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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Vintage54 on May 13, 2017, 08:33:42 PM
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Quiet on the lyric front today, so here's a new one. Just a three chord strummer from the broken side of love.
Flying solo once again.
I was happy flying solo
Till love blew me off course
A brown eyed beauty came my way
I saddled up that horse
I rode her cross the country
From marriage to divorce
And now i'm flying solo once again
She used to call me honey
I called her Endless Rose
The honey sure was flowing
Every time we lost our clothes
The way she took me by the hand
Curled up all my toes
But now i'm flying solo once again
Flying solo once again
Trying to rise above the rain
Leaving all the sad clouds down below
Flying solo once again
Taking whisky for the pain
And wondering where the sweeter roses grow
The days were like the summer
Till summer was adjourned
She was curling someone else's toes
While my back was turned
The heat became oppressive
I got my feelings burned
And now i'm flying solo once again
I should have listened to my head
Took my own advice
I should have seen it coming
But her lips were like a vice
She played the part of Judas
I felt like Jesus Christ
And now i'm flying solo once again
Flying solo one again
Trying to rise above the rain
Leaving all the sad clouds down below
Flying solo once again
Taking whisky for the pain
And wondering where the sweeter flowers grow.
Vintage54
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Hi Vintage,
works for me up to verse 4 (?). In the first 3 verses and the chorus you show us nothing to suggest that love was wilting. So it comes as a shock that you had your doubts.
In my head I hear the 3rd verse as a middle 8, slowed down with hint of anger. The chorus is strong enough to be sang twice at the end if time is a problem.
Feel free to ignore me if you disagree.
Keith
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I love it Vintage. :)
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It kinda reminds me of a Tom Petty song?
And the Jesus / Judas Iscariot line made me cringe.
However, I loved its sadness and loss of hope re True Love... and its very own fickle/frail existence.
Jackdaw1888:-)
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Vintage
Always enjoy your writes and i felt the song structure - 2 verses and then a chorus, 2 verses then a chorus work well.
More quiet days please
:)
Neil
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Hey Vintage
What is not to like here?
You get to the hook fast, it's well set up, and you stay faithful to it through-out.
My three hook rules have been honoured! ;D
Not sure about the Judas/Christ line - I mean I don't understand it as a non-Christian ;D
But I'm going to hell anyway so no bother there.
Love the structure and wordsmithing.
stellar!
Paul