:D Definitely not a song yet. It may never get to that stage, although it's been fun trying to piece the puzzle together. I'm picturing a peppy tune for the bar patrons to enjoy after ten.
May I ask why you'd choose that verse for the chorus?
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Hardtwistmusic - why I did this I don't know. All I know is I did. But anyway...I decided to put some of your lyrics to some chords and this is the result https://www.audiomack.com/song/darren1664/tequila :P
Not a great recording or track so I hope I haven't offended you or your lyrics but was fun writing music to words for a change (normally write the other way about). Anyway was just a music fart and thought I'd share :P (Nice lyrics though :))
Edit: Sorry Jenna I completely hijacked your thread. Just posting now quickly to say that I like the idea of this and have been thinking on it and will check in tomorrow with a proper reply (Sorry just got completely sidetracked :P)
Hey guys,
Don't know how far you've got with this, but if you're
still looking for a backing track. I've got this that might
suit.
https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP
It still needs a lot of work, but I think it's ready for some
lyrics/vocals. Let me know if you want it. ;D
Canadian Club + Jungle juice = Gorilla fart ;D
Me? Last call? Woot! Haha. I'd be more comfortable if someone with more experience would take the lead on putting it all together if it goes that direction. I love the backing track! It is a perfect fit! It's got a great Looooziana Bayou feel to it. And love the too much tequila song! I could see people swaying and singing that with drinks in hand, no problem.
Sorry I disappeared after posting this. I've been putting my all into learning the keyboard, most of which involved maddening technical issues. I picked up a midi keyboard on Ebay and sadly it's not fully functional as described in the listing, but it took me a good week or so to figure out that the problem wasn't with my system but the keyboard itself. I'll be getting a refund on it and the seller told me just to keep it with apologies, so that was a nice bonus.
Hijacked thread? Nah. It's all good. Says the ------> Queen of thread hijacks!
Party on! I was just about to chill for the evening, and now that backing track has me wanting to get up and boogie.
Canadian Club + Jungle juice = Gorilla fart ;D
:D For realz? We have a tent for you situated downwind from the camp. ;)
First of all group collaboration project has been try and tested on these songwriter forums in the past and has never amount to anything worth talking about, i mean group collaboration, but we're going to put that where it belongs for the moment might need it later as a cocktail drink, a hangover cure ;D
You already have experience replying so thats a great start, put your lyrics together dont have to be in order of rules and whatever, just lay them out so we can all see whatever flow takes us.
Gorilla fart, is that a hangover cure or just the end of the night playing piano ;D sounds like a great end to a party 8) okay i wont mention the fridge no more ;D you got room for us all Jenna 8)
Hey guys,
Am I to presume that the gig is on then ;D ;D
If so, here's a link that you should be able to download, so you
can sing along to in the car ;D
https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP
I think the lyrics and the music are a good fit, and that either can easily
be made to fit the other. Have you got a vocalist yet ?? I see that as the
next step. Ideally, you need someone who can sing 'in character', to do it
justice. There are two guys in the forum who immediately spring to mind,
Paulski and Skub. There are probably others, but those are the two that I
know can pull it off. But if you already have one, let me know and I'll
send the stems.
We would also need someone who can mix/produce etc. Once the lyrics are in
place, I'm more than happy to send more options/ammunition. I've tagged a
bit of lead on the end just to see what it sounds like. I think some slide guitar
would work very well with this.
Anyway, let me know your thoughts guys.
We're already two thirds of the way there ;D ;D
Just to be clear where we are at. . .
Binladeda has written a backing track (which sounds to me like it fits perfectly) and offered to sing in the lyric to said backing track. (I'm sure he wrote the backing track, less sure he offered to sing in the lyric to it.)
Jenna has no problem (and has expressed her support for) Binladeda to do so.
Sooooo.... if I have this right, we are at a point of successful collaboration.
Am I reading all this correctly?
Just trying to make sure we are all on the same page. I'm a little bit pumped over this.
Just to be clear where we are at. . .
Binladeda has written a backing track (which sounds to me like it fits perfectly) and offered to sing in the lyric to said backing track. (I'm sure he wrote the backing track, less sure he offered to sing in the lyric to it.)
