Hi Lyrical experts!
So here's my problem...I've never been strong on lyrics but I do know that changing tense within a song is a no no. Thing is, my lyrics currently do!
Questions basically are: Does it need changing or can it work the way it is- if so which way do I go, present or past (and how???).
The lyrics are still rough so feel free to chip in on anything else.
Context - 1st verse basically explains where girl is from and what she's about - song progresses with boy getting with girl on the same night as she arrives and becomes present tense.
Any thoughts welcome. Yodasdad.
V1
She came out of a Thunderstorm
No one ever saw where the dark clouds came from
But it seems she was put here just for me
Wide eyes and a hot damn smile
And a look that says (said?) baby I can go all night
And she danced, she just danced in the street
C
All of the red lights turnin green
This girl is a wild one she’s a different league
She’s up on the redline it’s down to me
Can I compete with a wild one – Live it up with a wild one
(Lyrics may alter for subsequent choruses)
V2
Getting late but the nights still young
Cocked and loaded, yeah girl we’re gonna have some fun
Take my hand and we’ll dance till the mornin light
Fast feet and those hips that thrill
Like a fever rushin over me you’ll make me ill
But I’m fine, got some time I’m sure I’ll be alright
Mid 8
Tell me in the morning will you know my name
....Next line to be written....
I guess there’s nothing I can really do
But revel in the moment with a girl like you (that I’m spending with you?)
I’m just glad I spent some time with one of the wild ones