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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: igg on September 16, 2016, 08:22:49 PM
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Hi,
So I wrote this last week...I wanted to try out ballady type vocals .... It was fun to do....Tony and I got together and came up with some instrumental parts and a quick mix.....I hope you like it....Any suggestions to make it better are very welcome
I know it turned out to be a long song....but I kind of like it.....
https://www.reverbnation.com/ihor/song/26639277-so-far-along-your-way
SO FAR ALONG YOUR WAY
Words and Music ©I.wolosenko
Vocals - Igg
Lead guitar, Mando,Bass - Tony DiGregorio
Guitar, Cello, Drums - Igg
Yeah I get it
Every song's a piece of art
An illuminated portrait ...of your broken heart
I've seen the fine details you paint
I just can't listen to
Any more complaint
It's all right
So take it all for what it's worth
Are you feeling like an angel .. fallin.... fallin.. back to earth
But till the world can make you smile
you walk by yourself
through every weary mile
Pre Chorus:
It 's just a stage ..everyone must play
Spend some time together..Before we blow away
Chorus:
I know....... you are so beautiful
But that's just me and may not be enough
So you paint your moonlit scenes
And dream your lonely dreams
As you move along your way
So far...So far along your way
And I know
Each painting's got a lot to say
It's all colored in the blood....that lights up every day
And all your watercolor skies
They're just waiting
For your sun to rise
Chorus:
Pre Chorus:
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You have a way with words I like. I think my favorite part of this is "watercolor skies". I like how all the words work together to set a consistent mood, and I just like the way the song uses the image of an artist painting to get the idea across.
It is a little long, as you mentioned, but I didn't really get tired of listening before it was over.
I was confused by one thing...the "blood...that lights up every day".
Otherwise, no nits.
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Wow such a classy ballad igg! in a old fashion style...beautiful lyrics & a great vocal combine to make this quite superb ….its so well crafted with such a lovely tastefully done backing
I was going to say it stayed at one level all the way through but thats only bcos modern ballads are so overwrought & overdone to extract all the emotion from us...so actually it was refreshing to hear one that didint
I loved it...i could imagine it being a sought after song for balladeers to cover :)
brilliant song!
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It's such a beautiful song...sung with a lot of feeling,
this is awesome..you cannot improve perfection my friend...
well done with this fab piece!! respect!!!
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Just.
Bloody.
Marvelous.
You made my night's listening,Igg. Ta for posting. 8)
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Hey Guys you really knock me out with your wonderful comments...
Vicki - Thanks for the comments on the lyrics....It's such a delicate balancing act...to find a voice that tries to blend emotion and imagery...This one leaves a lot to the imagination...And I'm gratified that your were held all the way through...
Tina - You say the nicest things!....I'm glad to hear such a heartfelt response from a modern girl like you...:>) But really, one two of the qualities that I admire about both you and your music...is your fearless energy and positive exuberance....It takes you to the most interesting places....!
Kevin - Thanks so much for your your comments...deeply appreciated....Our music tends to differ in it's form but strives to reach for the same emotional depth.... I suppose, in an effort to turn the mundane into the sublime...
Skub - Very glad you liked it!....My pleasure in sparkling up your night!
igg
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Yeah I get it
Every song's a piece of art
An illuminated portrait ...of your broken heart
I've seen the fine details you paint
I just can't listen to
Any more complain.........
Thought I'd have a listen, and felt compelled to tell you that I think is very nice. Some very strong songwriting and performing. What a great opening verse ;)
Lovely stuff!
-T
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Very well written lyric with good imagery, nice phrasing and just enough room for the listener to live in. Nice work, guys!
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very good!
congratulations.
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great stuff, igg...
a lovely song
i'm a big fan of your tunes, lyrics, ideas and sentiments...even more so after hearing this :)
real quality
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I really liked this Igg. It was slightly different from you. At first I got a "Wild Horses" feel from the song but then it developed into something else. I loved the careworn vocals and subtle backing.
Good Stuff
John
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Not to pile on the praise.... but I loved the lyric. I'm going now to listen to the music as I read along with the lyric.
Okay. . . I just listened and I'm blown away. Totally beautiful. Little bit of Gordon Lightfoot and a little bit of sixties "crying guitar." I don't know when I've heard a song I liked better.
In a perfect world, this song would be on the radio. That's just an opinion. . . but it's a sincere opinion.
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Wow. Just f****** wow.
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One of your best for sure igg.
Great hook, well placed and framed with a beautiful melody and progression.
Reminded me of Ian Tyson in the vocals.
Congrats on a great write and performance :)
Paul
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Igg
Guitars and soundscape all sounding great.
Like the gently weaving backing.
Think the cello should be a bit a louder in the mix and some more backing vocals.
Nice and delicate
:)
Neil
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Wow....thanks so much!
Tom - Thanks for the listen and your kind comments...So good to hear it moved you..
Buc - I really appreciate the way you create your own songs and analyse others, so I'm grateful for your comments
Rightly - Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment
Paul - Much appreciated validation.... I feel the same about your material...
John - Thanks....Yeah, isn't it great when you write for yourself every song is an exploration...
HTM - I'm so pleased that it made so strong an impression...The emotional connection that we get to express in our material is really why I love to write ....
Martyn - Much thanks!!!!
Paulski - Thanks....I listened to some of Ian Tyson's songs and I'm flattered by the comparison..(I'd lost track of him after the Ian and Sylvia days).. Appreciate your feedback
igg
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Outstanding craftsmanship, a genuinely beautiful song. It works on every level. If you and your collaborators aren`t earning a good living from your work, there`s something very wrong in the world.
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terrific vocal held my attention all the way
reminds me of the great tom rush and his 'no regrets'
performance all round is perfect doesnt impose just supports your fine vocal .
listening on headphones..
first class igg & co
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Great song Igg,
Love your voice....so soothing, and complements those brilliant guitars.
Excellent lyrics.
Sandeep
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Hi there,
thanks for all the time and attention...
Neil - Appreciate your kind comments and suggestion for the cello...I'll try that out and see how it affects the texture...
JohnLondon - Wow...Thanks for the endorsement and praise... I truly appreciate it...Sadly, the music biz is a harsh mistress :>)..
Nooms - Really glad that you enjoyed the tune....I'm just getting the hang of making the mixes open enough to breathe....Also, Tom Rush reference greatly appreciated...
Sandeep - Thanks! I'm delighted that you found it so pleasing!
igg