Jenna has no problem (and has expressed her support for) Binladeda to do so.
Sooooo.... if I have this right, we are at a point of successful collaboration.
Am I reading all this correctly?
Just trying to make sure we are all on the same page. I'm a little bit pumped over this.
Just to be clear where we are at. . .
Successful collaboration, still early days yet Verlon, with Jenna call on this and Bin link we got something to go on, the verses are lay out but if you think of any changes then lay your thoughts out, the whole idea now is to have fun making something happen here, im still up for the backing vocals ;D after a few cocktails that is ;D
Just to be clear where we are at. . .
Binladeda has written a backing track (which sounds to me like it fits perfectly) and offered to sing in the lyric to said backing track. (I'm sure he wrote the backing track, less sure he offered to sing in the lyric to it.)
Jenna has no problem (and has expressed her support for) Binladeda to do so.
Sooooo.... if I have this right, we are at a point of successful collaboration.
Am I reading all this correctly?
Just trying to make sure we are all on the same page. I'm a little bit pumped over this.
Successful collaboration, still early days yet Verlon, with Jenna call on this and Bin link we got something to go on, the verses are lay out but if you think of any changes then lay your thoughts out, the whole idea now is to have fun making something happen here, im still up for the backing vocals ;D after a few cocktails that is ;D
Just to be clear where we are at. . .
Binladeda has written a backing track (which sounds to me like it fits perfectly) and offered to sing in the lyric to said backing track. (I'm sure he wrote the backing track, less sure he offered to sing in the lyric to it.)
Jenna has no problem (and has expressed her support for) Binladeda to do so.
Sooooo.... if I have this right, we are at a point of successful collaboration.
Am I reading all this correctly?
Just trying to make sure we are all on the same page. I'm a little bit pumped over this.
Successful collaboration, still early days yet Verlon, with Jenna call on this and Bin link we got something to go on, the verses are lay out but if you think of any changes then lay your thoughts out, the whole idea now is to have fun making something happen here, im still up for the backing vocals ;D after a few cocktails that is ;D
Yes. Please. I overwrite to get the rough shape of the structure, then bring in the chainsaw to shape the final figure. After that come the carving knives for the finer details. If anything needs changed to fit musical demands of one sort or another it's doable. I'm open to adding, subtracting, changing lyrics. Nothing is made of cement here.
Haha! Those are some very smart men who raised you boys. Although I can guarantee my chainsaw and carving knives are for lyrics only, so far. :D
I like your changes Verlon. Very nice, but I did favor the Prince of Wales verse over the Tom Collins verse. It would be rough on a vocalist, though, and it may not have as much popular appeal. How many of these drinks are outdated on today's bar scene? Have any idea?
Happy to tickle some ivories if needed too if you're really begging for punishment.
cheers all
Paul
Hardtwistmusic - why I did this I don't know. All I know is I did. But anyway...I decided to put some of your lyrics to some chords and this is the result https://www.audiomack.com/song/darren1664/tequila :P
Not a great recording or track so I hope I haven't offended you or your lyrics but was fun writing music to words for a change (normally write the other way about). Anyway was just a music fart and thought I'd share :P (Nice lyrics though :))
Edit: Sorry Jenna I completely hijacked your thread. Just posting now quickly to say that I like the idea of this and have been thinking on it and will check in tomorrow with a proper reply (Sorry just got completely sidetracked :P)
I loved what you did with this. I thought your vocal was perfect for the song. If you want to run with this and fine tune it, feel free. As long as you credit me for my work on the lyrics, you're free to do anything you want with this. And if (when you are done) you want to send me the chords, I could add some other instrumentation (if you want.)
If you want to run with this, consider it your song with no limitations except the need to credit me for the lyrics.
;D
Anyone know a banjo player....
;D
Anyone know a banjo player....
This would be how I would sequence this and cut back some of the lines. Didn't add much. Didn't feel it needed much added.
FOOL'S PARADISE:
I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
At a bar named Fool's Paradise
Since you left I have been
half-baked out of my mind
Filling up this vacancy
With every liquid I can find
(pick up pace to party tune)
Here in Paradise Johnnie Walker sits down
Orders Jim Beam to pour another round
Then he lets out a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes all around Heaven Hill
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'mstilldancing every night
With every women I can find.
