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Title: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 09, 2013, 09:12:05 AM
hey saeed,

this was something i noticed on collaberations board by saeed
i thought what a nice gesture to try and do something for charity
so this was my atempt i used saeeds title and theme and went from there
please feed back i would be very greatful thanks guys

                   SAEED, hey friend please let me know if you  want this piece to work with
                              over to you take care,  tony...





  BLESS YOU AND BLESS YOUR SOUL
  ========// ------ //========


 bless you and bless your soul
 in this world so beautiful
 make a change see the need
 rid this world of pain and greed

 bless you and bless your soul
 in this world so wonderful
 feed the hungry children please
 vaccinate against disease

 happy smiling faces glow
 raise the sun and free the shadows
 refresh the soul with heavens rain
 stop the tear drops and the pain

 bless you and bless your soul
 mix the colours of the rainbow
 bless you and bless your soul
 this world is everybodies home
 
 give and take means harmony
 push corruption to the sea
 look to see what the picture means
 a world of happiness is our dream

 bless you and bless your soul
 mix the colours of the rainbow
 bless you and bless your soul
 this world is everybodies home

 bless you and bless your soul
 in this world so wonderful
 feed the hungry children please
 vaccinate against disease...
 
 
 © copyright house all rights reserved...
 
 






Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 09, 2013, 10:51:19 AM
HI BENJO ..

Very nice .. I like what you did .. you did catch the idea .. and the feel is great ..

do I have permission to change any word .. after getting back to you off course .. I already have tune now ..
I'll work on the chorus .. and see if any of the the ideas well materialize I'll post it in the unfinished page ..
Thank you my dear Friend Benjo

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Kevin j on June 09, 2013, 11:13:46 AM
Some great lines there benjo, nice rymes too,
i cant c anything that needs to be worked on
nice work as usual  :)
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 09, 2013, 12:01:27 PM
hey guys,

 kevin j, thanks for those comments, means a lot coming from you take care...

 saeed,   ok my friend if you wish to change anything thats fine
              do what you need to do i look forward to it i hope it works
              first collaboration for me and you i'm glad you liked it
              catch you soon my friend take care  tony...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 09, 2013, 12:23:45 PM
Hi Ben ..

I've managed a tune I'd like you to check it maybe this evening when every thing is quite around hear .. ;D

Cheers
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Dutchbeat on June 09, 2013, 12:31:10 PM
Hey Saeed and Benjo,

perhaps you could consider to add a choir existing of forumites for this part...

bless you and bless your soul
 mix the colours of the rainbow
 bless you and bless your soul
 this world is everybodies home

i had a project a while ago on which i tried to add as many tracks from separate singers and instruments from the forum (i messed up in the end because of a computer problem and no good back up...yes, i make back ups nowadays....here is the link of how far we got with adding forum singers: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4mTKhZI0szI (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4mTKhZI0szI)

but nice collaboration, guys, good luck with it! If you have the music, please post it, ok?
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 09, 2013, 01:14:34 PM
Hi Dutchbeat ..
 

My thought exactly .. but I wonted the good singers of the forum to sing a line or in duets .. and harmony .something like the world aid .. so many ideas .. but first you all must like the melody .. lets see what happens by to night ..

Any body ready to participate .. tell Benjo .. and I send the files .. ;D

I would encouraged others to have ago with the lyrics someone might get a better melody .. my aim .. is to get this thing moving .. charity people get what they need ..

Thanks guys

Cheers
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 09, 2013, 01:49:57 PM
hey guys,

dutchbeat,  lovely comments thanks on behalf of me and saeed
i'm up for anything that gives this what it needs
just had a listen to some of your stuff very nice great imagination
thanks again for comments like the idea of a choir some great ideas
take care...

saeed,  you've got some good ideas i think you know what you want
            and i'm along for the ride with who ever gets on board well done... tony
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 09, 2013, 03:07:10 PM
Hi Dutchbeat

nice video .. too crazy for me .. but the effort is great .. nice work .. I think it needs organizer more then any thing .. 

