[Marrianna]

Hi,

Just some new words to tell a story. The first half was written a while ago but have always wanted to complete it. I hear it sung with an accordian and haven't included a chorus (yet).  

MARY ANN’S LAST LAUGH                                ©Marriannasongs 2016


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[tomcrocus]

I'ts very clever Marrianna,
                                    it flows easily off the tongue,i imagine it being
sang in a bar,maybe a folk bar with the aforementioned accordian,
very witty,does it need a chorus?,you tell me!
                                                              best wishes,Tom.

[Neil C]

Marianna,
Put a big smile on my face it did. And I agree agree it doesn't need a chorus, indeed that would ruin it. Probably just a little musical hook after after the verses.
 
Neil

[hardtwistmusic]

I read it twice before, and then came back to it today.  It's a folk style song that takes familiarity to really get it's hooks into you.  But it DID sink it's hooks into me. 

Excellent story.  Excellent song idea.  Marvelously told lyric.

[Vintage54]

   Hello!
     I like this too, some very clever wordplay, such as

                     The morning of the mourning         and

                     Coughing near the coffin

    What can i say, you tried to put a smile on my face, and succeeded. My kind of funeral.

                                      Vintage54

[Marrianna]

I'ts very clever Marrianna,
                                    it flows easily off the tongue,i imagine it being
sang in a bar,maybe a folk bar with the aforementioned accordian,
very witty,does it need a chorus?,you tell me!
                                                              best wishes,Tom.

I'm pleased you appreciated this. I was quite apprehensive and so your comments are gratefully received.
It looks as though a chorus may not be necessary and pleased you agree about the accordian.

Thankyou Tom.

Neil,
It is rewarding to know that the words have made people smile
and I note your comment about not including a chorus. Thankyou.

Verlon

Just like my other replies, I am really pleased you had such high praise for the story and song.
Thankyou as always  

Ah, Vintage,
So pleased it made you smile. I hoped that the 'morning' and 'mourning' could fit when either read or sung.

I am proud of these comments from those who work to high standards. (I'm not meaning others don't, of course. It is just a compliment to the members who have commented in this instance).

I am sorry I haven't included all the quotes but my gratitude goes out to you all and it was only I haven't worked out how to get all the quotes into the same post. Sad, I know. Tom's is here anyway but i didn't just single that one out as they all mean a lot.!

Marrianna
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[Opal fruit]

Hi,

Been off for a while and came back today.  'Laugh' was definitely the operative word.  Its brilliant.  Very well put together.  I loved it.

I'm no expert, but even if, I wouldn't change a thing.

Opal

[Marrianna]

Hi,

Been off for a while and came back today.  'Laugh' was definitely the operative word.  Its brilliant.  Very well put together.  I loved it.

I'm no expert, but even if, I wouldn't change a thing.

Opal

HI Opal,

I was really pleased that 'Mary Ann's Last Laugh' made you laugh 

Thankyou for commenting and letting me know, and, as said, am pleased.

Marrianna 

[CaliaMoko]

You've gotten a lot of good feedback already, so I'll just mention how much I enjoy and appreciate your witty use of words. Every time I've read it so far (about three times) I notice something I missed previously. It is great!

Vicki

[Marrianna]

You've gotten a lot of good feedback already, so I'll just mention how much I enjoy and appreciate your witty use of words. Every time I've read it so far (about three times) I notice something I missed previously. It is great!

Vicki

Hi Vickie,

I'm so pleased to see your comment. Thankyou for taking the time to read.

All Good Wishes from

Marrianna      

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[Marrianna]

Mary Ann's Last Laugh deleted now but thankyou very much to all those who viewed, and also thankyou very much for the comments. They were much appreciated.

Marrianna

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