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Title: When I see your face
Post by: Tian on August 20, 2016, 06:25:25 AM

Hello everybody

Just released this original song - a nice rock ballad!
It´s about falling in love (what else…) ;-)

1. Verse:   
I´m walkin through the city, I see a girl so pretty,
she stands infront of me,
her eyes are shining happly, her mouth is smiling sweetly,
she is the perfect girl,

Chorus:   
I´m going crazy and I, I´m feeling lazy when I,
when I see her face,
I´m thinking wild thing of her, I dream the whole day of her,
when I see her face,

2. Verse:   
she´s going to the pavement, and raising up her right hand,
don´t even know her name,
she´s getting in the taxi, and looks a moment to me,
now she is gone away,

Chorus:
I´m going crazy and I, I´m feeling lazy when I,
when I see her face,
I´m thinking wild thing of her, I dream the whole day of her,
when I see her face,

End:   
I´ll never forget your lovely face,
I´ll never forget your lovely face,
I´ll never forget your lovely face,
I´ll never forget your lovely face,


I guess some of you will say "Oasis"!!! Sure my voice is similar to Liam but its not an Oasis-Copy!

Hope you like it
cheers

Title: Re: When I see your face
Post by: JOdejo on August 20, 2016, 11:15:31 AM

omg I love this song! I really like rock ballads, and you did a very good job with this one;) The surprising guitar chords after the chorus worked really good, if you ask me. And the guitarsolos.. freaking nice! Nothing else to say, I just love it!

Title: Re: When I see your face
Post by: D_Q on August 20, 2016, 10:36:55 PM

Wow - I really thought  - did I miss an Oasis B-Side - cos this would have been the best of it! ;-) It's a catchy tune and I really snapped all the time I listened to it. The lyrics are nice but they could be a little deeper here and there. Nevertheless - I would download this one on Amazon if I had the possibility :)

Title: Re: When I see your face
Post by: Movin Flavour on August 24, 2016, 06:43:17 AM

First thing that springs to mind is Oasis.

Also there are shades of Small Facss in th way that the song is sung.

Great guitars.

A good song.

Sandeep

Title: Re: When I see your face
Post by: IronKnee on August 25, 2016, 07:10:45 AM

WOW....your not in a big recording studio yet. Awesome as awesome gets. Do you guys sound as good live? The song is good...the music is even better.
Impressive stuff......the vocals are a real standout.....could take you to the top  8)
                                                       -Tom