I do have music for this one and the flow of the lyric fits just fine. So, if you have any issues with the way that it reads... how it flows in that way... don't worry about it.
Just mostly looking to see if you are getting something out of the lyric. If it makes much sense, of if there is maybe a better word here or there, or a better rhyme than what I have.
Style is... folk, basically. A 2/4 folk tune.
Thanks so much!
EDIT:
A thought... do you think this would work better as a singular "I" as opposed to "we"? I'm starting to think that, maybe so.
"If You Knew"
1.
We put on our outside smiles
As we step out the front door
And we’ll acknowledge it’s been harder
But we won’t say a whole lot more
If you felt the things we’re feeling
If you saw the things we saw
You would let me throw my cards out
Then let me draw, draw, draw, draw, draw
2.
We march gaily through the morning
And steadfast through the day
And we’ll answer all your questions
But we won’t have much to say
If you felt the things we’re feeling
They’re things you’d never want to know
But please don’t read too much in to it
Just let it go, go, go, go, go
(bridge?)
3.
These things we carry on our shoulders
They fit underneath our shirt
They say it makes us stronger
But they don’t say how much it hurts
If you felt the things we’re feeling
You might never want to feel
If you lived the lives we’re living
It’d make you reel, reel, reel, reel, reel
If you felt the things we’re feeling
They’re things you’d never want to know
But please don’t read too much in to it
Just let it go, go, go, go, go
Let it go…
©2016 Todd Leiter-Weintraub