They serve up Painkillers,
Fireballs and Rum Swizzles
Topping them off with,
Little splashes and a drizzles
They'll pourcall ityou Southern Comfort
It starts up after eight
For everyman or womanone who comes aroundWho comes by toTo deny and nurse their pain
Rumor has it you've moved on,
and left our love behindButAnd, I'm still dancing every night
With every women I can find.
Damn the Weather yellsoutTom CollinsI'd rather have it Dark 'n Stormy
Even dark and stormy, Long Island's within reach.HuggingWe got girls in bikinis chugging Appletinis
Enjoying the Sea Breeze with Sex on the Beach.
Rumor has it you've moved on,
and left our love behind
But I'm still dancing every night
With every women I can find.
They serve up Painkillers,
Fireballs and Rum Swizzles
Topping them off with,
Little splashes and a drizzles
SPOKEN OUT-TRO: "Say,whateverdid you hear what happened toHarryHarvey Wallbanger last night?" "I heardHe went off for some hanky-panky with that Pink Lady with the Angel Face. You know, the one with the fuzzy navel?"
I got this so far,let me know if it's how folk imagine,or if anyone wants a better dig at it. If we're headed the right road,I'll need to get the individual stem tracks from Bin to shape the song and make everything fit.Nice one skub. I deliberately didn't listen to this before my attempt and I'm glad I didn't or I'd have bailed on my version :) Sounds like a Dwight Yoakam hit to me! ;D ;D
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA
Hey Bin we're nice brunch of strays here alright ;D more to come 8)
Okay vocals, we're going need more, just an idea 8)
https://soundcloud.com/patfeely/spin-the-bottle-and-vocal/s-ALi51
I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it out on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
In a bar named Fool's Paradise
Johnnie Walker he sits down
Orders Jim Beam and pour another round
Then he lets out a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes all around Heaven Hell
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left baby
I been half-baked out of my mind
The Prince of Wales rolls in with the Ruby Dutchess
On Moscow Mules with Rattlesnakes and White Russians
Trailing behind we got a London fog
That fills up Paradise with Salty dogs
And Johnnie Walker he lets out that Rebel Yell
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left me baby
I been half-baked out of my mind
One thing for sure Jenna we're going need a female vocalist coming in.
By the way how is that guy on the moose dragging that piano, any word from him yet ;D ;D
So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl
I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.
They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.
Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?
Paul
So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl
I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.
They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.
Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?
Paul
I like it, Paulski. Sounds great. The intent of the lyrics was to tell a story using the names of alcoholic beverages. That's all. I put a lot of time into it, but if it's not going to work it's not going to work. What sort of story would you all like to tell about how this man ended up at a bar named Fool's Paradise? The origin of this whole project was in the first verse:
I'm picking up a new old habit and chilling it on ice.
Spinning vinyl memories in this Fool's Paradise.
Does the chorus as written not have good prosody? "Rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm out dancing every night with every woman I can find."
I am still attached to that verse and the chorus (rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm still dancing every night with every woman I can find), but the rest isn't necessary if you all would like to change it. I'm good with that. Just let me know what story line you'd like to follow and we'll get to work on the lyrics. Sound good? Now I'll just add a couple of obvious thoughts on developing the storyline for possibilities:
We're starting out with a verse leading to a breakup, which was supposed to be the sad, slow beginning, but that's been tossed.
We're up-tempo for a dance number, so this is going to be a positive spin on a breakup song.
My upcoming 3-week commitment fell through, so now I'm free again for the next 3 weeks to toy with this song, or any other.
If you want female vocals I can give it a shot. I have a good range and usually can hit the right notes. Harmonies don't come as easily as they used to, but I need to work on those and it would be good practice.
Let me see what I can come up with for a positive breakup storyline. What would you all think of the subject going into fun times naming different women?
So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl
I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.
They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.
Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?
Paul
I like it, Paulski. Sounds great. The intent of the lyrics was to tell a story using the names of alcoholic beverages. That's all. I put a lot of time into it, but if it's not going to work it's not going to work. What sort of story would you all like to tell about how this man ended up at a bar named Fool's Paradise? The origin of this whole project was in the first verse:
I'm picking up a new old habit and chilling it on ice.
