To Dwell

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Matt B

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« on: May 19, 2012, 01:39:06 PM »
I’m awake, late at night,
My eyes won’t let me sleep, no.
Can’t get things off my mind
Though, I’ve never really tried,
While I’ve still got you all,
I have my excuse to be unhappy
Blaming all the world
Because I won’t let things go.

Don’t let go, life is too real.
Hold onto your pain, inside of your head
Locked away, no one can see
Your excuse to miss it all

A man, lives in the forest,
Lives like the poorest, he’s barely eaten
Doesn’t need help from no-one
Animals, his only friends.
Lives all alone, pushes them away
The world turned against him
But he, remembers every night
That he’s lonely every day.

Don’t let go, life is too real.
Hold onto your pain, inside your head
Locked away, no one can see
Your excuse to miss it all.

Like the singer who lost his voice,
Cancerous wound, took his life.
His heart still beats away
But he’ll never feel the same.
Sits at home, misses the show.
Only a year ago he sang there
Now he has no friends,
Because he sang his life away.

Don't let go, life's too real,
You have an excuse to miss it all.


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Matt B

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« Reply #1 on: May 19, 2012, 01:43:11 PM »
Not to keen on the lines,
"Hold onto your pain, inside of your head
Locked away, no one can see"
but i can change them at another time.
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relativityEmA

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« Reply #2 on: May 20, 2012, 09:25:14 PM »
I like the lines

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But he, remembers every night
That he’s lonely every day

They stood out at me; those are the lines that show that your talent is seeping through (becoming obvious)
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Matt B

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« Reply #3 on: May 21, 2012, 12:41:49 PM »
Thank You  :)
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