck of the woods I see!
I'm from Bodmin,Cornwall
Keep up the good work
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Great song and that chorus really comes in with a punch that I did not see coming! The prechorus really sets it up well though.
I got a combination of modern sounds and in the chorus at least some Linkin Park style vibes which suited the song well. The lyrics are good too - lots of rhymes but not too forced. Agree with Skub on the vocal mixing but otherwise sounding really good to me.
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Thank you
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Reminds me a bit of Linking Park. I like the use of dynamics in the arrangement,, and the style of singing.. I think you should add a nice small reverb to your voice that would be cool. Or maybe some delays slightly. I do think the chorus comes in a bit loud in terms of levels.. The song overall is good! The singing is also good wasnt out of tune. Keep it up man :)
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Thanks man
Subscribed to your youtube
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Thanks Mikey
I've followed you on soundcloud
Your from my neck of the woods I see!
I'm from Bodmin,Cornwall
Keep up the good work
Cool, another local boy, even if you are from the dark side, (of the Tamar), there are a few of us here in the West Country on this forum, must be the fresh air down here!
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Dark side
Pmsl
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Peter,
No worries.
Lyric video up on youtube @petebrennanmusic
Background is i wrote the song as a fuck you to everybody who ever told me I can't sing or write or play or had no talent and dedicated to anyone who received similar comments
Who says you cant sing, Boll*cks, great sound, vocal sound good.
OK, the production isnt great, but thats easy to sort, I notice you in Bodmin, Me and Mikey in Plymouth.
If you send me the stems I can get that sounding really punchy.
Good song, yeh, I would trim a minute off, Nice work.
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Thanks man. Yeah going into studio soon to trim it and fiddle the mix a bit.
Hit me up on Facebook @petebrennanmusic ☺
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Sorry wrong thread!
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Okay???
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Hey Pete, sounds like you've really moved this forwards from the version you posted a couple of months back. Sounds like the chorus has a lot more welly now and I still dig the stuff I did last time (that vibrating string in the second round of each verse). As others have said, still room for a little trimming of repeats to make it a little shorter (leave 'em wanting more...) but you have a cracking power track on your hands now. Nice one.
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Thanks man
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Also available on soundcloud, youtube and Facebook @petebrennanmusic
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Good song ,very visual lyrics of rising up against the odds.Nice beat and chord progression that reminds me of Ryan Tedder which ain't easy to achieve
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Thank you. Glad you enjoyed the track