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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Elvis Nash on April 26, 2024, 02:23:13 AM
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sometimes they tear me apart
Carve all these scars in my heart
Lead me off this road that I’m on
Into the dark(ness) till I’m lost
pre
But I feel the light in my soul
And there's one thing that I know
Ch
I need to lose my demons
Fly with angels
Up there with freedom
Forget the wrongs get it right
Out of sight out of mind
Don't need em
Make some heavenly changes
I need to lose my demons
Fly with angels
V2
They call from hell at 10pm
Using the voice of my drinkin’ friends
Come on man, let the good times roll
But I got a woman here at home
Pre:
And where will I be at midnight
Running wild or by her side?
Ch
bridge
Tonight I’m sober as stone
She’s here ’n temptation’s gone
Ch
I lost my demons
Now Fly with angels
Up there with freedom
Forgot the wrongs got it right
Out of sight out of mind
Didn't need em
Made some heavenly changes
Found some sweet salvation
I lost my demons
Now Fly with angels
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The intention of the voice when saying the words has impacted me and left a strange feeling, a mixture of being good and desolate at the same time...
A deep lyric, a guitar that is the needle that sews the fabric, lines that paint loneliness and hell and others that wrap you in feathers, so light.
Very good song chico!! @Elvis Nash (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22812)
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They'll will be a series of songs I'll cut that were demoed to pitch before . I see no value in wasting songs cuz Nashville don't want them. This is the first one. Well I guess heaven is a few songs worth doing , hell is money and dealing with reality , But on a good note I caught a 20 lb catfish yesterday
Thanks Mora
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Really well written song Elvis - it has more of a rock vibe than a lot of your catalogue? The production sounds very smooth and polished although I'd have liked the sound of that base to have been a little more menacing, though I guess thats a personal taste thing. Really good though!
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Ooh
I like this a lot Elvis
Very powerful and positive
Production top notch
I like that tense bild up and the eventual release.
A very credible vocal too!
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Its just country rock guys , i added African Gospel singers on BGVS ,
Troy who sang it first is a lot more country sounding then me , I think you really have to be from the south to get that Nashville Twang sound .
I just re- cut it for me to sing , since i promote myself . thanks for listening guys , I appreciate it , it was 3 writers Brent myself and Troy added don't need em, didn't need em, to fit melody. that fits the story . BZ Lewis mixed it , I hear he worked the vocals on a few tricks . I'm like George Westinghouse I surround myself with people smarter then me. Though George was a genius , he was not proud and had 100's on engineers to say tackle Niagara falls on electricity. Edison was a bit different , he took all the credit on everything , kinda of a glory hound. Now Tesla was smarter then both of them , but a horrible business man. i can relate with that .
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desire for change can take overwhelming setbacks but sometimes catches the drift of original approach.
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We don't escape the suffering, But get a few breaks from it. Were like planes lifting off to reach the higher power,( that's if your intelligent enough to grasp the concept)... but eventually we have to land to a world and minds full of problems .
I'm thinking ( being a optimist ) this and a few more done and being done, might do better with a ROI in Cd sales... added to a new Cd.
thanks
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Indeed, a bit more of a rock song than your other songs I've heard. I love this song. As usual the production is fabulous. I can't think of anything I'd change here. Loving it. :)
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It's got a happy ending , I'll break my rules without one . I was lazy , but finished it . That's the good part on doing country music , you can be older and kinda get away with it , Alt rock , you got kids with new trends and were still listening to the Beatles . That's probably coming off wrong , But everything on the internet does.... Thanks
V1
I’m still running jumping hurdles
I count my troubles by the bundles
A mountain of stress weighs on my chest
Next week I go in for tests
Pre
The horizon is a sheet of dark clouds
I eat I sleep and every night I dream about
Ch
Somewhere south of a memory
I'm on a river with Marie
The moon is a bit brighter
The world a tad kinder
Time hangs like a vine from a mangrove tree,
Somewhere south of a memory
V2
The doctor’s prognosis isn’t good
A broken heart can’t be fixed like wood
A year ago I had my whole life to live
Now its Jack Daniels and sedatives
pre
She left me standing on muddy banks
North of where our boat sank
Ch
bridge
I'd rather talk to her ghost at midnight stoned
At least I won't feel so damn alone
Ch
Somewhere south of a memory
I'm on a river with Marie
The moon is a bit brighter
The world a tad kinder
Time hangs like a vine from a mangrove tree
I wish I could stay here for eternity
Somewhere south of a memory