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Fadow:
thanks for feedback. It ended up on this instrumental version. What you think? @cowparsleyman good for the hooks or ..? I will let my mate sing it later

https://soundcloud.com/tributetoalexanderbatta/anotherman-instrumental-version

RealKevM:
Decent tune, i'd love to hear a more polished version.

cowparsleyman:

--- Quote from: Fadow on March 28, 2019, 11:10:33 PM ---thanks for feedback. It ended up on this instrumental version. What you think? @cowparsleyman good for the hooks or ..? I will let my mate sing it later

https://soundcloud.com/tributetoalexanderbatta/anotherman-instrumental-version

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@Fadow - This should never be an instrumental, this has everything you need for a really decent vocal song, I'd leave out the phaser though, cut back the verb gtrs, they  distract from the song, leave that out completely and replace it witha LVox, a couple of HVox preferably a female vocalist, Monno DB from this forum would be a good choice.

Just one tip on the lyrics, they don't have to mean a lot, just have a good hooky melody and careful choice of word rhythm (prosody)

You have a hit here...but not in it's current skin.

Hope this helps, it has a lot of potential.

Rich

Fadow:
@cowparsleyman thank you for the feedback. what do you mean with Lvox and Hvox? Low and high voice? Lvox and Hvox in the Chorus?

cowparsleyman:
@Fadow - It a throwback to when I used to mix using an analogue desk, there was never much space to write what the channel was for, I used to use LVox for Lead Vocal, BVox for Backing Vocal, and HVox for Harmony Vocal, if there were more than one I'd just stick a number after it, and use a tracksheet or a book to remember some of the important settings, so much easier in a DAW.

Regards

Rich

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