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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: TheButcher on November 14, 2016, 09:37:02 AM
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Hello:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/104187875/Ghost-Ship.mp3
ghost ship
the snow is falling on your scars
the wind is blowing through my heart
i fell asleep since we part
if i woke up today i know you d still be afar
on a ghost ship on a frozen sea
standin on the railing
waving her arms to me goodbye
you know i loved you so
but thats so long ago
staring at the sky, i know
time to let go
thank you for listening.
B
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This is definitely my sort of music, reminds me of longing for lost love in the middle of winter, cold and chilly but somehow reassuring.
Well played and sung.
Impressed,
Keith
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really good.
very sad.
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Very moving and melodic song.
Great guitars vocals and love the production.
Good guitar solo too.
Sandeep
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Got to me this did, quite beautiful actually...
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Makes me think of some stuff David Gilmore does, except maybe for the guitar style.
Not so keen of the vocal effects in the end, but that's just me. Overall a great song.
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Excellent song Butcher...very moving. Love the whole performance, it really is delivered well and the song itself is wonderful. You´ve got some great guitars going on here - extremely tasteful with not a note put in there for the sake of it (something very difficult to find with guitarists). Reminded me in places of Radiohead, but much better.
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Hi Daniel, very nicely constructed and produced,love the instrumentation and arrangement. Vocals up to your normal high standard. Radiohead ish, which is a good thing! I can hear what you were trying to do with the vocal effect and it very nearly aces it, but not quite. Excellent stuff!
Well done!
Cheers
Jamie
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Really, really nice production, well done.
I love the guitar work and nice vocals effects. Pretty hard to find vault, excellent
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Great ambience Butcher. I really like the feel of this. It's mellow sad yet powerful and strong and well thought out
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I thought this was quite beautiful & mesmerising..
the way you recorded it with the vocal effects & the minimal guitar was exquisite & made it realy atmospheric
the lyrics read a bit awkwardly but are fine in the song so it didnt realy matter (i guess english isnt your first language) but they work very well & are very moving
I thought it was beautifully sad & romantic & totally fabulous! :)
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Hi Butcher,
This has a wonderful ambiance to it - lots of space and delicate, subtle little things going on. Beautiful vocal and a lovely haunting, spare lyric.
Mesmeric as someone else said.
A lovely thing indeed.
M
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Lovely stuff. I thought of Lambchop a couple of times while listening.
Well done!
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diademgrove
This is definitely my sort of music, reminds me of longing for lost love in the middle of winter, cold and chilly but somehow reassuring.
Well played and sung.
Impressed,
:) very nice comment. thank you
Rightly
really good.
very sad.
haha; yes SAD - i love sad music. t y bro
Movin Flavour
Very moving and melodic song.
Great guitars vocals and love the production.
Good guitar solo too.
funny you mention the guitar solo. it was more like a rhythm guitar melody thing that played throughout the whole song (in the old version) - well...:)
thank you for the nice words
shadowfax
Got to me this did, quite beautiful actually...
:) thank you
AndyV
Makes me think of some stuff David Gilmore does, except maybe for the guitar style.
Not so keen of the vocal effects in the end, but that's just me. Overall a great song.
thank you.
The thing bout the vocal fx is:
It s a vocal pitcher. you can pick any note, which made me create this new melody. so, the composition doesn t exist without that fx. of course it s a matter of personal taste.
tx a lot for your time.
MartynRich
Excellent song Butcher...very moving. Love the whole performance, it really is delivered well and the song itself is wonderful. You´ve got some great guitars going on here - extremely tasteful with not a note put in there for the sake of it (something very difficult to find with guitarists). Reminded me in places of Radiohead, but much better.
Wow!! well, yeah, i m not a big fan of guitar solos...so, i try to play calm.
sounds like you really liked the song, wich is great :) tx man
Jamie
Hi Daniel, very nicely constructed and produced,love the instrumentation and arrangement. Vocals up to your normal high standard. Radiohead ish, which is a good thing! I can hear what you were trying to do with the vocal effect and it very nearly aces it, but not quite. Excellent stuff!
Well done!
Cheers
Jamie
thanks a lot Jamie.
kevysc
Really, really nice production, well done.
I love the guitar work and nice vocals effects. Pretty hard to find vault, excellent
haha; then just don t find vault... :) thank you
pompeyjazz
Great ambience Butcher. I really like the feel of this. It's mellow sad yet powerful and strong and well thought out
mellow, sad, powerful and strong....wow, that s a great review. makes me proud. thank you
tinam
I thought this was quite beautiful & mesmerising..
the way you recorded it with the vocal effects & the minimal guitar was exquisite & made it realy atmospheric
the lyrics read a bit awkwardly but are fine in the song so it didnt realy matter (i guess english isnt your first language) but they work very well & are very moving
I thought it was beautifully sad & romantic & totally fabulous! Smiley
yes, i heard the "atmospheric" thing quite often....for anyone who s interested in the technical aspect:
i take one of the main midi melodies, a piano or so what; (should be midi, cause it s more accurate - shouldn't t be chords, makes it messy).
Then i do A LOT of time stretching and reversing...you find really crazy melodies and sounds; and the always kinda fit.
as you know, i m working on the lyrics thing :)
tx a lot for your nice words and your time.
montydog
This has a wonderful ambiance to it - lots of space and delicate, subtle little things going on. Beautiful vocal and a lovely haunting, spare lyric.
Mesmeric as someone else said.
A lovely thing indeed.
man...so many great comments...thank you Alan.
JolieThePassenger
Lovely stuff. I thought of Lambchop a couple of times while listening.
Well done!
