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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Bostonfan2 on February 15, 2020, 12:20:52 AM
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I had this unfinished song I wrote a few months back and was very happy John wanted dive right in to save it :)
Produced by John as well as all Vocals, and adding to all the main instruments! (Thanks John!)
At this point we are ready for any thoughts or suggestions you may have ! .......Ray
https://soundcloud.com/pompeyjazz/all-i-feel
All I Feel
Its not fair but that's the way it goes
When You give your heart away You just never know
its a chance you take.
It took some time, and it took some faith
to learn how to live again when you walked away
but I cant erase, the beauty of your face.
You didn't really know, the depth of all I feel
what was right before you, was unknown to be real.
Im not chasing memories, you became a part of me
I cannot replace.
We only see what we choose to see
when we don't look honestly, deep inside.
With words that were left unspoken
all that remains is hidden emotion
but I didn't know, that You were letting go.....
You didn't really know, the depth of all I feel
what was right before you, was unknown to be real.
Im not chasing memories, you became a part of me
I cannot replace.
It took some time, and it took some faith
to learn how to live again when you walked away
but I cant erase, the beauty of your face.
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Lots to like here.
Moody and then it’s builds to a dead catchy rock chorus.
Like the space the vocals gave on the verse,
Two thoughts: where’s the solo at 2 mins?
And more choruses please at the end please at 2.42
Good work guys
:-)
Neil
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Now that’s a proper verse/chorus contrast. Smashing punchy gear change. Interesting use of cellos underneath those rock guits too. Liked the no-nonsense ending too, that’s always a tick for me. Great collab gentlemen.
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@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856) - Hey Neil, Thanks for your detailed feedback! Good ideas, Im sure we will
discuss :)
@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) - Thank You, glad you liked that contrast & John really brought the emotion
in with his Vox ....fun stuff!
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Guys,
Love the delays on the intro here.
really dig this track, classic pomp vocal style and a great structure, Music track is very cool, loads of dynamics.
Thumbs up here guys,
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Brave arrangement and it works 8)..like the space a lot, I think a semi tone lower would be better for your vocal John mate...cracking chorus and I agree with a previous post regarding the missing geetar solo :) :) 8)
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There is so much happening here. There's a real mixture of influences and consequently styles of playing that are evident in the production. I really enjoyed the contrast between the verse patterns that appear to delicately hang together and the more robust heavier sections that take me back to my childhood in the 70's. The juxtaposition of the two elements are for me what draws the listener in and invites him/her to discover more about this song.
Great work chaps!
Paul