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Dutchbeat:
nice,

you have such a great voice, i like how your vocals sound on this (especially the first part), but this probably has more of the 80's feel that i like

it seems to miss a strong and catchy vocal hook, your songs of now have much more of that, this is very much music for the road, the long open road

that drop back to just guitar somewhere at 3.40 didn't really do it for me, and sorry after that point the vocals and music didn't grasp me as much as the first part did, for some reason

just my thoughts

benjo:
hi allan,

love this really draws you into it,
now i'm going to be honest here
in the first part with the first vocal WOW, for me your voice is so good kind of like softer slower oasis
but after the tempo change and the second vocal on you seem to have gone a little country
now this is just my opinion,  but if you can take the first part of the track with the first vocal
I think you've got a real winner there the blend of music then vocal just fit,
I hope you understand what I mean allan I hope you hear what I mean when you go over it again
it's going to be a great piece but try to carry the first vocal through the whole piece
VERDICT you've got something here, well done tony...

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