THANK YOU and thank you everybody !
B
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Like everyone else, I really like this. For me there is a Dave Gilmour influence but original too, not a copy. DG is one of my influences too, and a kind of hero, you've done a great job. I think you pulled off those vocals effects perfectly. I would enjoy hearing more in this style - it has actually inspired me to do something along these lines for my next project. Not easy to record acoustic guitars this well.
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Thank you Bill;
Dave Gilmour influence but original too, not a copy
funny; gotta listen to some of his stuff; never heard of him :)
I would enjoy hearing more in this style - it has actually inspired me to do something along these lines for my next projec
thank you - PM me if you want info bout the vocal FX stuff.
I kinda worked a little more on the mix...no big deal, just to have the final version online.
Peace
B.
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/104187875/Ghost-Ship.mp3
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i like it!! touching and makes you picture someone in your head
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Hi,
Lovely atmosphere and melody with fabulously recorded acoustic which matched your strong vocal.
I would love to get half that production quality into my recordings!
Superb
Phil
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Yo Butcher.
The start reminds me of that old vampire song Lady Eleanor by Lindisfarne.
It's a difficult format to pull off successfully,but your obvious confidence shines through and carries the song in a convincing manner.
A cool,well worked out piece. :)
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Lovely acoustic and delicate soundscape, all supporting your vocals.
Evocative and restrained.
:)
Neil
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Neil, Skub, boolio and rikgrimesisdead,
Thank you very much for your time and support. Boom !
Evocative and restrained
mhhh...
vampire song Lady Eleanor by Lindisfarne
couldn't t find the song but i LOVE Vampires !! :)
It's a difficult format to pull off successfully,but your obvious confidence shines through and carries the song in a convincing manner.
Wow; that s a great compliment....
i like it!! touching and makes you picture someone in your head
TY everyone
Love-Peace-sadness-and-merry-x-mas-time
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Your google skills are weak Butcher! :D
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I really like this
The vocal is perfect for the track
I like the space in the mix - although I think there is room to create some more space by EQing some of the elements a bit more
I wasn't a fan of the processed backing vocals - it took me out of the "acoustic" feel of the track, although I understand this is an artistic choice so not really a criticism
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Great sound / production. Well constructed and arranged song. Lyrics suit the song.
Richard
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Very good indeed, I'd be proud of this butcher. Everything works beautifully, the melody, harmony, arrangement and production, even the vocoder/auto tune type effects on the vocals work and feel like they should be there.
Impressive.
Yodasdad
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Hi Butcher,
Great soundscape. Love the atmosphere behind the guitar.
A bit Radiohead, a bit Aqualung, etc - a really cool indie sound.
I like the weird vocal effect - it works great in contrast with your normal vocal. Carries the song perfectly.
Arrangement and production is spot on for me.
Brill stuff.
Digger
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Hi,
Excellent work...as usual from you...Great heartbeat captures and propels your lovely vocals straight to their mark!! Spacious and spare at the same time...Another beautiful creation...
igg
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Hi there - great stuff. The lyrics are really poetic and I like the fact that there's no very obvious chorus or hook. It makes it much more direct and "connective".
The music really created a mood to match. The drums are really really subtle which I also like - sometimes you don't even know they're there but I am sure they still serve their purpose. Great harmonies and I think the effects were quite daring, distinctive and efffective.
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adamfarr
I like the fact that there's no very obvious chorus or hook. It makes it much more direct and "connective".
thank you; yes; no real chorus here. tx a lot 4 the nice words.
igg
Excellent work...as usual from you...Great heartbeat captures and propels your lovely vocals straight to their mark!! Spacious and spare at the same time...Another beautiful creation...
...as usual....haha. yeah, you should listen to my iPhone outtakes....haha.
thank yo very much; very appreciated.
digger72
I like the weird vocal effect - it works great in contrast with your normal vocal. Carries the song perfectly.
glad that most people liked it...it s just so much fun, playing around with these crazy harmonies...thank you digger.
Yodasdad
Very good indeed, I'd be proud of this butcher. Everything works beautifully, the melody, harmony, arrangement and production, even the vocoder/auto tune type effects on the vocals work and feel like they should be there.
Impressive.
boom! tx so much
richmon
Great sound / production. Well constructed and arranged song. Lyrics suit the song.
Richard
thank you Richard.
Boydie
I wasn't a fan of the processed backing vocals - it took me out of the "acoustic" feel of the track, although I understand this is an artistic choice so not really a criticism
well, yeah, gotta try new stuff...so. tx a lot Boydie :)
Skub
Your google skills are weak Butcher! Cheesy
or too lazy....checking it out now.
TX a lot everyone
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Wow, this is great! Absolutely radio ready, sounds like a lot of the pro music I am usually listening to.
Very cool stuff!
Bye Wolfi
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Nice work - Really enjoyed it.
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Don't know how I missed this one....I thought I had already posted!! :-[
Anyways..... asuperb tune and a lovely production. For me, a sorta Bowie meets ELO at the studio.
Very cool, Butcher.....a great tune!
-T
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Great lyrics and nice chord hunting chord progressing topped off with the twinkly melody behind it. Your voice fits the song perfectly and the build up flows very nicely.
Great winter tune :-D
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Really like this, probably because I think it sounds a bit Radiohead. :)
Initially I thought it might be a bit of dull with just a strummed guitar but the production quickly took it off somewhere else.
Great arrangement and playing. Like the harmonies and the electronic voices. Love it. ;D
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Hi Butcher, I liked the track a lot. Heavy hearted and engaging. One for letting your mind drift away with.
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Hi,
Good song and very well played, also the production is good.
refuredrevival