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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Skub on May 29, 2017, 08:21:15 PM
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Yo good folks,I don't often do competitions,but on this occasion the title suggestion left me utterly void of any possible idea,so that in itself was a challenge! :D
Thinking I can't write a song about that,was enough to spur me to make an effort.
My contribution centres around the hopes and dreams of a Continental holiday,but staying in the UK..yeah,dream on bro. :D
My inner cynic riles against the mawkish and the cheese-filled humorous,resulting in the sound clip below.
I'm on my own in this one,but Boydie worked his magic in the final master.
Enjoy....hopefully. ;D
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/here-comes-summer-boydie-master/s-ymQ0w
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Ha ha!
Loved it, Davy!
Captures the tragic-comedy of the pasty folks crushed summer dreams when they really ought to know better than to get their hopes up.
Reminded me of a couple of John Cooper Clarke lines
"The rain whips the promenade
It drips on chips that turn to lard"
Great jaunty yet despondent delivery...you did a great job of riding two horses there.
Vocals reminded me of Iggy Pop a little.
Cheered me up a'plenty :)
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Yeah i like this i can see you and your band on stage on a beach playing this and the rain pouring down, great imagery, you should make a video, there'll be plenty of days when the rain will pour.
Sounds great Boydie done a great job, radio friendly, real cool song 8)
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Davy this is fabulous!
It is just so poppy & catchy & irresistible, & I didnt know you even knew those words! :)
I love the weather forecast bit, & the variations on the chorus near the end (before the real chorus itself comes back in), were beautifully managed to keep us hanging on for that moreish singalong bit.....
& while all this lovely stuff was going on, you got your chance to moan & be miserable ;D
Guitar playing was terrific of course & you make those notes float about like they were feathers
I loved it all & its the best thing youve done on your own without your band
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Love it. If Tom Petty had been born in Scunthorpe rather than Florida, he'd have written this. Guitar work was lovely and the vibrato in your voice when you sing "rain..." at 1:20 is top. Just hope it isn't a prediction for 2017.
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Vince,
Lots to like on this fine piece of pop.
Interesting chords progression underpinned by the solid rhythm provides backdrop for your lyrics and vocals.
Love the intermission and ending.
Got a touch of talking heads with the big O.
Cool
:):-)
Neil
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This was great Davy. A real slick laid back feel with a dollop of attitude. I could hear the Big O influences in there as well. As ever, I love the little guitar licks that you drop in. Lyrics, creative, ironic and inventive. Another summer smash :)
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Hi Skub, Roy Orbison meets Tom Petty! Great feel to this song, captures the British focus on weather and trying to have a good time in the rain.
Good work mate,
Cheers
Jamie
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Great little tune, thought nirvana intro and then it went all tom petty. I realise by the lyrics this was a bit tongue in cheek but that shouldn't take away from what is at heart a really good song. I loved the subtle BVs and it has been really well produced - I can't had any improvements as they aren't needed
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Nice summer tune mate. Your guitar playing reminds me of Mark Knopfler in parts...really nice laid back guitar!! The overall feel of the song was nice and laid back and chill and your vocal sat nicely in there. The lyrics are great (and funny...)
I've listened a few times now and this is really catchy. The Ohh ohhh is really nice. All in all fab work mate
Thanks
Darren
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Cool opening - indie/country feel - nice mix of genres with some nice lyrical touches - another great entry :)
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PaulAds
Ta Paul...Iggy eh? There's a first for me! I'll be stripping off on stage next and slathering myself with peanut butter! :D
Oldbutyet
Cheers Pat. You wouldn't want to watch any video I made! ;D
tina m
I love it when you use all the right words in the right order,Tina. Fabulous,terrific,catchy,irresistible,they all work for me. :D
PaulyX
Heh,heh,it's a safe prediction for any summer in Co.Antrim. ;D
Neil C
Thanks Neil,yer a wee dear. ;)
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Great tune
Love those guitars...
hints of Roy Orbison..in both guitars and vocals.
Cool sound affects
Sandeep
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Well I for one can relate to the lyrics and sentiment in this, good ole Blighty.
Loved the subtle organ at the beginning, I'd have liked to hear this featured in a less subtle way later on.
Great sound overall with some crystal clear geetars.
Upbeat, tongue in cheek fun.
Great stuff.
Yodasdad
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Hi
Cool song.
Liked the breakdown into the spoken part.
The vocal harmonies are really good.
There was a couple of times the guitar seemed to leap out of the mix a bit too much for me e.g. 46 seconds.
Captures a summery mood for sure.
Digger
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Hi Skub,
great song describing my perfect summer. Hopefully the sun we've had recently will be short lived. I agree with Digger the highs on the guitar jumped out a little too much for me. Didn't stop me enjoying your song though.
Keith
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Oh I love this mate!! 8) It's great to hear you singing it instead of one of your minions! ;D haha!
Lots of nice touches, the harmonies & the shipping news & the sound effects at the end!