Let's hope for the best .. I'm find it difficult to decide which way to go smooth light or sort off Rockiesh .. dark and saddish .. :D

I think I need help in this .. maybe benjo will have some thing .. ;D

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 09, 2013, 07:24:40 PM
hey guys

 anything i can help with i will try
 just let me know take care... tony
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 10, 2013, 11:38:47 AM
hello every body ..

Did any one tried a crack at the song ?? .. if so please post the demo here ..

I would like it to be tried be any who has time ..  :D

This is the best I came up with so far .. http://up.top4top.net/d_0197a47e581.mp3

please put the comments here .. cause the lyrics also might need some thing who knows ??

thanks guys .. ;D

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Jess on June 10, 2013, 04:06:11 PM
It's a nice concept- I've never seen anyone post a charity song before, and it would be pretty marketable too, as not many people write them. Nice work
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 10, 2013, 04:48:36 PM
HI Jess ..

Would you like to join and add your voice or playing to the song ?? or maybe have a go and at the lyrics .. if so please tell us what you can do .. :D

please take a look at the above link and tell me what you think ..


Cheers Jess ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 10, 2013, 05:41:05 PM
hey saeed,

love it mate,  you do play guitar very well
like you said saeed it would be nice now
if we could get someone with a really good strong vocal
please don't take that the wrong way
got the lyrics got the music should we put it out there for someone to take the challenge
please let me know what you think
great job saeed very nice lets give this a really big kick off
well done my friend take care...


                                                           ps JESS  thanks for lovely comments
                                                                        take care...




Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: KEVIN B on June 10, 2013, 06:28:47 PM
hey benjo, yeh man i read it the other day, good to do something for charity, and the song has a real good flow i think, which is very important when you come to marry the music and words together ! so now i look forward to hearing it benjo.
nice one mate

kevin !
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 10, 2013, 06:51:10 PM
hey kevin B,

cheers mate for that we want to get people involved
so if your a great singer and you want a crack at it let us no
BENJO or SAEED, thanks again mate take care...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 10, 2013, 09:01:45 PM
Hi every body ..

any one heard the demo on this link ???

http://up.top4top.net/d_0197a47e581.mp3

it has only the first part of the song .. is it enough ??

I'm a bit confused .. need help here .. ;D
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Dutchbeat on June 10, 2013, 09:52:17 PM
hi Saeed, i just have been working, no time now to listen unfortunately, but tomorrow night i will get back to this

let's get as many singers as possible for some parts....

but hey, i don't even have time to listen now, sorry, work is crazy these days
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 11, 2013, 02:20:40 AM
Hello there ..

this is a link for download the demo ..

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/tPcZ902y/Bless_your_soul.html?



Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Dutchbeat on June 11, 2013, 08:44:50 AM
Hi Saeed,

finally some time to listen, and we are in (that means mrs. DB will sing, i cannot sing). I wonder whether   the ket will work for her, but we will figure it out

the demo stops in the middle???

but sounds good
catch you later (back to work  >:()
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 11, 2013, 12:18:50 PM
Hi Saeed and Benjo...if there is anything I can do to help out with this project, count me in :)...I've listened to the demo and like it...it's stops half way through ??? ...if you want to get a choir thing happening, I'd love to sing in that...don't really know what else I can offer :)
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 11, 2013, 02:50:57 PM
Hi Suzy ..

Wonderful  :D.. can you play the piano with the song you can send me a midi file the  ( BPM = 78 ) ..

sorry guys The BPM is 125 not 78 .. I got mixed up ..

here are the chords if any body need's them ..

he chords :

Am7 / / / E7 / / /
G / Dm7 / E7 / / /

Am7 / / / / / Dm7 /
G7 / / / F / E7 /

/ / / / = Bar ..


Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 11, 2013, 06:40:36 PM
hi saeed,

anything you need me to do
i will try i'm not sure what you mean
about the chorus not rhyming
is it because of the music please let me know...

                                     tony...
                                 
                                                    ps what time do you usually go on forum...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 11, 2013, 08:51:20 PM
hi crystalsuzy,

thanks for your respnse
we just sorting out the chorus
and we will get back to you
your very welcome to get involved
i will pm saeed and see what he needs
please bare with us and thanks again
catch you soon and thanks for the nice comment...

   BENJO...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 12, 2013, 12:13:25 AM
Hello Every body ..

Well its finished .. I mean the song tune and melody .. now the singing will commence .. ;D

this is how it sounds ..
http://www.4shared.com/mp3/snhMCoIW/Bless_your_soul_1.html?

I hope it's to the liking of all of you which is impossible but here it is ..  :D

Cheers ..
time for me to sleep .it's really late .. ;)
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 12, 2013, 01:46:17 AM
Hello Every body ..

Well its finished .. I mean the song tune and melody .. now the singing will commence .. ;D

this is how it sounds ..
http://www.4shared.com/mp3/snhMCoIW/Bless_your_soul_1.html?

I hope it's to the liking of all of you which is impossible but here it is ..  :D

Cheers ..
time for me to sleep .it's really late .. ;)

Sounds pretty darn awesome to me...love the change in rhythm around 'give and take...' and love the full on harmony chorus at the end...great job on lyrics and melody guys :)   I'd love to sing some harmony on it if there is room :) CS
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 12, 2013, 02:01:50 AM
Hi Suzy ..

pick what ever line you like .. put it on a track at 125 BPM tempo .. and send me the wave file I'll just put it among the ..

please note .. make 3 track please ... ;D .. don't mix or reverb dry please .. no mp3 please ..

I wish if some one else will take over the production .. I have another song I'm working on .. ;D ..

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 12, 2013, 05:06:25 PM
hey saeed,

well done on that mate it sounds lovely
i have played it all day
was it to late for the other lines that i sent you
and was that what you meant my friend
sorry for the missunderstanding
we will have to see where we go from here
well done again very clever of you
i'm on the forum now for a while so catch you shortly
take care my friend...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 12, 2013, 06:36:21 PM
Hi Tony ..

Sorry it was late to do the other lines .. because the song finally took some shape .. specially when Andrew ( Kafla ) gave me the idea of the football chant .. it was brilliant .. there is a line missing in the chorus .. can you find a remedy for it ?? :D

Now the sing should begin .. and the guys and the girls should send there voice tracks to me or to any body wont to do the producing  .. and the strong singers there singing tracks to mix .. there are harmony lines if any wont's to sing them .. he or she should send the track of that singing .. ;D ;D ;D

Please guys and girls .. track as wave no mp3 .. no reverb .. dry tracks please .. any one for a solo at the chorus ?? send the solo file midi or wave ? ;D ;D ;D

I need a piano track on the song .. any body is ready to do one .. midi or wave .. midi is best for tuning .. ;D ;D ;D

Cheers guys ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 12, 2013, 10:40:37 PM
hey guys and gals,

CHARITY SONG, please get involved it would be really nice to do this as a forum
there must be some great singers and producers or anyone that can help in the way of a charity
lets all get together on this please if you feel you can help come forward every little helps thanks guys
maybe you could shoot a good video to this theme please PM
BENJO or SAEED, thanks guys take care...











Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: BooBoo on June 13, 2013, 07:19:16 AM
I like the idea this is for charity! It's a very good song because the content stays with the theme. Also it flows well
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 13, 2013, 11:30:17 AM
Hi to the Mods

Please move this tread from lyrics to the song in progress .. the melody is made and the demo is here in the link ..

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/snhMCoIW/bless_your_soul_1.html?

so the participators can have an idea of the song .. ;D

Think you Mods ..