Spinning vinyl memories in this Fool's Paradise.
Does the chorus as written not have good prosody? "Rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm out dancing every night with every woman I can find."
I am still attached to that verse and the chorus (rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm still dancing every night with every woman I can find), but the rest isn't necessary if you all would like to change it. I'm good with that. Just let me know what story line you'd like to follow and we'll get to work on the lyrics. Sound good? Now I'll just add a couple of obvious thoughts on developing the storyline for possibilities:
We're starting out with a verse leading to a breakup, which was supposed to be the sad, slow beginning, but that's been tossed.
We're up-tempo for a dance number, so this is going to be a positive spin on a breakup song.
My upcoming 3-week commitment fell through, so now I'm free again for the next 3 weeks to toy with this song, or any other.
If you want female vocals I can give it a shot. I have a good range and usually can hit the right notes. Harmonies don't come as easily as they used to, but I need to work on those and it would be good practice.
Let me see what I can come up with for a positive breakup storyline. What would you all think of the subject going into fun times naming different women?
Okay now we got the flow on this one, to get you in there Jenna i think we're going need a cool bass line, just to get you walking in then you hit us with something like or whatever.
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every man i can find
Then we put everything we have and more to come together and just let rock 8)
So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl
I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.
They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.
Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?
Paul
I like it, Paulski. Sounds great. The intent of the lyrics was to tell a story using the names of alcoholic beverages. That's all. I put a lot of time into it, but if it's not going to work it's not going to work. What sort of story would you all like to tell about how this man ended up at a bar named Fool's Paradise? The origin of this whole project was in the first verse:
I'm picking up a new old habit and chilling it on ice.
Spinning vinyl memories in this Fool's Paradise.
Does the chorus as written not have good prosody? "Rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm out dancing every night with every woman I can find."
I am still attached to that verse and the chorus (rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm still dancing every night with every woman I can find), but the rest isn't necessary if you all would like to change it. I'm good with that. Just let me know what story line you'd like to follow and we'll get to work on the lyrics. Sound good? Now I'll just add a couple of obvious thoughts on developing the storyline for possibilities:
We're starting out with a verse leading to a breakup, which was supposed to be the sad, slow beginning, but that's been tossed.
We're up-tempo for a dance number, so this is going to be a positive spin on a breakup song.
My upcoming 3-week commitment fell through, so now I'm free again for the next 3 weeks to toy with this song, or any other.
If you want female vocals I can give it a shot. I have a good range and usually can hit the right notes. Harmonies don't come as easily as they used to, but I need to work on those and it would be good practice.
Let me see what I can come up with for a positive breakup storyline. What would you all think of the subject going into fun times naming different women?
Okay now we got the flow on this one, to get you in there Jenna i think we're going need a cool bass line, just to get you walking in then you hit us with something like or whatever.
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every man i can find
Then we put everything we have and more to come together and just let rock 8)
Oops. I forgot we reworded that chorus. Thanks for the reminder. So Mr. Country Dude sings the intro verse and Mrs. Country Gal sings the chorus? Or does she enhance it with a 3rd above? Not sure of your meaning up there.
All we're doing is trying different ways but i have to say, Mr Country Dude & Mrs Country Gal is miles of the thoughts im having, its just a bit of fun trying to put a song together and verses are going to have to be edited to fit the track, record what way you think the whole lot or parts, sorry but the part i included above is no Mrs Country Gal, she's a rocker, okay she's a Country rocker :)
Just my thoughts on this, dont come at me with that chainsaw okay ;D
All we're doing is trying different ways but i have to say, Mr Country Dude & Mrs Country Gal is miles of the thoughts im having, its just a bit of fun trying to put a song together and verses are going to have to be edited to fit the track, record what way you think the whole lot or parts, sorry but the part i included above is no Mrs Country Gal, she's a rocker, okay she's a Country rocker :)
Just my thoughts on this, dont come at me with that chainsaw okay ;D
No worries. It looks like I'm being asked to take a chainsaw to the lyrics. It's rather occupied at the moment.