A brutally honest summer song!! Great stuff man! ;D
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Hey skub
Thought I commented before - better late than never :)
Great tune - love the laid back feel and how the chorus stands out by going down - clever approach there. Quality vocals, guitar work, well pretty much everything ;D
Another strong contender for the coveted trophy. ;D ;D
Paul
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pompeyjazz
Thanks for the thumbs up,John. :)
Jamie
Cheers Jamie,I hope I haven't broken the summer. :(
Andyb
Glad you enjoyed it,Andy. :)
Darren1664
Big Knopfler fan here,you are right. 8)
Morefrog Jones
Ta MFJ. :)
Movin Flavour
Thanks Sandeep,I can't escape the big O comparisons,it would seem. ;D
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Yodasdad
The reason you don't hear more of the organ YD,is because it's using the computer keyboard,not the best for getting frisky...plus I'm no keyboard player anyway. :D
digger72
I had a further listen for the guitar jumping out in places,I think I know what you mean. I play guitar using my nails and sometimes when I'm feeling the music,I get a bit heavy using my thumbnail. I'll watch for that,or maybe use more compression to tame the spikes. Ta for the input. :)
diademgrove
Cheers Keith,feedback noted. :)
LostBoy
Ha! If I had your pipes Leo,I'd happily sing all my songs. ;D
Paulski
Thank you kind sir. :)
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A great pop song and great guitars. Everything on the money there are a few places in the mix where the guitar and/or vocals get a bit too up front for my taste but only minor issues really. Vocals are probably the weak link here, not that they are bad but the rest of the track is so fab that it leavs a little more to be desired from the vocals. Easier said than done though (I know, been there, done that..) I guess all we can do is to make the best of the gifts we were given and you sure do so all in all: loved this!
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A great pop song and great guitars. Everything on the money there are a few places in the mix where the guitar and/or vocals get a bit too up front for my taste but only minor issues really. Vocals are probably the weak link here, not that they are bad but the rest of the track is so fab that it leavs a little more to be desired from the vocals. Easier said than done though (I know, been there, done that..) I guess all we can do is to make the best of the gifts we were given and you sure do so all in all: loved this!
It's the truth man. I've never liked my voice,but I give it my best shot at the time.
Ta for the honest review. :)
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Heya Skub,
Can't believe no-one else has mentioned the lack of lyrics! :P
Into guitar grabbed me straight away, and carried on to throughout the whole song to be fair.
Really enjoyed the lyrics too, a great comical but real and relatable view of the English Sumner, "3 months of rain" ;D
Weather report really worked somehow too, great use of audio clips there.
Backing vocals sounded fantastic and the sound quality and mix stood out as super quality all around.
Great listen.
Cheers,
Scott
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Ta Scott,good to see you about laddie. :)
It's a flawed submission,because it's just myself,but I hope to learn from that.
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Wow ;D ;D Amazing song Skub.
Think this is one of your best. Lovely relaxed, laid back feel.
Thought it was a happy, uplifting song. Made me smile a lot ;D ;D
The weather forecast was an inspired touch, worked really
well. Nice arrangement, really liked the style of the whole
thing. Great playing, and I think the vocals were the best
I've heard of yours.....top marks old chap ;D ;D
Another song that reflects the high standard on display here.
AWESOME ;D ;D
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Ta Bin,Alway glad to have your approval,it means a lot. :)
Thanks for the thumbs up on the vocals,I know for a cert that I am the world's OKAYist singer! :D
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Listened a few times now and nothing much to say except I really liked it! The lyrics and delivery have that laid back resignation and super guitar as always.
Nice and different (but sadly familiar) take on the competition theme!
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Hi Skub,
The song is relaxing,and also with a catchy groove.
High-quality production, loved it, clean recording and mixing, loved the 'oooh' vowel sound prior to the hook.
Good idea to add that sampled radio weather broadcast.
Cosy song and fun to listen to.
Kris
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Love this track, Skub, despite the subject matter ::) I can totally relate. I remember summers as a kid like that :( the lyrics are totally tongue in cheek and you've done an amazing job of fitting the music.
Loved the oh's and vocals! the weather broadcast adds the perfect tough and the outro rain ;)
A very clean track and a totally enjoyable listen :)
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What I like:
The tongue-in-cheek (I think?) topic and how well the words and melody go together. It's all smooth and fits well.
What could be better:
I know there's always something that could be improved, always. But there's nothing about this I'm interested in changing. I like it as is.
Vicki
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Interesting that a fairly upbeat tune can be soaked in melancholy with the lyric! Liked the phrasing of the lyric here especially and the shiver/deliver rhyme.
Nice Knopfler sound to the lead guitar bits...loved that little solo.
Backing vox are very good in this one...must remember that 'Oh...oh' or something like that...way-hey-hey-hey for example can work just as well as 'proper' words!
Very nice low-key upbeat song Davy. Oh yes...the overall sound is great too!