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Title: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: dannyboy2020 on September 26, 2016, 02:21:36 AM

So I'm not a singer, but I enjoy putting melodies together; I'd like opinions on the melody and how the vocal melody might be possibly altered to maximize the appeal of the song. I'd also love to find a singer willing to take a crack at this; I'd love to colaborate with someone who sees potential here:

Thank you for the critique, be harsh if you have to, you won't hurt my feelings, promise

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Yeah, I recorded the song in Portuguese because I though this romance-language could fit better

Thank you

Danny

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: CaliaMoko on September 26, 2016, 03:10:58 AM

I like your melody, but why do you say you're not a singer? Do you dislike singing? Your voice is fine and--most importantly (to me, anyway)--you're on pitch. I'm just sayin'....

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: Movin Flavour on October 01, 2016, 04:38:25 PM

Nice catchy tune.

And you can sing well!


And the melody is good... Ready for a hot summer day.

Sandeep

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: Gilpow on October 01, 2016, 06:05:55 PM

Good work. I think you can certainly be the singer for this song

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: Caleb Rian on October 02, 2016, 04:58:43 AM

I agree with all of the above.

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: MartynRich on October 04, 2016, 10:31:35 PM

I think your voice has a great tone and personality and I really like the tune. The whole song is quite inventive in a jaunty singalong sort of way, if I knew what the words said. The one thing I really love is the beat and percussion, I think they back up the guitars brilliantly. Very nice indeed!

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: CaliaMoko on October 05, 2016, 03:27:55 AM

Oh yeah, MartynRich reminded me...you need to add your lyrics per the guidelines. That will help us when we try to analyze your song in order to provide you with our feedback.

Vicki   ;D

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: TheButcher on October 05, 2016, 07:33:00 AM

NICE

try to improve the vocal mix.

B

Title: Re: Song Melody Worthwhile?
Post by: giitlesriddles on October 06, 2016, 07:11:42 PM

This song is really chill, and you sing better then me,  ;D I really like the bass line.