OK so re-reading my last comment I think it was kind of rude :(
I should have also said what I like about this project!
Great hook!
I like the idea of a slow start then bin's track starts up - I can take a run at that plus some tickled ivories
Bin's track is really good ;D
Skub and Pat both did great work on their samples!
I like the idea of using drink names in the verses - but maybe they could be like "dates" this guy goes out on? Like one night he meets "Pink Lady" etc. Maybe even he's dancing every night with every new drink he can find ;D ;D
bin has shared his stem files (tracks) so we'll see where it goes from there ;D ;D
OK so re-reading my last comment I think it was kind of rude :(
I should have also said what I like about this project!
Great hook!
I like the idea of a slow start then bin's track starts up - I can take a run at that plus some tickled ivories
Bin's track is really good ;D
Skub and Pat both did great work on their samples!
I like the idea of using drink names in the verses - but maybe they could be like "dates" this guy goes out on? Like one night he meets "Pink Lady" etc. Maybe even he's dancing every night with every new drink he can find ;D ;D
bin has shared his stem files (tracks) so we'll see where it goes from there ;D ;D
No worries. I am a go-with-the-flow sort of being. I was justing putting in my two cents. Those are the parts of the lyrics I like best, but this is a group collaboration and I'm only one of those collaborators along for the ride. I'm also a fan of a bar named Fool's Paradise and would like this to be one of those popular bar tunes or closing time singalongs. Whatever it takes to get there is okay by me. Having said that, and with the limited closing times I've attended in my life, about the only sad last call tune I can remember is Desparado by the Eagles. The best thing is for people to leave on a high note, and if we can make something that makes people want to stay until closing time the bar owners will love it. Selling to the establishments that will be playing might be a good angle to take.
Has anyone noticed how incredibly popular this thread is? Over 1000 view hits? Interesting.
Okay 8)
Wow! I love that! Never heard it before. And, oh, wish I could sing like that.
Been watching the party hit thread. Waiting for the end result.... ;DOkay 8)
Using Paul's and my vocals and just repeating lyrics,I've attempted to give the song some shape,a template to work from. Maybe it'll help to show what amount of lyrics we need? Piano and solo stuff can be added later,but if we have a song template,then it's a datum point.
Lemme know what you think.
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA
Using Paul's and my vocals and just repeating lyrics,I've attempted to give the song some shape,a template to work from. Maybe it'll help to show what amount of lyrics we need? Piano and solo stuff can be added later,but if we have a song template,then it's a datum point.
Lemme know what you think.
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA
Love it. Sounds fantastic. I really like what you all have done with it.
Can I get a copy to play on a loop? It might help me work out some more lyrics.
Bin doesn't have the chords. I was hoping to get those earlier in this journey.
In only posted the link of me singing Wrecking Ball as a sample in case we changed direction and made this a female speaker. There aren't many cocktails with the names of women, so it's going to be tricky trying to write more verses using the three or four I can find.
Okay guys sounds nice but too nice too sweety, Davy can you just record this with lead guitar only so we can hear that flowing ROCK sound, let your fingers flow slide whatever, Paul can you do the same with piano and Bin, im no good with this musician language but can you post the chords, i got an idea ???
Sounds pretty good skub despite my sketchy vocals ;D
Think the chorus needs to come in earlier - as they say don't bore us get to the chorus!
Don't have time to record piano until the weekend - maybe it'll be all done by then!! ;D
Paul
Hey guys,
Don't know how far you've got with this, but if you're
still looking for a backing track. I've got this that might
suit.
https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP
It still needs a lot of work, but I think it's ready for some
lyrics/vocals. Let me know if you want it. ;D
Hey guys,
Don't know how far you've got with this, but if you're
still looking for a backing track. I've got this that might
suit.
https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP
It still needs a lot of work, but I think it's ready for some
lyrics/vocals. Let me know if you want it. ;D
Seeing as how we've settled on this as the backbone of the piece, how much alteration is possible at this stage of the game? Was this a jam session with your band at some point in the past? I'm curious because I'm trying to stick to regularly timed patterns for the verses and the rest, which makes it easier to build the musical parts, and I'm having a really difficult time fitting everything to the music, like it's jumping around a bit.
