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Title: BIPOLAR
Post by: S.T.C on October 10, 2013, 10:32:20 AM

That`s my lyrics for a while now..got to write some more serious stuff,,for other projects.,any way Bipolar, :)

I want a girl
but i can`t own her
she says hello
and i say hola

i want a coffee
then i`m drinking cola
she said i`m wrong
and then i told her

you just can`t get it right
when your bipolar


flying on plane
the wings on fire
the captains says were low
but it feels much higher

you just can`t get it right
when your bi polar

elation is my despair
does anyone really care
laugh with me ,so fair
you can`t make it up
you can`t get right
when your bipolar

I want a girl
but i can`t own her
she says hello
and i say hola

you just can`t get it right
when your bipolar

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: Jess on October 10, 2013, 04:47:16 PM

I feel like I've been robbed of another song theme! I have a song called 'love bipolar' lying in my lyrical collection! This is my fourth idea so far that has been telepathically 'stolen' the forum.
Or maybe great minds just think alike? :)
I'll have a proper read tomorrow when I've got more time/am over the shock of your telepathic thieving ;D jokes

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: S.T.C on October 10, 2013, 05:42:44 PM

Quote from: Jess on October 10, 2013, 04:47:16 PM

I feel like I've been robbed of another song theme! I have a song called 'love bipolar' lying in my lyrical collection! This is my fourth idea so far that has been telepathically 'stolen' the forum.
Or maybe great minds just think alike? :)
I'll have a proper read tomorrow when I've got more time/am over the shock of your telepathic thieving ;D jokes

 ;D Or maybe great minds just think alike?

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: BooBoo on October 11, 2013, 09:30:32 PM

I read this in a Jamaican accent, was I suppose to haha? It's an interesting idea though and It made me laugh!

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: benjo on October 12, 2013, 05:08:07 PM

hey STC,

I do like this its just got a draw you in kind of thing to it
couldn't get time to comment before, but I had to keep coming back to it
its really different mate nice write

                                          tony.

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: jameba on October 12, 2013, 05:27:32 PM

hey mate, ive read this a few times before I commented, got better every read, different subject and a nice write :)

well done bud

james

Title: Re: BIPOLAR
Post by: hardtwistmusic on October 19, 2013, 06:48:08 PM

I too found it interesting and "attractive".  You have used the listener's curiosity almost as a part of the song.  Did you do that on purpose?  Very interesting. 

I've never thought to do that.  I'll have to try it sometime.