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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Vintage54 on July 25, 2017, 08:57:57 PM
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Eco system blues
Whales are on the beach
They lost direction
Or maybe they just gave up hope
Stars are out of reach
No place to run to
If the Eco systems broke
Hope to God it isn't true
If it is
What more can we do
Except sing the blues
The full moon is out
Last wolves are howling
A sad wind carries every note
Howling for what's gone
They know there's no returning
They know the Eco systems broke
Hope to God it isn't true
If it is
What more can we do
Except sing the blues
Saws are buzzing
Trees are falling
Coral vanishing like smoke
The sky is thin
The ice is melting
Looks like the Eco systems broke
Hope to God it isn't true
If it is
What more can we do
Except sing the blues
Life's natural chain
Beautiful and golden
Left undisturbed will always cope
But the hand of man
That golden chain has tarnished
And it's fragile links are broke
Wish to God it wasn't true
But it is
So what more can we do
Except sing the blues.
Vintage54
I don't know, maybe it needs a bridge or a middle eight, tell me what you think.
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Hi Vintage - The Eco system is out of money? It should have said something!
Seriously though this is a good write IMHO.
Think you meant "in" the hand of man ?
Nary a nit to be found beyond that. ;D ;D
Paul
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Almost miss this, another great write Vintage, love the way each verse and chorus flows into that line
"Except sing the blues" has a magic of understand your flow.
Does it need a bridge, knowing your style all it needs is the flow and as always you have delivered, bridge or no bridge, i said it before and ill says it again, you need to get your lyrics out there Man 8)
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Brilliant...I don't think it needs anything, except a tune to make the whole world hear it and take notice.
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Lovely imagery. Great flow. Engaging. I think you've done a great job telling the story without a middle eight and without getting repetitive or predictable. I look forward to hearing it put to music.