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Title: I Got This
Post by: Paulski on February 19, 2017, 03:56:39 AM

Hi guys - been a while since I've actually completed something.
This is a short country ballad.
Many thanks to the lyrics forum for their help and encouragement   ;D
Comments and suggestions are welcomed!
cheers
Paul

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/i-got-this

I Got This
Copyright (c) Tennyson Road Productions

Your Dad took me aside
To ask if I'd provide
The life his princess ought to get
I started to reply
But you overheard, and you sighed, and said:
"I Got This"

Two years down the line
Our tiny baby crying
You grew so tired from watching it
My new role seemed so strange
I'd never done a diaper change, but I said
"I Got This"

I guess that's what life is
A steady string of tests
No-one can ever stop it
When one of us gets overwhelmed
The other takes the helm, and says:
"I Got This"

The year my brother died
I cried, and cried.. and I cried
And I couldn't climb on top of it
But you held me through my pain
In yet another way of sayin'
"I Got This"

I guess that's what life is
A steady stream of stress
No-one can put a stop to it,
But for our love to succeed
Three words are all it needs
"I Got This"

Honey, our love will succeed
Just three words - that's all we need:
"I Got This"

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: CaliaMoko on February 19, 2017, 05:08:33 AM

Hey Paul,

Disclaimer: It's late, I've been miserably sick, I should be asleep, and I've only listened once.

It sounds like "Help Me Make It Through the Night". Maybe it's just me, but it seems to sound a lot like it. But parts of it sound like "I Did It My Way". And then the "I got this" part sounds like another song, but I can't remember which one right now.

So, I guess that means you're working under the influence of popular artistic, ummm, influences. Ugh. Sorry. Like I said, I should be sleeping.

It's a very pleasant sounding song; I only noticed one small "but-chew". I like the message and mood of the song. Your voice really is suited to it; I like the key change. I always like those little lifts one gets from that type of key change. And your voice just seems to go up forever. Awesome.

That's all for tonight.
Vicki

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: LAquila on February 19, 2017, 08:03:04 AM

Such a lovely tune and sentiment, Paul. As Vicki says, it's reminiscent of some other great songs but that's ok.

It's such a great story you tell here...joyful and optimistic. Thanks.

L

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Martinswede on February 19, 2017, 08:11:21 AM

Hi Paul!

Nice mellow tune. My knowledge of the genre is limited
so I don't hear any similar songs. Too lazy to check the
ones Vicki mentioned.

The key change works. You could have had a smoother
build up to it maybe.

Cheers,
- Martin

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: shadowfax on February 19, 2017, 09:17:01 AM

Great story..great ballad, the fact that it sounds like something else makes it more commercial IMHO.. :)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Jamie on February 19, 2017, 02:37:37 PM

Hi Paul, nailed the vocal! An Authentic melody and arrangement for the genre. Typical classic Paul ballad!
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Wicked Deeds on February 19, 2017, 07:49:53 PM

Paul, I really love this song.  It is one of the best that I have heard on this forum.  It is instantly memorable, something that I know you strive to achieve from your recent post at the bar.  Absolute quality my friend.  I'm not going to analyse the production, which is very good by the way.  I simply want to say this is a wonderful, wonderful song - it reminds me of why I love country music!

thanks

Paul

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Yodasdad on February 20, 2017, 01:58:33 AM

You always tell such a vivid story with your lyrics and this is no exception.

This is a great track. If you'd written this 40 or 50 years ago, Porter Wagner or the like would have snapped it up in no time and I'd have grown up listening to it on my dads tape collection.

Well done

Yodasdad

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: adamfarr on February 20, 2017, 07:18:25 AM

Hi Paul - I think this seems like your natural home here. What really stands out here is the way the words, rhythm and music gel so well together.

There is an easy style to this which plays down the subtle way that you've chosen the words for their sounds as well.

And liking the acoustic guitar - the lead sounded like it really wanted to be a slide...!

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Skub on February 20, 2017, 11:49:52 AM

Yo Paul.

The start and verse remind me a lot of Garth Brooks,Tomorrow never comes,but probably not close enough to get you into any bother,after all,country music does follow a pattern.

Well played and sung and produced Paul.  :)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Paulski on February 20, 2017, 03:47:13 PM

Thank you all for listening and commenting  ;D

@CaliaMoko - appreciate the kind words, Vicki and hoping you're feeling better! I must confess the similarities to other songs is intentional (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=12616.0) - my bad! So far, I've been told the melody sounds just like:

Help Me Make It Through the Night - Kris Kristopherson
My Way - Paul Anka
Tomorrow Never Comes - Garth Brooks
No Reply - Beatles
Something Changed - Pulp

Now, if I copied one of those, well then, they must have copied one another, so how many wrongs does it take to make a right? Speaking of which:

Quote

If two wrong don't make a right, what do two rights make? - An airplane!  ;D ;D

But I digress - thanks again for commenting!

@LAquila

Cheers - and I'm glad you heard some optimism !

@Martinswede

Thanks Martin - very kind of you. Yeah key changes are always tough to "introduce". Will look at that.

@shadowfax

Cheers Kevin - as they say good songs are borrowed, great songs are stolen  ;D Not saying this is great so it must be borrowed..

@Jamie

Thanks Jamie - means a lot coming from a non-country fan.  ;D

@Wicked Deeds

Cheers Paul - humbled by those comments. Glad to have ya back in these parts of the web.

