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Mannequin

« on: April 08, 2010, 08:39:47 PM »
What do y'all think about this song I wrote? I've been working on these lyrics for a while and I think I've finally finished! It's called "Mannequin" and it is about my experiences within love.

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I've removed these lyrics as they are taken from a song recorded by Britney Spears on her album Circus (thanks Dru for pointing this out)

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Re: Mannequin

« Reply #1 on: April 10, 2010, 05:00:47 PM »
Hey :)  Thanks for joining, and for posting your work.

Definitely reads like song lyrics, and I'm guessing you've written a melody to go with this?  I like the mannequin metaphor, it's a nice image.  Very pop feel to this, can imagine the song that goes with this being played on the radio.

Good work :)
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Re: Mannequin

« Reply #2 on: May 10, 2010, 01:07:27 PM »
This is a Britney Spears song from the 2008 album "Circus". Unless you're Britney Spears, Harvey Mason or Rob Knox I don't think you wrote this ;)

I agree with tone though the mannequin metaphor used in the song creates a great image.
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