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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Skub on June 20, 2018, 06:22:35 PM
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It's been over a month since the last new song,so I thought it was time to impose upon you once again. ;)
It's a coming of age choon..regardless of age. Experiences come to us all at different times in our lives. It's never too late to learn new tricks.
When the lights went out
I asked,what happens now
She said,you don't believe
But we'll get through,somehow
Close your eyes and let it be
You don't need to see
She said,you won't need
Nerves of steel
You won't need to see at all
As long as you can feel
She told me it's a problem
People see too much
You can find what you need
It's all in the touch
Close your eyes and let it be
You don't need to see
Close your eyes and let it be
You don't need to see
Close your eyes and let it be
You don't need to see
https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/touch
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All the songs you post, including this one, always sound so professional to me. I have no nits.
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Great lyrics which I'm sure we can all relate to. Great music as well Serge :) The Riff is a killer. How do you come up with so many fab ones ? Sexy stuff :)
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superb
love the byrdsy gram parsonsy gtr intro
and then into that great groove
vocal stands out really does
genius change of gear in the middle
really enjoyed davy
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Wow, powerful lyrics indeed on a tough topic. Simple and the emotion really comes over. Just the right feel I think to show the conflict between despair and optimism. Great arrangement but bass shining particularly in this one for me.
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Whato Skub
Great choon
Nice middle 8, always tough to think of something different, works well, was that you on the Voice over? :)
cpm
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Hey man.....50 shades of Skub wtf? ;D ;)
Over my head mate ;). Your usual very nice eclectic guitar playing ;). Sounding very professional Skub, a treat as usual!
Nice one
Jamie
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What a great song, Davy! Vocals are really brilliant...knocked me sideways...so I had to comment!
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Well if this song is about sex, at 2 mins 38 seconds, don't you think you are showing off a bit? ;D
The thing that works best for me here is that riff, which kind of motors the song along, plus has that ear candy descending element to it which really hooks.
Vocals, good as ever and a really smart, condensed and punchy song.
If anything I would say the chorus hook was a bit on the short side - ie seemed to be over all too quickly. But wasn't that where I came in? ;)
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@CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928)
Aw,thanks Vicki. I can always rely on your support,but are you perfectly sure there aren't some examples of sloppy diction,poor grammar? I bet there is! :D
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Re the riffs,I steal them John! :D Oh,and Serge? ???
@nooms (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=11264)
Hey thanks a bunch nooms,I'm well chuffed ya liked it. Gram Parsons eh? Now there was a boyo! 8)
@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124)
Many thanks Adam. I'm a bit of a bluffer on the bass. I do enjoy playing the thing,but I always think a real bass player would do a better job than a guitarist pretending to play bass! It's cool ya liked it. Thanks man. 8)
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Art trumps perfect construction. I know there is at least one song in which I will always sing "choo" instead of "you". I can't remember what it is right now, but I know there is one.
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Great as always, Skub. I really like the premise, that it doesn't really matter what you look like, it's how you make each other feel. That's lovely. I won't talk about the guitar playing (amazing) or vocals (those, too), but I wasn't totally sold on the sexy breathing. I think I'd like it better without that.
Lynn
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Hi Davy,
Another great rocker, I like the intro riff, and the song really pushes along, the vocals are sounding great, well balanced and nice and smooth, great song all round.
Cheers, Mikey
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@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Ta dude,best to leave out my love noises! :D
@Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125)
Ta Jamie. I'd never put anything over your head man! :D
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253)
Cheers Paul,take care in the real world. ;)
@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274)
I think you covered it all quite tactfully,Michael! ;D
@redrhodie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21171)
Thanks Lynn,maybe you are right on the voice over thing. I think sometimes I'm in danger of coming across as a bit 'preachy'. In this case the voice over was an attempt to lighten the mood/inject a little humour,but I suppose all those things are very subjective! :D
@Mikey (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20986)
Cheers for yer ears Mikey,always appreciated. :)
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Take what I say with a grain of salt. I often don't get English humor, and I apparently don't get Irish humor, either. Haha. I didn't hear it that way. Definitely my problem and not the song's.
(I do have a sense of humor. Really, I do. I always laugh at funerals.)
Lynn
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Davy,
Good straightforward lyrics and I like the direct vocals and guitar, straight to the point.
