[Steng]

Lovely song, I like the whistling. Great guitar work, nice and intimate. Reminds me a lot of Shack. Nice one.

Steng

[IronKnee]

First impression..excellent! and always love your guitar work...

Thanks Man!

Hi Tom!

It's always a treat when you post a song.
I think the lyrics are a bit too simple. Just
a bit more depth in an added bridge would
give that little extra.
The delay is a bit distracting. But just a little.

Great work!

- Martin

Hi Martin........so good of you to say

Hi Tom.

The 60s want their song back. 

It has a lovely Beatles/Badfinger vibe,which is just fine in my book.

I'd change nothing. 

Thanks Skub for listening and commenting

A real treat 'Nuff said.

Loving your work!

Thank you C...


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[saver]

hi tom , again another nice song written by you . very laid back and relaxing ane very folkish , for sure it is not a commercial song to be honest but who cares , good songs don't need to be commercial and being commercial doesn't mean good at all . to my taste ther's a lot of reverb in your voice but i guess that's the effect you wanted to make it kinda dreamy . lyrics are ok too , maybe very simple but ok .

[IronKnee]

Beautiful fingerpicked intro that engages the listener from the beginning.  . In fact the guitar is delightful throughout.  I'd ease off on the reverb a little in the mix.  Lyrically, everything has it's place and I admire that in a well written song.  This has a lazy Sunday kind of feel, Mayberry like 'Feelinn' Groovy (The 59th street bridge song- Paul Simon) I was going to suggest a contrasting section but then Maybe  part of the charm and your ability to achieve that lazy Sunday feeling is in the short presentation of this song.

Very enjoyable for me.

Paul

Thanks for listening and commenting, Paul....

Hi Tom,

Read these out to my mate (2 for 1 Sundays ), we both picked out lines form the fourth verse as our faves (Him the first two, me the second two).

Interesting song, we both got the impression of forbidden love, which was intriguing given your context around your sister 

Think I read in the comments that the lyrics are too simple, but simplicity isn't always a bad thing - and there's plenty in there to get us thinking and understand the position your protagonists are in.

Beautiful and soft feeling to the whole thing, I really enjoy how you can have your soft melody but still convey a rugged sort of pain.

Glen thinks that the simple musical arrangement compliments the simplicity of the lyrics. He also feels that the music is a bit playful, which diminishes some of the undertones lyrically to create a more enjoyable balance.

Love the whistling btw.

Cheers,
Scott.

Hi Scott........interesting take.......and my goal is to simplify all my lyrics. the simpler, the better 
Anyways...thanks soooooo much for listening and commenting!

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[IronKnee]

Hi,

I liked this, nice and relaxed, honest with some good melodies and harmony.

If I'm being honest though, it feels like it's missing a trick to me. It feels like it should have a bigger chorus. The lines 'you can't hide it' to 'true love always grows' feel like a pre chorus that should then launch into a big catchy chorus.

Of course, feel free to dismiss this as bonkers and I appreciate it might totally change the mood or what you were trying to achieve.

Still enjoyed what's there though.

Yodasdad

Hey there Yodasdad........yea, no tricks up my sleeves with this one. Just a simple tune written as an observation  Thanks for listening and commenting! It's appreciated!

I think there's something innocent and unpretentious about this - nothing too poetic or artsy. Possibly without the guitar it might be too simple but the guitar gives it a real timeless (medieval? 1969?) feel.

Very relaxed and atmospheric.

Thanks Adam for the encourgement....and for listening.
Oh, and congrats for the prize won for that monthly comp. 

Real 60's vibe, l but timeless,  and I love the way it skips along - beautiful guitar work.  I wouldn't change a thing - wish I'd written it 

Mike

Hey...and thanks to you, Mike....always appreciated!

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[mickyplankton]

Hi Tom. i like the 60s vibe. very gentle. perhaps a little like the band Love or Remember a Day by Pink Floyd. the production is also excellent and bonus points for having a strong voice and good techincal skills re the guitar. i feel i agree with Yodas dad though. its a solid album track but not quite a hit single.

[pompeyjazz]

Lovely stuff which I missed earlier Tom. Makes me feel like I'm sitting round a fire on a summer night smoking something. Excellent vibe man

[IronKnee]

Hi Tom. i like the 60s vibe. very gentle. perhaps a little like the band Love or Remember a Day by Pink Floyd. the production is also excellent and bonus points for having a strong voice and good techincal skills re the guitar. i feel i agree with Yodas dad though. its a solid album track but not quite a hit single.

Thanks Micky for listening and commenting. This is one of those songs that just "flew" out. I didn't want to put a ton of polish on this one. This was for my sister.

Lovely stuff which I missed earlier Tom. Makes me feel like I'm sitting round a fire on a summer night smoking something. Excellent vibe man

Thanks Pompy!

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[boolio]

Hi
Fabulous song melodically very compelling and very nicely sung.
Super whistling but I think a little more contrasting chorus would have been good but overall a great listen

Phil

[IronKnee]

Hi
Fabulous song melodically very compelling and very nicely sung.
Super whistling but I think a little more contrasting chorus would have been good but overall a great listen

Phil

Thanks Phil.........I call this more a ditty, than a song 
Thanks for listening, and commenting!


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[delb0y]

Always a pleasure to listen to your work, Tom.

[IronKnee]

Always a pleasure to listen to your work, Tom.

Thanks! Man 


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[exfairy]

I like it! I was going to say that I think the reverb/echo is too much but I'm getting into it - it has quite a haunting vibe.... If you were going to do a full production of it, which you don't have to, it's lovely as it is but if you were, I can imagine a few strings, maybe close mic-ed (and not midi) if you can. It'd add to the raw sound of this song. But then the rawness if fine as it is.

[digger72]

Hi Tom,

Simple but effective song.

Strong melodies. Tasteful playing and restrained vocal delivery.

All works well.

Digger