[Dave Bradley]

I've been working on a lot of stuff, but this one is my latest attempt at a properly structured and catchy rock song with a few twists. Lyrics were a bit stream of consciousness (as always). No autotune here by the way, so be gentle on my pitchiness...

https://soundcloud.com/sciencebase/dont-wait-for-me

Don't wait for me

And though, the waiting game is over, There's never time to really change your mind
You'll see that if at first it's clover, Next time, it's thorns that you will find

Don't wait for me, I won't be coming
Don't to turn to see, what you think you left behind
If at first, you really don't feel anything
Then the blind don't need to lead the blind

There's a time and a turning point for everything, And everything will turn out in the end
You know the thorns will cut and tear your fragile skin, Next time, let armour be your friend

Don't look at me, I won't be running
Don't turn away, from what you see ahead
If at first you really don't feel anything
Then the rest is better left unsaid

At last, the wounds begin their healing, But, skin bears the scars just the same
I know that armour won't save your feelings, In the end, it's such a vicious game

Don't wait for me, I won't be coming
Don't to turn to see, what you think you left behind
If at first, you really don't feel anything
Then the blind don't need to lead the blind
Don't wait for me, don't wait for me, don't wait

[Dutchbeat]

Hi Sciencebase,

now that was a pleasant listen...sounds good to me. I think the vocals need to go up at the loud guitar bits

but what a drive!
after that (great!) solo....why not keep that loud guitar running...no mercy...

but cool yes, very cool
 

[Dave Bradley]

Hi Sciencebase,

now that was a pleasant listen...sounds good to me. I think the vocals need to go up at the loud guitar bits

but what a drive!
after that (great!) solo....why not keep that loud guitar running...no mercy...

but cool yes, very cool
 

Thanks!

Yeah...this is a rather rough mix...the driving guitar wasn't even in the first pass...but maybe needs to be there a bit more and I need to drink more whiskey to get my throat rougher for this kind of song...

[Dutchbeat]

actually, i think you vocal is very fitting, the rather smooth sound with the heavy guitar works, so no need for whiskey as far as i am concerned

[Dave Bradley]

actually, i think you vocal is very fitting, the rather smooth sound with the heavy guitar works, so no need for whiskey as far as i am concerned

Darn it! I was looking for an excuse to crack open a bottle of Black Bush...

[Dutchbeat]

hahaha, go ahead, i was only referring to the need to bathe your vocal chords in whiskey..

cheers

[Dave Bradley]

hahaha, go ahead, i was only referring to the need to bathe your vocal chords in whiskey..

cheers

Hah! Cool...I usually save that kind of treat for Xmas to be honest, a few beers this evening with my home-cooked curry might do the trick though.

[Dave Bradley]

Thinking that I might MIDI a keyboard sound to parallel the heavy guitar figure...allow me to keep that drive going without it being incessant distorted guitar...

[Dave Bradley]

MIDIfied and synthed up version now online...

https://soundcloud.com/sciencebase/dont-wait-for-me

[Neil C]

Good poppy/prog song, well arranged.
Think you ticked the structure, catchy rock box.
And wow what a guitar riff - is that played on the SG in the picture?
Thoughts: I think I'd be tempted to put either a powerchord or big synth under the chorus.

Neil
 

[Dave Bradley]

Thanks! Yeah, I originally thought about using some big power chords but with open top strings in the choruses...and then didn't get around to it. I think they'd fit best in the bit where the synths have their standalone spot towards the end and the guitar lick isn't playing...

Sorry, no, I didn't record this on the SG, I just borrowed that for the jam when that photo was taken a while back...my recording electric is an Ibanez RG (loads of pickups and a locking whammy bar)

[Dave Bradley]

I had a play...recorded a power chords from 1'40" which lead into the solo better I think

https://soundcloud.com/sciencebase/dont-wait-for-me

[montydog]

Wow, that drives along! Nice combination of smooth vocal with gritty guitar - you can really play. I thought your lyrics were excellent - I particularly liked this:

"At last, the wounds begin their healing, But, skin bears the scars just the same
I know that armour won't save your feelings, In the end, it's such a vicious game"

Only criticism is your vocals go a little out of tune when you sing loudly but that just needs a bit of practice. This is an extremely good piece of work - catchy and well written and no clichés - hooray!

Nice one.

[Dave Bradley]

Yeah, been a bit under the weather vocally cos of pollen and it is a bit pitchy where I get loud...

Glad you liked the song. I hope I never use a cliche in a song, I almost always ad lib words to my songs and then write them up to see if they make sense and edit them around, they're usually just nonsense, cliches tend to have meaning. 

[crystalsuzy]

Ya...this song really rocks...love it...I too liked the contrast between the mellow vocals and the driving guitar...you can really play that thing ...great lyrics...can't really hear anything I'd change, although I kind of lost the vocals at the end of the 2nd verse, so you might want to bring them up a bit... awesome song...thanks for this share