[PaulAds]

https://soundcloud.com/thefuneralcrasher/friends-on-benefits-wip

Just doing this one...but the structure is currently a bit weird...this is the only way i think i can get it working...i've tried the old verse - chorus - thing but it didn't seem to suit...probably because the chorus (at the end) is very similar to the verse...i'd appreciate any thoughts...i don't know if it's worth spending a lot of time on...thanks!

[pompeyjazz]

This structure works for me Paul. Like the middle 8 with the ascending bass. Maybe that could be repeated?

Cheers

John

[Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra]

Yeah it works for me too Paul.

It's got one of those listenable lyrics that don't seem to need a chorus and that solo section hits at just the right time with that little set-up verse beforehand.

The repeated friends on benefits bits after that kind of act as a big chorus at the end anyway.

Yeah the structure is not normal (ha!) but it works well.

I had to dig up the lyrics from the lyric section (not that I needed them, must be a habit now!)
Welfare state of mind might make a good title sometime but perhaps a bit obvious and 'friends on benefits' is a GREAT title anyway...little bit of a rhyme in there and rolls off the tongue so nicely!

[PaulAds]

Thanks very much, fellas...very much appreciated.

it does seem unusual in this format, but i just couldn't find a way around it...very pleased it is ok though...it'll do for an album track...i've nearly got an album full of album tracks 

[pompeyjazz]

Me too. But all from an albulm that is found in a charity shop 

[adamfarr]

I didn't notice anything wrong with the structure. The break came at the right time and really kept my interest. As others have said, nothing wrong with a one line hook instead of or as a chorus.

I could really do with taking a leaf out of your quick recording book...

[PaulAds]

Cheers, everyone...I'll just leave it like this and call it done...bang it over into finished songs and let it go...

I had a good think about it - and this is about as good as this one's ever going to get.

Thanks for the reassurance about its structure...appreciate it