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Title: My song: Truth Tea.
Post by: Johnnyuk on February 17, 2018, 07:53:12 PM: .
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Post by: kevysc on February 17, 2018, 08:51:19 PM: Cool catchy song, great production and nice video!

Kevin
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 17, 2018, 08:54:57 PM: .
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Post by: Skub on February 17, 2018, 10:05:10 PM: Yo Johnnyuk.

Welcome to the forum man. :)

The song has that 80s Human League 'Don't you want me' vibe. It's a catchy offering,well sung,performed and produced.

The only thing I'd like is for the vocals to be a little less dry,not much,just a little to make them sound more an integral part of the whole track.

All my opinion of course,and I'm not always right. ;)
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 17, 2018, 10:11:12 PM: .
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Post by: DaveDeMann on February 17, 2018, 10:41:28 PM: Catchy, nice vocals & music.

But...

certain lines are hard to accept, for example

He'll drown you in truth tea
yeah that's what he's gonna do
he'll drown you in truth tea
he'll spill it all over you.

is, well, a metaphorical expression which might be open to, misinterpretation.

Also the word 'integrity' should really only be in a light themed song when it rhymes 'intercity' for fun.

Otherwise as others and myself say, catchy tune.
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Post by: pompeyjazz on February 17, 2018, 10:44:48 PM: Hi Johnny..Hope you stick around bud cos there was some great stuff going on there. Welcome to our weird world of Internetspacetravelnumneronehitsongstuff

:)
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Post by: shadowfax on February 18, 2018, 08:05:07 AM: Fine song and fine production, I know your not a fan of reverb but the vocal is very dry and seems a little bit disjointed from the song, but we all differ in our opinions of stuff like this so no biggie!! 8)
distinct 80's feel and as skub said very..Human League :)
don't watch vids with music so cannot comment on it.. :) :)

welcome to the forum mate... :)
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Post by: Walrus5668 on February 18, 2018, 04:01:35 PM: love the production , song is very catchy ... nice one
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 18, 2018, 08:20:28 PM: .
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Post by: adamfarr on February 19, 2018, 06:50:25 AM: Great theme and lyrics - really great picture you paint and the ironic superhero images work really well. "Truth tea" sounds really original and memorable. The music works well too - I like the bugglegum retro sound over a modern serious topic. Interesting listen indeed! I think you may be a fellow member of the "quirky" club, fine by me.
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Post by: Wicked Deeds on February 19, 2018, 02:45:21 PM: Listened to this early this morning. There is so much to like. It is ever so charming. How do you stand using the Superman movie footage? Did you seek permission to use it?

Great track.

Paul
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 19, 2018, 03:15:28 PM: .
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Post by: RealKevM on February 20, 2018, 09:03:50 PM: Hi mate welcome to the forum. I'm not sure about the Superman video but your song is really nicely produced and I love the whole Human League vibe.
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Post by: MichaelA on February 22, 2018, 02:58:26 PM: Well I will stick with the Sheffield connection - re Human league, but will also add in Pulp because of the quirkiness of the lyrics. 'Truth Tea' - what a great song title. It's an offering meant to entertain and this it does I believe with such a catchy delivery.
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Post by: Cawproductions on February 22, 2018, 04:11:57 PM: Dude,

Are you the actual guy from Human league, sound just like him. lol. This track is a proper throwback to my school days.

I remember when Frankie goes to hollywood (relax) got banned from our school disco for being to rude.....how times have changed.
The stuff my kids listen to now.....and its before 9pm watershed.(I say kids, they are almost adults)

totally captured the feel of the era, nice work.
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 22, 2018, 08:25:13 PM: .
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Post by: cowparsleyman on February 22, 2018, 08:26:07 PM: Well Johnny, right up my street, engineering and production is good.

All the way through the listen something bothered me, then I got it, BVox, Joanne and Susan Ann, they were conspicious by their absence, it'll sound complete when they go in, I'm sure if you did at least a couple it'll sound much better, have you got something like Melodyne? that can help?

Very precise work, I really like like it.

I do think that the lyric Truth Tea could be more hooky, Dave Mann is right there, it kind of dilutes the punch of the song, I can't relate to truth tea, especially with the imagery in the vid. 'Help me' or 'Enemies, fear me'

Anyway hope you don't mind.

cpm
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Post by: Cazrolina on February 23, 2018, 10:43:10 PM: Yes. A Human League, Pulp and Madonna vibe all rolled into one. Nicely done.
Can I buy truth tea in Tescos tomorrow? (Other supermarkets, of course, are available.) My 5 year old son has started fibbing about EVERYTHING this week. Our cat ate a kit kat chunky this morning... :)
Quirky, lots of fun and really well produced. cx
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Post by: Johnnyuk on February 24, 2018, 03:47:03 PM: .
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Post by: Neil C on February 25, 2018, 10:21:42 AM: Hi Johnny,
Good to have you with us and enjoyed the song.

When I saw the title I was a little intrigued as c sounded a mouthful but no worries you pulled it off.
Lots to like hear at it bounces along, enjoyed you vocals too, suited it well.

My only suggestion was in the chorus that you could have gone up an octave on Truth Tea, would have added more impact.
:)
Neil