Thoughts, wasn't convinced about the middle 8, felt a bit like a placeholder?
Anyway it has great energy, says what it needs to and leaves you wanting more.
:)
neil
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Hi Davy
What bloody marvelous song this is. I was hooked from the beginning by that descending guitar run. Such a short song, but it packs so much. And let me tell you, your voice on this one is extraordinarily good. Really gritty, in a good way.
Anything with heavy breathing in it gets my vote anyway.
One of my favourites of yours, I have to say.
Bill
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Very commercial and likeable sound on the guitaring.
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@redrhodie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21171)
Laughing at funerals can be good! :D
@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856)
Thanks Neil. Ya could be right about the M8. These days I just go with whatever pops into my head,I seldom overthink anything! :D
@Bill Saunders (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18525)
Wow! Do I owe you money Bill? :D
Thanks so much man,I'm always insecure about my vocals,so I appreciate the encouragement.
@Alan.S (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21268)
Thanks for listening. :)
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Hi Davy
Listened to this on Soundcloud before you dropped it on here,
really nice track, smashing the arrangement, Playing rocking as always,
I am a fan of your stuff so nothing to say only that,
Production is really good on this dude. well balanced, nice tones on the guitars etc.
Great work.
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@Cawproductions (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20938)
Yo Andy,I've been using your vocal recording tips,do ya think I'm getting there with this one?
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Hey Brother! Nice energy in the song! sounds like it could turn into a classic rock piece! you harmonies are AMAZING! love them. once I heard them I had to comment. keep it up!!!
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Some good parts in there , I read all the comments -for me not one of your best just didn't do it for me but then what do know
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Hi Skub,
Obviously as always from your songs …. Music expectations were met, Quality expectations were met too. Professional piece of work, and your follow, like and commenting stats says its all.
Well done!
Thank you.
Best Regards
Slava B.
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Another great song by you man!
Starting to get used to your sound, which is a good thing.
Your songs are different from each other ofcourse, but it's nice to hear that you use your voice the same way each time and use the 'same' set of instruments.
Really makes it nice to dive into your discography.
As for this song, it's great again. I like the electric guitar during the verses, makes it wayy more interesting to listen to.
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Hi,
Good stuff, especially I like the catchy chorus also the vocals are excellent.
I think the song could be longer?
Well done!
Refusedrevival
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Really liked how you buildt up the melody progression in the intro. Your voice sounds good in this mix. I like how it sits well with the music. Also your phrasing is spot on! Keep up the good work!
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@RobertMundane (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22182)
Thanks for listening man. 8)
@Katieoasis (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22158)
It's ok not to like stuff Katie and it's ok to say so. Thanks for listening. :)
@SlavaB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19895)
Thanks a heap for listening SlavaB. :)
@Almosthumanrobot (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21204)
Glad you liked it and thanks for playing my other stuff. Much appreciated. 8)
@refusedrevival (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18781)
I'm really into short compositions these days. I try to get it all done before 3 minutes! :)
@Tor Løvstad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22190)
Thanks for the listen and comments. :)
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sorry Skub. late to the party on this one. This is tge best song featuring heavg breathing that ive heard in a while! Love the lyrics and as others have mentioned the guitar riff is awesome. The song rollicks along. Another top rock song from you.
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Hi Davy,
I was familiar with this from your album but weirdly, it works better in isolation. I also couldn't believe how short it is - you pack a lot into a short space. I loved the melody on the "Close Your Eyes" line - straight to the hairs on the back of my neck. Great writing, awesome vocal and a real sense of authority and authenticity. Cracking stuff.
M
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@mickyplankton (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20769)
:D Thanks Micky. Glad you liked it man.
@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
You're probably right Alan,I wouldn't be too cute at selecting songs for an album,it's difficult for me to judge context. I tend just to bung a few recent songs on there and that'll do. Maybe I ought to have someone else do that job.
Anyway,thanks for the listen and I'm pleased you enjoyed it. :)
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Hey @Skub (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20061) I have heard and ‘liked’ this before on SC and with good reason am v familiar with it :-) - delighted to listen again and get the chance to say how much I like it.. love the chorus in particular with that great guitar riff pushing behind it! Wonderful playing and production - no surprise there! Lyrically strong - strikes a chord and beautifully sung, sir!!
Loved it - but then I am a fan!
K