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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Bernd on May 05, 2017, 03:09:33 PM
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fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
why are you doing what you do
you've laid all our secrets bare
we're the topic of the day
just go to the market square
to listen what the people say
our weaknesses, our private life,
all our foibles, all our faults
public where the gossip's rife
not a chance to call a halt
fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
why are you doing what you do
our kids scorn of the class
while we're the scorn of our town
hear them snicker where we pass
did you intend to play their clown?
fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
make fools of our children, too
when I fell in love with you
I found you open-hearted and ouspoken
I'd no idea there'd be a risk
of a family life out in the open
fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
make fools of our children, too
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The chorus is absolutely brilliant in my opinion. Easily the best lyric I've seen from you.
And the verses are just strong enough to support the chorus without competing with it. Can't find a thing I think needs improving on this lyric.
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Hey mate...I agree with hard twist...the chorus is brilliant! I like the verses too and I think they work well with the chorus....look forward to hearing them too music
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Thank you,
praise always goes down well, doesn't it ;-)
I wasn't quite sure if the lines "fool for one - fool for two" would get across. It looks like they will. I'm happy :-)
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I wasn't quite sure if the line "fool for one - fool for two" would get across. It looks like they will. I'm happy :-)
Most definitely! Hooked me in straight off the bat!!
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Been said. Great chorus and good supporting versus. No nits from me. Just needs to be turned into a song.
Mike
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great lyrics
quite vivid
I need the hear the song
I hope it's not autobiographical
All the best. Rightly.