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JustSoStories
Busker
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Do You Deserve It
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April 11, 2023, 07:32:34 PM »
I would like your thoughts on this tune...
https://soundcloud.com/just-so-stories/do-you-deserve-it/s-toMsBjBKwpg?si=c7d9765041b447caa00bc83ceab84413&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing
Do you deserve it
Come back
Instinct of a day of striving
Please come back
Don’t leave me pleased
In all of this nothingness
Nothingness
Have you ever seen
The bluest skies
Do you deserve them?
What did you ever do to be so light as a butterfly
Your innocence makes me crawl
You’re confused by your own trail
Fluttering around
Do you need a help for the way out
I guess you do
It’s not about getting closer
Why did you forget it wasn’t all over
You’ve long since sunk in greed
But we’re still here
We’re still here
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pompeyjazz
Stadium Tour
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pompeyjazz
Re: Do You Deserve It
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Reply #1 on:
April 11, 2023, 08:59:16 PM »
It would be lovely to listen to your song
@JustSoStories
but the link doesn’t work. How about listening to some of the other songs on here and submitting some reviews while you fix the link ? Looking forward to hearing your song 😊
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JustSoStories
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Re: Do You Deserve It
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April 11, 2023, 09:14:56 PM »
Hi. I fixed the link! Thanks.
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