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Title: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 11, 2024, 10:25:32 AM
Hola chicos!
This song came to me so quick, as if someone took me by the hand and found the words I wanted!!!
I enjoyed too doing the instrumental part, I wanted it to be something mysterious but powerful, without subtleties, direct, and I think I achieved that.
Following @Elvis Nash (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22812)  advice, and after struggling with the new Adobe Premiere text editor, I was able to put the lyrics on the video!!!
<espero que os entretenga!!!



Feelings feelings
so dense so dense
that far from being left behind
carried by the hand of time
they get tangled
in my hair
and become forest of sobs
wrapping me
in its tragedy

Feelings feelings
so dense so dense
that they seem knives and ropes
to hurt me
and tie my dreams

Jungle
that drowns me
with invisible vines
and the smell
of what is dead


I don't know if I go or come
when I move forward
I go back
engulfed
by what is not
despite what it was

I wonder
if I'm alive
while I walk
dragging this living pain
that grows and grows
until touching the ground
erasing all trace of  my steps

I don't know if I go or come
when I move forward
I go back
engulfed
by what is not
despite what it was


Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: rightly on April 11, 2024, 01:34:29 PM
Nice.
You might be one of the very few
who sounds good with that squeezey voice.
Fascinating lyrics with space to reflect on them.
I like the relentless bass

You make very good videos
But I don't watch them, I give my attention exclusively to the audio.
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: Elvis Nash on April 11, 2024, 02:16:23 PM
Now it looks professionally done Mora
You'll probably get more views
Very cool and mellow !!!!
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: RC James on April 11, 2024, 06:58:36 PM
This rises above complaint or disappointment into a subtle acceptance. The whispery quality of the vocal takes it there.
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 11, 2024, 08:28:58 PM
Nice.
You might be one of the very few
who sounds good with that squeezey voice.
Fascinating lyrics with space to reflect on them.
I like the relentless bass

You make very good videos
But I don't watch them, I give my attention exclusively to the audio.


hahaha Yes, I understand you, when I really want to listen to the song, to feel it from another perception, I close my eyes.
Thank you so much @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: ChrisPrice on April 11, 2024, 10:54:38 PM
Like @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) I don't tend to watch videos. I prefer to take in the music and this is another fabulous track Mora. Fabulous production as always. Great stuff :)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 12, 2024, 09:33:52 AM
Now it looks professionally done Mora
You'll probably get more views
Very cool and mellow !!!!

I've finally figured out how to work with Text in my editor... little by little...Thanks for your advice and comment!!!
Much appreciated
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 12, 2024, 08:40:52 PM
This rises above complaint or disappointment into a subtle acceptance. The whispery quality of the vocal takes it there.

Do you know? The happier you are, the more sad things you can write and describe.
@RCJames (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=14831)
Muchas gracias!!!
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: MonnoDB on April 13, 2024, 10:47:55 AM
This is special @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) ! Super hypnotic - the words are great but it’s the overall sound that makes it. I particularly love the arpeggiator and that persistent kick - together they really bring me somewhere else. I wasn’t sure about the bv treated double of your vocal but on consideration I think it adds to the disquiet of the piece.

So good….

K
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 13, 2024, 05:06:57 PM
Like @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) I don't tend to watch videos. I prefer to take in the music and this is another fabulous track Mora. Fabulous production as always. Great stuff :)

Hola Chris, qué tal? Thank you so much, Ya lo sé, only the music gives it another dimension
Have a nice week end @ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: subvibe on April 14, 2024, 02:45:39 PM

Hi

again a beautiful & original production
it has a Film Noir vibe to it & the constant changes grabbing your attention
very nice vocal FX that compliment the song

you have a unique style
subvibe
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 14, 2024, 08:32:05 PM
This is special @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) ! Super hypnotic - the words are great but it’s the overall sound that makes it. I particularly love the arpeggiator and that persistent kick - together they really bring me somewhere else. I wasn’t sure about the bv treated double of your vocal but on consideration I think it adds to the disquiet of the piece.

So good….

K

Hola @MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820)
I like this one, I think it is a song with balance and a direct sense towards the dark but with very bright flashes!!!Big kiss
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 16, 2024, 09:52:12 AM

Hi

again a beautiful & original production
it has a Film Noir vibe to it & the constant changes grabbing your attention
very nice vocal FX that compliment the song

you have a unique style
subvibe

Que bien! Gracias, glad you liked it, much appreciated, lately the forum is a little messed up and it shows in the movement and maneuvers loaded with strange ..... Have a nice week!! @subvibe (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22847)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: kevysc on April 16, 2024, 05:31:40 PM
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)  That bass really drives this one along. It has a bold, dangerous vibe. Absorbing lyrics and an excellent video (which I did watch :) ) Kevin
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: calafinestrat on April 16, 2024, 06:55:27 PM
Love the video and the song.The sexy voice reminds me of a singer called Eartha Kitt
from quite a while ago. Can't pretend I understand the lyrics
but they suit the dreamy backing perfectly. Great production.
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 17, 2024, 08:26:55 PM
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)  That bass really drives this one along. It has a bold, dangerous vibe. Absorbing lyrics and an excellent video (which I did watch :) ) Kevin

Estupendo!! Me alegra mucho you liked it,I'm starting to discover it now, little by little, I don't know why this usually happens to me hahaha
I'm glad to see you and thank you for stopping by, watching and commenting.
@kevysc (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19775)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 18, 2024, 12:15:58 PM
Love the video and the song.The sexy voice reminds me of a singer called Eartha Kitt
from quite a while ago. Can't pretend I understand the lyrics
but they suit the dreamy backing perfectly. Great production.
Love the video and the song.The sexy voice reminds me of a singer called Eartha Kitt
from quite a while ago. Can't pretend I understand the lyrics
but they suit the dreamy backing perfectly. Great production.

Hola @calafinestrat (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=23038)

Thank you so much! Lyrics? all lyrics have the mystery of who made them and why.

See you!
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: Jambrains on April 20, 2024, 01:13:32 PM
You have a unique style, musically as well as vocally, which is always a good thing in my book.
There is an understated tension in the track that I really like as well as the almost hypnotic qualities.
A really captivating soundscape, a well balance mix with everything in its own space, supporting and coexisting without colliding
Nice video as well!



Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on May 02, 2024, 12:15:37 PM
You have a unique style, musically as well as vocally, which is always a good thing in my book.
There is an understated tension in the track that I really like as well as the almost hypnotic qualities.
A really captivating soundscape, a well balance mix with everything in its own space, supporting and coexisting without colliding
Nice video as well!





HOla, I hadn't seen your comment!!! :o Thank you, much appreciated @Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: Elvis Nash on May 03, 2024, 03:30:38 AM
Been busy , Came by for another listen
Very nice production Mora , a lot of tasty things going on
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on May 05, 2024, 10:40:37 AM
Hola muchacho!  Thank you again!! You are giving movement to the forum!!! Much appreciated, have a nice day! @Elvis Nash (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22812)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: Elvis Nash on May 05, 2024, 12:24:53 PM
Well the catfish aren't biting so I have time to say something
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: moraamarolaloba on May 05, 2024, 12:39:35 PM
Bueno, here life continues to give blows and scares but I still haven't fallen, I think I have become a laminated photo stuck to the wall  8)
Stay well @Elvis Nash (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22812)
Title: Re: Feelings
Post by: Elvis Nash on May 05, 2024, 12:48:39 PM
Well if your not scared your not making enough mistakes to churn out something great , This is pretty close to it , so fear has its benefits
I find laughing at 9 feral cats and my dog barking at them helps at 5am