Welcome Icaros !
What a lovely love song.
Your English prose is much better than that of many indiginous Brits! The lyrics are spot-on, for a love song, and your rhyming words are well thought out and not at all cheesy.
I love these, in particular:
do you want to kill some time with me tomorrow - classic boy and girl in love situation...
cigarettes and borrowed money, TV sets ain't it funny
Shakespeare plays and strong black coffee.... you nailed this one.....
Your vocal delivery is a little bit shaky, but this actually adds more intimacy and innocence to the song.
Great stuff!
J.