[Paulski]

Hi everyone

This is a song about having your children grow up and leave home.
I have music for it written in 3/4 (waltz) time.
You'll notice the third line in every verse has a different meter - which may seem out of place - but still fits the music I wrote. Oh, and those dashed lines are an instrumental break.

Any comments or advice will be appreciated!

Best
Paul


Empty Nest
Copyright © Tennyson Road Music 2014

Leaves had blown from lofty thrones to lay in waiting for winter
My, how he'd grown, our last to go, high hopes in tow, to first semester
We stood and watched his bus leave the world that was us..then..
We headed home, to what is known, as an "empty nest"

Not long ago this house was full of childish laughter and chatter
Those lttle fingers, tiny toes, how they could scamper and patter!
Our sleep lost in the night, when our sweet babies would cry..yet..
Who would have guessed, that's what we'd miss, in our empty nest?

We looked for signs that they could fly with their new wings, so fragile
And it was cruel, all we could do, not to reach out and help them
Hard turns in your life you must learn for yourself..and..
They persevered, as we watched from here, in our empty nest

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Showers in spring know when it's time for the flowers to open
Powerful wings lifted them higher than we ever could hope for
We untied all those strings tiny hands had once groped..for..

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So hard to let go!
Oh, so hard to let go...

A Dad and Mom need to become like a husband and wife again
We resurrect, and reconnect to that earlier life and
We carefully stow precious memories that we know..in..
This treasure chest - that they left - in our empty nest.

[Soul Punk]

Loved this

A rite of passage that happens later in life, and you have captured two things expertly

The loss of power and the magic blanket thrown over kids to keep them safe is gone in the first verse and a simple question in the last verse'What do we do now?'

Leaves had blown from lofty thrones to lay in waiting for winter
One of our own, (the last to go), away to take his first semester
Dust swirled after his bus left the world that was us..then..
We headed home, to what is known, as an "empty nest"

A Dad and Mom need to become like a husband and wife again
We resurrected, reconnected to our earlier life and
We carefully stow precious memories we own..in..
This treasure chest - that they have left - in our empty nest.

I enjoyed this, not musically gifted enough to know what you meant in your intro
I just get a country vibe but that's me

SP

[Paulski]

Hey SoulPunk

Thanks for the kind words on the lyrics.
Happy to hear that a younger reader can get something out of them as well.
As far as genre's go, I would say the music I have written is show-tune style with lots of strings and orchestration - but maybe country would work too..

Cheers from the land of cold!
Paul

[hardtwistmusic]

I can really identify with this.  One of my kids is 700 Miles away in San Francisco, and the other is 1100 miles away in Los Angeles. 

[JonnyD]

Reallg nice - I love how the last verse is one of hope

I can't quite access the meaning of the first two lines though - do the leaves represent the children? Shame I can't work out the meaning because that line actually sounds really nice, what with all that alliteration and the rhyming between 'blown' and 'throne'

Lovely lyrics overall though

[Paulski]

Reallg nice - I love how the last verse is one of hope

I can't quite access the meaning of the first two lines though - do the leaves represent the children? Shame I can't work out the meaning because that line actually sounds really nice, what with all that alliteration and the rhyming between 'blown' and 'throne'

Lovely lyrics overall though

Thanks for the kind words.
The first line is supposed to be about the parents.
They've had their "glory" days (lofty thrones) but are now awaiting their senior years (winter).
Best
Paul

[Paulski]

Or, I suppose you could just take those lines literaly and they set the time of year as autumn..

[Paulski]

I can really identify with this.  One of my kids is 700 Miles away in San Francisco, and the other is 1100 miles away in Los Angeles. 

Yeah - me too Verlon. Three kids all flown from the nest!
Any advice on the lyrics?
thanks!
Paul

[BooBoo]

I'm not able to relate to this but I think you have captured the theme well in the lyrics. Without hearing it, the third lines do seem out of place but I'm sure as you've said, they will fit with the music you have put to this. I really like this and I love lines such as "Not long ago this house was full of childish laughter and chatter" because of the imagery you get in those lines.

[Scarriff]

This is quiet an interesting read to be honest, I'm used to reading a lot of song about pain and angst etc, but this is on a less depressing and more reflective note than those types of songs.
This lyrics has quite a unique ring to it and it totally works.

I like how the tone is kinda sad (at least that's what I gather from it) but it does have a nice underlying tone of optimism and overall positive to it which separates it from being another song about pain and suffering, which to be honest I think is a topic that is never really tackled with enough finesse.

So yeah I'll stop rambling now, great song bro!!

[iquivel]

I really love how personal it feels and how captivated I was after a couple of lines.
Its very good writing in my opinion and it flows together beautifully.
Something i personally need to work on

[Paulski]

This is quiet an interesting read to be honest, I'm used to reading a lot of song about pain and angst etc, but this is on a less depressing and more reflective note than those types of songs.
This lyrics has quite a unique ring to it and it totally works.

I like how the tone is kinda sad (at least that's what I gather from it) but it does have a nice underlying tone of optimism and overall positive to it which separates it from being another song about pain and suffering, which to be honest I think is a topic that is never really tackled with enough finesse.

So yeah I'll stop rambling now, great song bro!!

Thanks for the comments - glad it wasn't too depressing - always a risk in a song like this. The music is a little orchestral - hopefully that will work to keep it optimistic.
Paul

[Paulski]

I really love how personal it feels and how captivated I was after a couple of lines.
Its very good writing in my opinion and it flows together beautifully.
Something i personally need to work on

Thanks so much for the kind words - glad you liked it.
Paul

[benjo]

 nice write here paul

 I can relate to this so much even though its from the other side of the pond
 only word I didn't like was GROPED in England it's a little more sexual
 over here when you GROPE your having a feel

 I would use the word GRASPED for

 also,, as I read the second line below it just seemed to finish better
 with the word IMAGINE but that's just how I got it
 love some of the lines you've got in this lyric very nice write

 CAN'T WAIT TO HEAR IT

 
{build}
Showers in spring know when it's time for the flowers to open
Powerful wings lifted them higher than we ever could IMAGINE


 
{build}
Showers in spring know when it's time for the flowers to open
Powerful wings lifted them higher than we ever could hope for
We untied all those strings tiny fingers had once groped..for..


 

[Paulski]

I can relate to this so much even though its from the other side of the pond
 only word I didn't like was GROPED in England it's a little more sexual
 over here when you GROPE your having a feel

Hey - what have you done to the Queen's English?  haha!
I'm not usin' the "Urban" dictionary - no way!