I've got the first part of it tabbed out like this:
A A A A
D A E A
A A D A
E A E A
D A E A ?
I've not got it in me at the moment to tab out the rest. It needs some repetition between the sections and I'm not sure it's there at the moment.
Okay guys sounds nice but too nice too sweety, Davy can you just record this with lead guitar only so we can hear that flowing ROCK sound, let your fingers flow slide whatever, Paul can you do the same with piano and Bin, im no good with this musician language but can you post the chords, i got an idea ???
There is definitely a place in this song for your narration style vocals Pat,please don't think I've been blanking you,I'm just looking for the right place. It may be a part at the start,put in before the kick off..a break in the high diddle diddle,or at the end. We'll know when it happens,so keep your powder dry dude. :)
There are 3 distinct parts Jenna.
When the drums kick in and I start singing,'I'm picking up',it's slightly different to the other verses and it doesn't repeat,so if you leave that as it is,the next part will be of more use to you.
If you make your verse lyrics fit the 'Since you left,I've been'...part,which is also the same as the 'doobee doobee' part,which is also the same as the part Paul used for the chorus. All the same chord pattern. :)
'In Paradise Jonny Walker', is different again and it repeats,it's kind of a pre chorus.
One thing we are going to have to watch is the song duration. As it sits,with the new intro we are at 4.20,so if we can work with what we have,or less that would be ideal to stop the plot dragging it's arse. :)
Wow! I love that! Never heard it before. And, oh, wish I could sing like that.
Been watching the party hit thread. Waiting for the end result.... ;DOkay 8)
Okay guys sounds nice but too nice too sweety, Davy can you just record this with lead guitar only so we can hear that flowing ROCK sound, let your fingers flow slide whatever, Paul can you do the same with piano and Bin, im no good with this musician language but can you post the chords, i got an idea ???
There is definitely a place in this song for your narration style vocals Pat,please don't think I've been blanking you,I'm just looking for the right place. It may be a part at the start,put in before the kick off..a break in the high diddle diddle,or at the end. We'll know when it happens,so keep your powder dry dude. :)
Hey Davy
I'm sorry i made you think you been blinking me out, believe me not the case at all, i guess what i was trying to say in my humorous way is that the lyrics has change from the first post of lyrics that Jenna posted, i could explain but honestly i don't want to cause any problems, if i can help out with vocals i be delighted, peace :)
Okay guys sounds nice but too nice too sweety, Davy can you just record this with lead guitar only so we can hear that flowing ROCK sound, let your fingers flow slide whatever, Paul can you do the same with piano and Bin, im no good with this musician language but can you post the chords, i got an idea ???
There is definitely a place in this song for your narration style vocals Pat,please don't think I've been blanking you,I'm just looking for the right place. It may be a part at the start,put in before the kick off..a break in the high diddle diddle,or at the end. We'll know when it happens,so keep your powder dry dude. :)
Hey Davy
I'm sorry i made you think you been blinking me out, believe me not the case at all, i guess what i was trying to say in my humorous way is that the lyrics has change from the first post of lyrics that Jenna posted, i could explain but honestly i don't want to cause any problems, if i can help out with vocals i be delighted, peace :)
Correct. Trying to get a better flow and matchup with the music for the vocalist while developing a storyline at the same time. It's very much in flux. I was under the impression the group was not happy with the original, and to be honest I wasn't planning that to be the final version. The idea was to let it evolve as we went along. Is that okay? I think it would be impossible to hit it right with the first go around, especially for someone as green as myself. ;) I was also hoping for more feedback on the lyrics, as in collaboration/editing/etc. I have no toes left, so no worries about stepping on them. Chainsaw accident. :D
Does anyone have a full-length tab/score/sketch worked out for the music track? Knowing the number of measures to each section and the chord progressions of them would be really helpful. I've never written lyrics to fit music before and thought it was typically done the other way around so the music supported the lyrics. I'm just a little wet behind the ears it seems.
