Hi All, like many folks posting, this is my first ever post, so would really love your honest feedback... I write lyrics only, for the band in my head. This is given my cack handedness with any musical instrument (v. annoying!!). Re the below, I know there are a couple of super cheesy lines, but hey ho... I gloss over that in my head - any options would be welcomed! Generally the song is lullabyesque, with things building to a big release with the chorus... I don't ever show these to anyone so have probably lost a bit of context..
Verse1
When you found me I was incomplete,
A mess of masks and camouflage,
So keen to find a fall,
Unmeasured miles below.
I hid deep down in lost and found,
And made sure I would dislocate,
Abandon, separate,
True home from what I'd make.
[There's a musical bridge here that, as you will see, kind of builds up with words]
Verse2
You caught me deep within a fall.
Held my hand and simply said,
The time to stop has come,
Your rules can be unwrung.
Our journey will never be straight or dull,
You said to me with half a smile,
Your painted lips resolved,
And solar smile absolved.
[still a couple of bars of musical bridge]
Without you there's no reason at all.
Without you there's no reason at all.
Chorus
Our love was new my darling,
Our love was pure, we could never be old,
I take our time as written,
In ageless stars, it was never unknown.
Let me die,
Let me die,
Without you there's no reason at all
Without you there's no reason at all
Verse3
The sun set heavy in my mind,
It caught me out of time and place,
And failing to recall,
The promises I made.
And our journey was never straight or dull.
I think of you, your half-a-smile,
And painted lips recalled,
Your words of love console.
Chorus
Our love was new, my darling
Our love was pure, we could never be old
I take our time as written
In ageless stars, it was never unknown