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 13, 2013, 12:14:45 PM
What's best way to share a harmony track? :) How do I get it to you? I wouldn't want to put it up on sound cloud that's for sure :)
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 13, 2013, 02:46:54 PM
Hi Suzy ..

Open an account in this site .. http://www.4shared.com/ .. upload what ever you wont and send the link to whom you want no one will access the file except you ..

send me the link on the massage or email .. if not on the thread .. ;D

waiting .. ;D

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 13, 2013, 06:08:23 PM
booboo,

thank you so much for your kind words
you are very welcome to join in if you think you can add something to this
please let  BENJO or SAEED know
thanks for taking the time booboo take care...
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 13, 2013, 10:03:35 PM
Hi Suzy ..

Open an account in this site .. http://www.4shared.com/ .. upload what ever you wont and send the link to whom you want no one will access the file except you ..

send me the link on the massage or email .. if not on the thread .. ;D

waiting .. ;D

Cheers ..

Thanks Saeed...just wondering if you plan to keep all your harmonies in the ending...they sound lovely but wondering if I should add the same harmony an octave higher or what???...there is a higher harmony so I could just add that...just wondering what your idea was with this, if you want people to add something to this song :) ...I could also add some harmony in parts of the verses :)
thanks CS
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 14, 2013, 12:28:24 AM
Hi Suzy ..

Please do what ever you feel .. put every thing you think you can do for the song .. verses chorus .. its your song .. one two three lines .. what ever you like ..

next collaboration will be with you Suzy .. be prepared ..  ;D

OK ..don't tell me just do it .. once I have the tracks then we can discuss how we should proceed .. I might add Harmony my self later ..  ;)

Thanks Suzy ..

Cheers
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 14, 2013, 12:36:49 AM
Hi Suzy ..

Please do what ever you feel .. put every thing you think you can do for the song .. verses chorus .. its your song .. one two three lines .. what ever you like ..

next collaboration will be with you Suzy .. be prepared ..  ;D

OK ..don't tell me just do it .. once I have the tracks then we can discuss how we should proceed .. I might add Harmony my self later ..  ;)

Thanks Suzy ..

Cheers
Hi Saeed...thought we'd better stop chatting on Bin's post, as far as the trumpet goes..I play a Bb horn and I can play up to a high E or F if I'm feeling on...thanks
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 14, 2013, 12:54:30 AM
Hi Suzy ..

But Bin should know how high you can play .. don't you think .. if he is going to write for brass ??

Only a thought ..  ;D

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: crystalsuzy on June 14, 2013, 06:08:58 AM
Hi Suzy ..

But Bin should know how high you can play .. don't you think .. if he is going to write for brass ??

Only a thought ..  ;D

Cheers ..
OH sorry...I didn't know he had agreed to write the horn part ??? I guess we should get him on this page :) does Bin play a brass instrument?
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 14, 2013, 10:26:41 AM
Hello Suzy ..

I don't know .. he said he play the brass through his guitar connected to midi device .. maybe a midi guitar or something .. but the arrangement were nice .. so I asked him to write some for the song .. and he'll try .. he'll see ..  ;D ;D ;D

cheers
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 14, 2013, 06:57:08 PM
hey guys,

this all sounds like its getting good

SAEED, i  put something on the bar bout vids or pics for the song
            take a look take care...tony
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: Saeed AlSuri on June 14, 2013, 07:05:14 PM
Hi Tony  ..

it seems that DutchBeat made a thread in the bar for this project .. and I did post the final lyrics .. for the singer there as he requested .. and a link of only the music to help singer to sing along .. please check it out ..

I'm posting the music link to download .. here too .. just in case ..  :D

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/9ZoTCEVW/Bless_your_soul_music.html?

Cheers ..
Title: Re: bless you and bless your soul /FOR CHARITY...
Post by: benjo on June 14, 2013, 08:49:59 PM
hi saeed,

just had a listen to the music, sounds great to me
cant wait to see it when its all done hope it does well
you do play guitar well take care...tony...