Hey guys, ;D ;D
I see the party is picking up the pace, now the two front men
have the stems ;D ;D
Love the latest demo. I'm going to attempt a bit of slide for
the solo section. I like the guitar that Skub has put there, but
if I was to be brutally honest ;D I think it starts better than it
ends ;D it would be nice to have guitar/slide/piano options
to choose from there anyway.....maybe ::) ::)
Wise words from Skub regarding the length. It's already on it's
limit, if not too long. But, it ain't misbehaving yet ;D Still keeps
attention....my arse was not dragged ;D But we should be looking
at losing some time....not adding any ;D
Just my thoughts guys...it's all subjective, and it's all good ;D ;D
I doff my musical hat to you all (deep bow of gratitude) ;D
Does anyone have a full-length tab/score/sketch worked out for the music track? Knowing the number of measures to each section and the chord progressions of them would be really helpful. I've never written lyrics to fit music before and thought it was typically done the other way around so the music supported the lyrics. I'm just a little wet behind the ears it seems.
Hey guys, ;D ;D
I see the party is picking up the pace, now the two front men
have the stems ;D ;D
Love the latest demo. I'm going to attempt a bit of slide for
the solo section. I like the guitar that Skub has put there, but
if I was to be brutally honest ;D I think it starts better than it
ends ;D it would be nice to have guitar/slide/piano options
to choose from there anyway.....maybe ::) ::)
Wise words from Skub regarding the length. It's already on it's
limit, if not too long. But, it ain't misbehaving yet ;D Still keeps
attention....my arse was not dragged ;D But we should be looking
at losing some time....not adding any ;D
Just my thoughts guys...it's all subjective, and it's all good ;D ;D
I doff my musical hat to you all (deep bow of gratitude) ;D
Yo Bin. :)
I have an idea for the ending,just waiting for a reply from Pat. :)
Hey all - my what interest there seems to be in this thread ;D
Jenna - I like your latest stab at the lyrics BUT they don't fit bin's backing track. At least I can't make them fit :( So if we use them we're going to need another backdrop!
Having said that, and at the risk of p*ssing you off ;D I took a hacksaw to them and came up with what I think will fit the track. Subject to approval by the crowd and your good self of course:
Fool's Paradise
Intro verse slow (maybe spoken by the Pat-ster):
I've gone back to my old habits
Since you put my heart on ice
I'm filling up the hole you left
With some good old friends of mine...
{vs 1}
Well I got this half-baked feeling
And my brain is getting fried
The party's overheating
At the "Fool's Paradise"
{dunna bore us get to the chorus.. ;D}
I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise
Johnny Walker - takes a seat
"Party On!" He says to me
From Jimmy Beam - comes a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes round Heaven Hill
Jackie Daniels takes the stage
He grabs a mic and starts to sing
I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise
I know this party's gonna end
I'll get abandoned by my friends
We can patch it up, but until then
That old hole needs fillin' again..
So I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise
At the Fool's Paradise
Hey Jenna
Wow - that's some analysis - didn't think of any of that TBH but I'm glad you like it ;D
And of course it's subject to change if anyone has suggs ;D
Skub - had a listen to the latest - it's getting there :) Needs a haircut though! Don't ya know brush cuts R back in style for C&W music? ;D ;D
Pat - now that's what I call an OUTRO! ;D ;D
cheers guys
Paul
This is sounding good guys :)
Hey Jenna
Wow - that's some analysis - didn't think of any of that TBH but I'm glad you like it ;D
Sounding good guys ;D ;D
Loving the Intro, not sure about the Outro. Also, think it's a tad too
long. BUT it's a band ;D So whatever you guys want is fine by me.
(notice the way I sidestepped that one) ;D ;D
Anyway, nice to see us 'herd of cats' getting some direction, from
Skub .....lion of the mountain ;D I'm trying to get a mixer/producer
interested. So if anyone has any ideas, let me know and I'll send the
boys round ;D
I'd rather we settle on a final arrangement before I make a piano track but happy to add one.
As far as the haircut I think the doo-wee doobee part could maybe go - sorry - I like it but it just doesn't seem like a "rebel yell" to me ;D ;D
I'd rather we settle on a final arrangement before I make a piano track but happy to add one.
