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Songwriter Forum => Collaborations => Topic started by: Mike67 on February 16, 2017, 10:11:41 PM
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I've tried putting a melody to this lyric, but it doesn't really work for me. Anyone want to collaborate?
Walk Away
I was born to be a liar
I was born to be a thief
Nothing more than a footprint in the sand
That the waves come washing over
And that slowly fade away
I hope one day that you will understand
That I tried a different melody
And I tried a different chord
But the tune I wrote just sounded out of key
And when the song was over
And the crowd looked at their feet
I knew that I could never change
And that I'd have to set you free.
Chorus:
Turn away, turn away, turn away
Leave me be, why won't you turn away
Walk away. walk away, walk away
Leave me be, just walk away
Well I was never on the right side
Cos I was always in the wrong
But no-one ever tried to understand
I just needed some attention
And when nothing came my way
I wrote it out in bold among the footprints in the sand
Wash away, wash away, wash away,
Leave me clean, why don't you wash away
Walk away, walk away, walk
Leave me be, why don't you wash away
Well I guess I'll hit the road again
And I'll drift from town to city
You said I never cared enough to change
Well with every step I take, my dear,
the pain just cuts me harder
I hope one day you'll realise how much it hurt to walk away
Walk away walk away, walk away
Leave me be, why don't you walk away
Walk away walk away, walk away
Leave me be, why can't you walk away
Mike
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Hi Mike. Vocal melodies come pretty easy to me, and this one is BEGGING for a melody as I read it.
I won't attempt anything but an a-capella melody because it's almost certain you're a better musician than I am. (I think I remember reading in one of your posts that you actually understand chord progressions etc.)
Let me know if that is acceptable, and I can knock this out in an hour.
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Go for it. :D
Mike
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Hi,
Superb lyrics - looking forward to hearing the results
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Thanks Boolio,
Looking forward to hearing it too.
Mike
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Hi Mike
I hope you don't mind but I took the liberty of putting some music to your lyrics (which I really like !)
You can have a listen here... https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away
Would appreciate your honest feedback.
Thanks
Ed
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Hi Mike
I hope you don't mind but I took the liberty of putting some music to your lyrics (which I really like !)
You can have a listen here... https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away
Would appreciate your honest feedback.
Thanks
Ed
Hey Ed
It sounds to me like your guitar and vocal are too close together if you know what i mean, your guitar is an instrument so too is your vocal, let them do their own thing 8)
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Thanks for the feedback oldbutyet
I think I know what you mean. I think the guitar is too in sync with vocal and perhaps less will work better.
I'll play around with it.
Ed
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It sounds to me like your guitar and vocal are too close together if you know what i mean, your guitar is an instrument so too is your vocal, let them do their own thing Cool
I must say that I disagree completely
I think you have done an amazing job setting those wonderful lyrics to music!
It sounds like the music & lyrics were written for each other and I would NEVER have guessed that the music was added after the lyrics were written
The overall performance and song sound AMAZING and it is a FANTASTIC vocal performance that really communicates the emotion of the lyric
I can hear a full production of this song in my head and it could be very modern pop/rock sounding with commercial potential IMHO
I think this is an AMAZING Collab and definitely the type of music I would enjoy listening to
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Great work Ed, and I love what you've done with the words. You've definitely made the song yours.
Mike
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Boydie and Mike
Thank you both so much for your feedback.
Boydie - You've certainly inspired me to take the track to the next stage of the process. I look forward to sharing version 2!
Mike - I'm delighted that you feel I've done justice to your wonderful lyrics. If you have any more "spare" lyrics, I'd be only too happy to try and add some music.
Ed
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Ok. I'll send some through over the next few days.
Mike
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Thanks Mike.
Here's v2 of the song, hope you like what I've done to it.
https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away-v2
Again, would welcome your feedback.
Thanks
Ed
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Hi Ed, absolutely love it. I could hear from the first version that you were on to something, but this version absolutely nails it. Boydie's right, I could see this doing really well. More lyrics coming you way for sure.
Mike
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Mike
I can't tell you how chuffed I am that you like it.
Look forward to more successful collaborations!
Ed
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Thanks Mike.
Here's v2 of the song, hope you like what I've done to it.
https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away-v2
Again, would welcome your feedback.
Thanks
Ed
Far better Ed really flowing nicely guitar and vocals really working well together, had me leaning into the screen to the lyrics, great collab guys great job done here, more of the same 8)
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Ed
You've done a great job on those lyrics melody & arrangement.
Best wishes with this
Royston
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Thanks Oldbutyet and Royston, really appreciate the encouraging feedback.
Ed
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Nice job with this Deadwood.
As Boydie said, you can't tell the lyrics and melody were created separately.
Yodasdad
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Thanks Yodasdad. Appreciate the feedback.
Ed
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Great job guys, love the lyrics, and the track is great, I particularly like the harmonies in the chorus
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This is superb!! Really fantastic calloboration...the music does the lyrics so much justice and I literally hung to every word. I must that you're voice is really easy to the ear and I loved the sound of the guitar. As for the lyrics - brilliant and fascinating!
This is such a good track!
Darren
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Thanks Mikey and Darren. It was a pleasure putting music to Mike's excellent lyrics. It was one of those special moments where it just came together so naturally.
Mike and I are working on some other bits and pieces so watch this space.
Ed
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Thanks Mike.
Here's v2 of the song, hope you like what I've done to it.
https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away-v2
Again, would welcome your feedback.
Thanks
Ed
I'm very interested. But Soundcloud won't let me hear your songs. I'm wondering if your settings are allowing only members of Soundcloud to listen.
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Thanks Mike.
Here's v2 of the song, hope you like what I've done to it.
https://soundcloud.com/ejomusic/walk-away-v2
Again, would welcome your feedback.
Thanks
Still won't let me listen.
Ed
I'm very interested. But Soundcloud won't let me hear your songs. I'm wondering if your settings are allowing only members of Soundcloud to listen.
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yes, I can't get to it either.