@Yodasdad

Thanks for that - it probably was written back then but I decided to write it again  ;D

@adamfarr

Ah so great to get a thumbs up from a lyrics pro - thanks Adam. Years ago that would have been a steel guitar but I thought I'd throw some grit in it to keep it from being too syrupy  ;D

@Skub

I've never heard that Garth Brooks tune! In fact I've never heard of Garth Brooks or the Beatles for that matter  ;D Thanks for the kind words  ;D

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: JonDavies on February 20, 2017, 05:04:50 PM

A great ballad - when I read the lyrics I was wondering what the tune would be. Solid vocals, I love the swelling strings as well.

I have to admit when I was listening to it the song "Something Changed" by Pulp sprang to mind. I think there are just some motifs in the melody that are very popular and remind people of other songs - nothing wrong with that

Really liked this one

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: boolio on February 20, 2017, 06:48:24 PM

Hey Paul,

This pulls at the heart strings like only a good country song can you convey the sentiment superbly well and the melody is as strong as any I've heard on here.

If Mr Brooks released this it would be a hit and then some!

Phil

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: pompeyjazz on February 20, 2017, 09:26:35 PM

Good to hear you back Paul, lovely sentiments cleverly done in your own unique style. Loved the dual lead solo and your vocals are always powerful yet warm

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Skub on February 20, 2017, 10:35:49 PM

Quote from: Paulski on February 20, 2017, 03:47:13 PM

@Skub

I've never heard that Garth Brooks tune! In fact I've never heard of Garth Brooks or the Beatles for that matter  ;D Thanks for the kind words  ;D

 :D

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: IronKnee on February 20, 2017, 11:24:50 PM

Well....I like it (but, I think I've already mentioned that  ;) )
                                                                          -T

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Neil C on February 22, 2017, 08:56:02 PM

Paul,
Classic tune, classic you. Smart words as I expect.
You make your tunes sound catchy, big and familiar, then wang a key change or layered rock guitars all in under 2.30. Respect
 :)
Neil 

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: digger72 on February 23, 2017, 07:17:26 PM

Hi Paul,

You sound so comfortable in this genre.
I got whiffs of If Tomorrow Never Comes. I only know the Ronan Keating version though.
Some really good guitar work, especially towards the end.

A very confident and well written piece.


Digger

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: danproducerman on February 23, 2017, 08:10:10 PM

Very classic old school feel to this country ballad. Simple but effective sentiment. Like others said I also like the key change, not overly drastic, felt natural....good work!

Could imagine this playing in the bars of the mid west and/or texas :-)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Morefrog Jones on February 23, 2017, 10:00:13 PM

nice vocals - good story telling :)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: crystalsuzy on February 24, 2017, 08:41:45 AM

I love the sentiment in this song Paul  :) Such a lovely tribute to your better half  :-* I love the vocal delivery, and the space and simplisty suit the emotional content :) Sweet harmonies, perfectly placed :)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Mike67 on February 24, 2017, 12:33:47 PM

Beautiful song and a nice sentiment, and it sounds effortless.  Production is great.  It does remind me a little of Guadaladaladaloops posted a few days ago by Micky Plankton, but that might just be me.

Mike

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Paulski on February 25, 2017, 03:50:52 PM

Sorry to bump - time to thank some folks

@JonDavies

Thanks for the kind words - I'll check out that song too :)

@boolio

Hi Phil - thx for that - would be nice to get the royalties on a Garth Brooks hit :)

@pompeyjazz

Thanks John - esp about the lead solo - guitar is always a challenge for me  ;D

@IronKnee

Cheers Tom - can never hear that sentiment too much  ;D

@Neil C

Hey Neil thanks for listening and the nice review - yeah I figure if the chord prog is simple like this one I'd better throw some arrangement interest in there. Glad you noticed.  ;D

@Digger

cheers digger - yes I probably stole from that song - though honestly can't remember hearing it  ;D

@danproducerman

classic - love to hear that! Glad you liked the lift too! Thanks for commenting  ;D

@Morefrog Jones

cheers and thanks!

@crystalsuzy

Better half? Wha? I guess you're right, she is.
Nice to get a thumbs up from the feminine side - thanks CS

@Mike67

cheers Mike - now I better go listen to that one too!

Thanks to everyone!

Paul

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: montydog on February 27, 2017, 11:24:31 AM

Hi Paul,

I love country music so I was pretty sure I'd like it given your gold disc lined forum walls. It is old fashioned (which is good), kind of reminiscent of other songs (but not any one in particular so you get to keep out of the courts) and well up to your usual standards. The only fly in the otherwise blemish free ointment is that key change which is just a tad clunky. Very clever and confident songwriting.

M

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: PTCruiser1801 on February 27, 2017, 05:21:13 PM

Paul,

Wow...without a doubt one of the best songs I have ever heard on this forum (and I don't mean any disrespect to anyone else!!!)...full of great lyrics and an amazing message!

Fantastic work all round...and so true! The verse about the brother dying was powerful man...really well done!

Paul :)

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: tboswell on February 28, 2017, 10:20:26 AM

Caught this one on soundcloud a while back. Damn fine bit of songwriting!

Lovely stuff.

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: rightly on March 01, 2017, 10:21:09 PM

excellent ballad

I've often been surprised by your song
I don't think I'veever done a key change (not intentionally, lol)

I wonder if this is a true story?
good job!

Title: Re: I Got This
Post by: Paulski on March 03, 2017, 01:55:23 PM

@montydog - cheers Alan - yes, seems the lift works for some but not all. Maybe it's the lead guitar making for a transition that's a bit rough - will look again. Thanks for the kind words  ;D

@PTCruiser1801 - very kind of you to say that - thanks! The brother verse is a true story so I'm glad it seemed strong for you.

@tboswell - thanks Tom - much appreciated coming from you  ;D

@Rightly - Only the second half is true - the first verse is just tapping into a stereotype (I might change that...) Thanks for listening and commenting.

Thanks again everyone
Paul