As far as the haircut I think the doo-wee doobee part could maybe go - sorry - I like it but it just doesn't seem like a "rebel yell" to me ;D ;D
You don't want a space left specifically for a piano solo then,you prefer fills here and there?
Yeah,the doobees I only stuck in there whilst trying to give it some shape and marking where a verse/solo/chorus might be. Do you want them out of the whole song Paul? I agree with you and Pat,they are a bit sugary for this track. Currently,they are behind part of the chorus too.
Paul Pie Annie added. :)
Tasty pie fo sho. 8)
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA
Okay guys not to sure about the intro im just going with the flow here, but after Paul piece we need Jenna to come in with something like "hey boys" then the music goes low high heels sound walking across a dance floor and then she hit us with her chorus, maybe.
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
With every man I can find.
Just thoughts but i think we need a kick ass moment in the song 8)
Okay guys not to sure about the intro im just going with the flow here, but after Paul piece we need Jenna to come in with something like "hey boys" then the music goes low high heels sound walking across a dance floor and then she hit us with her chorus, maybe.
I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
With every man I can find.
Just thoughts but i think we need a kick ass moment in the song 8)
The song length currently sits at a trimmed 3.35,Pat. If we wish to add any new parts,then existing sections will need to be culled to make room. There are always going to be ideas.
This is part of the difficulty with songs,the process could in theory run forever and yield many slightly different versions of the same song,but sooner,rather than later an agreed on decision will need to be made.
See what folk think. :)
Edit....just to mention also there are over 30 tracks in the song so far,so it'll be a mammoth mixing job when it comes to the final cut.
Edit....just to mention also there are over 30 tracks in the song so far,so it'll be a mammoth mixing job when it comes to the final cut.
what fecking day is it anyway ???Sounds like a good holiday Pat!
what fecking day is it anyway ???Sounds like a good holiday Pat!
Cheers to Boydie for offering to go to bat ;D and to skub who has pushed this forward at break-neck speed ;D
I'm hoping to redo my vocal parts by the end of week - I'm not on holiday (sadly!! ;D)
what fecking day is it anyway ???Sounds like a good holiday Pat!
Cheers to Boydie for offering to go to bat ;D and to skub who has pushed this forward at break-neck speed ;D
I'm hoping to redo my vocal parts by the end of week - I'm not on holiday (sadly!! ;D)
Yeah,hurry up already Paul. :P
:D
Yeah - go on then ::)Yeah,hurry up already Paul. :Pwhat fecking day is it anyway ???Sounds like a good holiday Pat!
Cheers to Boydie for offering to go to bat ;D and to skub who has pushed this forward at break-neck speed ;D
I'm hoping to redo my vocal parts by the end of week - I'm not on holiday (sadly!! ;D)
:D
Sorry its me again :) but are we having one of thoses group hug moments :'(
Just listened to the final version. I like it. I do think there could be edits made to give it more punch to drive home the joy, but I also think it sounds great as it is except maybe the outro. It seems a little out-of-place at the stage. We have come really far from the original idea and that's okay. The original lyrics were just ideas and they didn't work out all that well for writing music to match.
This was a good experience. I've never collaborated openly like this or with so many people. Giving up so much of the lyrical expression was a surprise, but I didn't know then what I know now about writing lyrics to set to music. I'll chalk it up to education and maybe work on another version with the other bits and pieces that fell by the wayside.
Thanks, Boydie, for stepping up for the final mix. I look forward to hearing the results.
Sounds pretty good for a rough mix. ;D
I would suggest "less is more" on the backing track in the final mix.
Right now there's a lot of competing tracks.
I think there is a prosody issue where I sing "party's over-heating" and skub sings "we'll patch it up...until then". I'll see if I can reword the lyrics in those spots.
It's sure catchy - I'm trying to learn another song and this one keeps interrupting ;D
I had a listen to the vocal bits you mentioned Paul,mine sounds fine,but yours is weird. :P :D;D ;D
Gimme a shout Scott if there is anything you want to know concerning transferring files from one bod to another. :)
The tracks are locked and loaded in my DAW so let the mixing commence...Be brutal boydie - esp when it comes to my tracks - oh wait there won't be anything left..
(Big thanks to SKUB for his fantastic organisation!!!)