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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: TheButcher on August 10, 2016, 10:35:06 AM
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Hi lovely People;
Here s a Song i did with a friend.
https://songcheck.hofa.de/index.php?p=song&id=898
IT s also Part of a Contest; so pls like if you like IT.
I do Need The Money.
(Lyrics will be added soon)
Feedback and criticism is appreciated.
Tx a lot
Your friend
B
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Hi Daniel, I really enjoyed the piano playing and the overall chord structure. Your vocal had a nice warmth to it and fitted well with the feel of the song. Nicely produced and recorded.
Good song, good luck with the contest!
Cheers
Jamie
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Yo Butcher,how's the meat hanging? :D
Long time no post,hope you are well.
The first time I listened to your song it kinda washed over me in a pleasant manner,but there was enough to bring me back for another listen. That's when it hit me,this is great stuff,but it's not immediate,it's a grower and that may hurt you in a competition where the judges are usually looking for instant gratification. Their loss.
I love the languid vocal delivery,love the piano,love the slide when it kicks in. The song is communicated with great feel and emotion,yet in an effortless and faux indifferent style.
Good luck in the comp,but I'd be proud to have nailed this song together regardless of what the judges think. 8)
edit...not sure if I voted correctly or not due to the lingo barrier!
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Hi Butcher,
This is very laid back. There is some great piano playing going on here. It's a sort of dreamy, floaty song. Ah !!! - I'm just going to lie down on the grass now maaaaan :)
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What a fabulously chilled out song. I think it´s quite accessible as well...chills me out completely and the piano and vocals are superb. Great entry and I voted for you in German, which means I may not have voted for you, but I think I pressed the right buttons. Just like you did with this song! ;D
I can imagine you walking solitary over meadows singing this in the video. Maybe there´s a flower in your hair. Maybe not. Either way it´s a great piece of music.
My only production tip would be to maybe put a bit of compression on the vox at the start, they come through quite sharp.
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i love the piano playing....it is magic! & i loved that sumptuous lazy vibe the song has ...its quite sensual it made me want to stay in bed all day & not on my own
on the first listen it was only half way thru i realised you were singing in english....i couldntve been concentrating could i !!
so i think i voted for it.. i clicked on some button...but if ive just bought a BMW & a Bosch dishwasher my husband wont be happy with you!
anyway great song...i loved it :)
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Very nice. Moody and brooding vocal, great piano and I love the bass line.......really solid. I like it.
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Good chilled out ballad.
Love those pianos and the highlight for me is when the percussions kick in.
Would love to sit in a room and listen to this live.
Sandeep
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Hi
Very nice song.
Really like the delivery style.
Some of the piano work reminded me of Tori Amos - a good thing.
Good luck with the vote.
Digger
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Jamie, Skub, pompeyjazz, MartynRich, tinam, Buc McMaster, Movin Flavour, igger72
thanks a LOT for your support.
B
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Hey there Butcher.........great song! The melody and singing are absolutely captivating...stellar!
The music is beautiful. The sound is very original....... ;D
This has a "Simply Red" sophistication to it that I really enjoy...
My hat's off, B....
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tx a lot ironknee;
I thought the low vocal passages had some weaknesses....but ok :)
"Simply Red" sophistication
oh; cool; gotta check it out.
B
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Great track!
Especially loved the orchestral ending, no repeating of the chorus, just leave it hanging there... Great piano solo :)))
All the best!
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Hey Butcher
Sorry but i get confuse with all these new music sites but hope you understand i like to read the lyrics as well, so maybe you could post them eh, thanks 8)
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Nice song butcher - I just love a piano song and it's played beautifully in this - is that you?
Lovely production and vocals outstanding. I pushed a button and said I wasn't a robot - but maybe I said I was :) Oh yeah, and that bass is sumptuous too - is that you? ;D ;D
Would like to see the lyrics...
Fine work
Paul
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I've tried three times to listen to it but I got no sound, is there another way ?
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fab piano ballad...nice laid back groove...
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thank you guys.
and thank you for voting, even though the whole thing is in german and you did t know what you were doing.
You ordered a new refrigerator, it will be delivered in the next weeks ;D thanks for shopping
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. thank you everyone for your support
B. appreciates
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thank you guys.
and thank you for voting, even though the whole thing is in german and you did t know what you were doing.
You ordered a new refrigerator, it will be delivered in the next weeks ;D thanks for shopping
My Dyson vacuum arrived today. >:(
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thank you guys.
and thank you for voting, even though the whole thing is in german and you did t know what you were doing.
You ordered a new refrigerator, it will be delivered in the next weeks ;D thanks for shopping
My Dyson vacuum arrived today. >:(
That sucks ;D ;D
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thank you guys.
and thank you for voting, even though the whole thing is in german and you did t know what you were doing.
You ordered a new refrigerator, it will be delivered in the next weeks ;D thanks for shopping
My Dyson vacuum arrived today. >:(
That sucks ;D ;D
It doesn't,that's one of the problems. :(
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Excellent stuff,great dynamics,I also love it when everything kicks off...in a totally chilled out way of course!
Your voice is very easy to listen to.Nice work mate!
My refrigerator has been ordered! ;D
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Man, that piano is incredible - is that you playing? The feeling of languid surrender is something I don't think I've ever heard before. It's a beautiful arrangement, the quality of all the playing is outstanding, professional quality stuff. The song is great too but it wouldn't matter if it wasn't because the vibe and the musicianship is so compelling. Extraordinary.
M
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okay; thank you everybody
LostBoy
My refrigerator has been ordered!
thanks for shopping. it plays the song, each time you open it. it s a new feature; it s cool at first, but super annoying after a week or two. no money back so.... :)
montydog
Man, that piano is incredible - is that you playing?
no :-[
it s an online collab.
languid surrender
hmmm...that sounds beautiful and sad. i remember i was very sad when i wrote it. so; thank you.
really appreciate your compliment, monty.
B.
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nice piano work , sounds good when it kicks in aswell to give it a bit more spice!
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Love the piano man! Wish I could play like that. Very nice track would like to have a read of the lyrics when you post them :)
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Tx a lot guys;
Well, I didn't do the instrumental (wish I could play like that)
<3