[s.l.wolf]

Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/slotfyalqady/bound-original-song

YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wbZd7t35qrM

Get as specific as you like with your opinions, thanks in advance.

someone is whispering in my ears
saying it's a choice to be locked for years
but those lungs have breathed in no fog
those eyes have seen no wrong

I'm imprisoned & I'm shackled
this is the only direction I see
shoulders held back & head fastened
my lungs are being crushed I can't breathe

my ankles are broken
my wrists are bleeding
stranded, alone &
my mind is caving in

I see the ghost of my freedom
carrying my scars
I see it casting shadows from
behind these bars

I know you can't see my shackles
you can't begin to understand
I know you can't see this black hole
sucking out my life from where you stand

but you say just breathe
you tell me to look around
can't you see my shattered knees?
can't you see my soul is bound?

I'm imprisoned & I'm shackled
this is the only direction I see
shoulders held back & head fastened
my lungs are being crushed I can't breathe

my ankles are broken
my wrists are bleeding
stranded, alone &
my mind is caving in

so believe me when I tell you
this is the only direction I see
I can't just look around
I can't just breathe

believe me when I tell you
your help is not helping
you're painting a picture of freedom
as my life is ending

I'm imprisoned & I'm shackled
this is the only direction I see
shoulders held back & head fastened
my lungs are being crushed I can't breathe

my ankles are broken
my wrists are bleeding
I stranded alone and
my mind is caving in

[/b]

[ruddiness]

At first, when I was reading the lyrics I had tears in my eyes. After that I was listening to your record and I started to cry. You gave so many emotions to this song. when I was listening your record I couldn't think about anything else. At the moment when you sang "but you say just breathe...." I literally had goose pimples.
I really love this

[redrhodie]

Yeah, I'm crying, too. You have an unquestionable gift. Your writing is superb. Your song is disturbing and haunting, and makes me want to give you a hug.

Lynn

[Neil C]

I like the concept and imagery is powerful.
I also like the vulnerability of your delivery
Thoughts - I'm note convinced it needs to be the length it is, it feels like two versions the quieter one  and then louder strummed, I think you only need one.
 
neil 

[PaulyX]

Hi mate,
I've got pretty much the same feedback as I had for your last one 'Alone in This':
- You've got undeniable talent.
- Incredibly emotive vocal.
- Lyrically I'm still looking for a bit of nuance / balance, some glimmers of light in the darkness that'll make the evident pain behind this all the more credible.
By the way, there's a 'dark songs' competition on at the moment if you haven't noticed... this could be a slam dunk...?
Pauly

[s.l.wolf]

At first, when I was reading the lyrics I had tears in my eyes. After that I was listening to your record and I started to cry. You gave so many emotions to this song. when I was listening your record I couldn't think about anything else. At the moment when you sang "but you say just breathe...." I literally had goose pimples.
I really love this

I'm sorry you relate to it so much, but I'm really glad you like it!

[s.l.wolf]

Yeah, I'm crying, too. You have an unquestionable gift. Your writing is superb. Your song is disturbing and haunting, and makes me want to give you a hug.

Lynn

Thank you!!

[s.l.wolf]

I like the concept and imagery is powerful.
I also like the vulnerability of your delivery
Thoughts - I'm note convinced it needs to be the length it is, it feels like two versions the quieter one  and then louder strummed, I think you only need one.
 
neil 

Thank you.
I have an intense problem with making songs too long lol. I'll take that into consideration.

[s.l.wolf]

Hi mate,
I've got pretty much the same feedback as I had for your last one 'Alone in This':
- You've got undeniable talent.
- Incredibly emotive vocal.
- Lyrically I'm still looking for a bit of nuance / balance, some glimmers of light in the darkness that'll make the evident pain behind this all the more credible.
By the way, there's a 'dark songs' competition on at the moment if you haven't noticed... this could be a slam dunk...?
Pauly

Thank you!
I have other songs that aren't as dark as these two, I'm not sure why the really dark ones turn out to be my favorites that's why I share them here. I totally agree with you though, I just don't know how to balance it out when this is all I have to say about the topic, since it's personal.

I didn't know that. Thanks for telling me! I'll definitely try to submit this.