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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: benjo on September 12, 2013, 08:12:11 PM
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hi guys,
this is dedicated to the little polish boy
Daniel Pelka, who was tortured and starved to death
by his own mum and stepdad,
THIS IS DANIEL'S SONG
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can you imagine life
only four years long
beaten and starved
and loved by no one
how did it go so wrong
this is daniels song
this is daniels song
can't hear him crying
he's unable to move
slowly wasting away
refused water and food
who heard him screaming
locked inside his room
from his head to his toes
daniel was black and blue
look at those big blue eyes
how could you make them cry
look at that baby face
how could you let him die
how did it go so wrong
this is daniels song
this is daniels song
can you imagine life
only four years long
left to rot in a room
the door handle was gone
in a world of silence
pain and fear all he knew
haunted by shadows of darkness
only after death came the truth
look at those big blue eyes
how could you make them cry
look at that baby face
how could you let him die
how did it go so wrong
how did it go so wrong
this is daniels song
this is daniels song
this is daniels song...
© copyright house all rights reserved...
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A difficult subject, not something that I could have written about. I liked your lyrics but they filled me with sadness (guess that's kind of the point). Very well done.
Al
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Hi Tony,
I agree this is a difficult subject but you've handled it well.
The reason this sort of thing keeps on happening is the authorities never come through on their 'lessons will be learned' mantra.
Nice one,
Phil.
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hey guys,
thanks so much for the comments on this
this is not what I planned to post next but when I read the story
it just sickened me
ALLAN, cheers mate it is a hard thing to write about tear in my eye writing this, that poor lad
thanks again mate,
PHIL, your so right they never learn and they never seem to get it right
thanks for the feed back mate,
tony...
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hey :)
really interesting song :) and I really enjoyed this
in a world of silence
pain and fear all he knew
haunted by shadows of darkness
only after death came the truth
I loved these lyrics really stood out for me!!
James :)
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hey James,
so glad you enjoyed this one I wrote this really quickly because I was upset
just read about it in the paper, it is hard to write about these kind of things
but I don't think things like this should be forgotten or given a blind eye
and these people in charge should get their fingers out,
sorry getting angry,
thank you mate for taking the time and commenting,
tony.
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hey guys
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Hey Benjo,
That's really powerful.... Using words like good and best and favourite seem weird when talking about a subject like this....but in the absence of a better word, i thought the best line was "the door handle was gone"..... It's such a stark image. You just can't get away from how dreadful it is.
I think it's a very brave person to write and perform something like this. Performance will be key. For me a really bare and hard hitting style would work best instead of something sentimental. I'm not sure I'd have the guts to attempt it.... I'd be interested to hear where you go with it.
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hey caco,
thank you so much for taking your time to read this and comment
I thought I had upset people or something,
yes you are right I don't really like writing about it cause it is hard
but I can't help it if you know what I mean,
I think this is just lyrics that I will keep unless some asks me if they can do it
but again thank you so much,
tony.
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Such a sad song. The way you writ it bought across a clear image of hat is going on which is good but sad and tragic at the same time. There are some really good lines in here, such as " look at those big blue eyes
how could you make them cry
look at that baby face
how could you let him die"
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A good write. Very emotive and a lot of feeling in this one that reflects the emotion you evidently feel on this case. Some great lines in there that are written in quite a sincere and simplistic way but resonate with such strong emotion. Last 2 verses really hit home what the song is about and contrasts the purity and innocence of the child and the evil that befell him. Well done :)
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these kind of atrocities makes me sick...it's so evil I can't even begin to comprehend how someone could do this to another living being let alone a child...your own child :o :o and reading your lyrics makes me cry :'( which is a good thing, because in bringing this type of incident into our consciousness and just maybe, it will help people to wake up and put an end to this kind of suffering :'(
really well done on the lyrics Tony and good for you for writing this...maybe it should be made into a song :-\ CS
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hey guys,
thanks so much for your feedback
BOOBOO, really glad you like it
SING4ME88, it is a very emotional write thanks for your comments
CRYSTALSUZY, or should I say the voice, thanks for taking time to read and comment
means a lot to me from all of you guys,
PS suzy always in your debt
tony.
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Really sad lyrics Tony, music wise, would have to go with the flow of your lyrics, vocals, im thinking anger, but then, THIS IS DANIEL'S SONG, if someone can put all of these together, then this Kid will never be forgotten.
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well i couldn't have written it better than what you already have, nice inspiring words.
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hey titiami,
thank you so much for your kind words
i'm so glad you liked it,
take care tony.