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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: mstesson on May 28, 2022, 05:24:35 PM
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A brand new song written by me. Just uploaded.
I'm thankful for constructive feedback.
https://soundcloud.com/user-906575190/walking-through-the-night
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This is a nice track. I like the way it builds and moves in and out as it goes. I think the vocals could perhaps be a bit louder in place. Not to jump out at you but I was struggling to hear them at times. Otherwise I really enjoyed this. :)
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Lovely song. Kind of folky which I like a lot. interesting atmospheric touches - not sure what that wind-like part is… lovely vocal too.
Can you please post the lyrics?
Karen
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Hola @mstesson (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22901)
I liked it a lot, beautiful lyrics full of images, the song has a very ethereal sound picture with very catchy parts, the voice sounds great.
Mora
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Thanks for all feedback.
Here are the lyrics:
Round and round we go again
You and I my friend
It seems we keep forgiving
Hanging on until the end
Round and round we go again
Until the count of ten
It seems we keep forgetting
I'm walking through the night
The city lights
Like fireworks in the sky
I'm alone tonight
Round and round we go again
Like a carousel
It seems we keep on going
But the questions are the same
Round and round we go again
Will it ever end
Will we find the answer
I'm walking through the night
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The cars are passing by
I'm trying to hide
I'm just wasting time
I should be going home tonight
Here in the dark night
I seek for a light
I try to stay alive
I'm walking through the night
...
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Not really my kind of thing, but it definitely stirs up a great atmosphere and nicely produced. I particularly like the rushes of wind noises - I like to use sound effects on tunes too its a classy little trick.
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Hi, big welcome to the forum and thanks for sharing this track. I liked it. To me for some reason it sounded very 'European'... something about the melody made me think of bands like 'The Scorpions'. I thought the vocal melody had good range and the 'I'm walking through the night' line was quite hooky (I can sing that back after one listen, which is always a good sign). Mix felt good too. Nice work! Hope you stick around and enjoy the forum (tip - you'll probably get a lot more reviews if you review some others too).
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Hi, I really enjoyed your song, I could be wrong but as i was listening it took me to a time where I was in a relationship i didn't want to be in and would often stall going home to avoid it. I really enjoyed the vocal and the melody, the chorus is great and really gets in your head. nice work!
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Just caught this gem on pomp's forum playlist. Lovely work.
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Welcome to the forum. Lovely song. The only thing I'd note is that it ends a little abruptly for my liking (to me, it's begging for either some sore of long-held note that fades, or a last little piano outro). Just my thought.
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Hi @mstesson (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22901),
that is very nice song Enjoyed a lot listening to it.
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@mstesson (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22901)
Hi welcome, tastefully done. Clear production and good vocals.
Doesn’t outstay it’s welcome either
:-)
Neil