So I'm not a singer, but I enjoy putting melodies together; I'd like opinions on the melody and how the vocal melody might be possibly altered to maximize the appeal of the song. I'd also love to find a singer willing to take a crack at this; I'd love to colaborate with someone who sees potential here:
Thank you for the critique, be harsh if you have to, you won't hurt my feelings, promise
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Yeah, I recorded the song in Portuguese because I though this romance-language could fit better
Thank you
Danny