This is another fun tune I've been working out for some time. It's somewhat coming together, but I'm not sure on the song structure at all. I could use some experienced feedback. I'm hearing this with a peppy melody and rhythm along the lines of That'll be the Day, at least for the chorus sections. I've severely pared this down already. Do I need to chop it more, rearrange? I'm a little stumped on how to end it.
I Need a Wife
V1
Some folks say we've got it good
Globalization will save the world
I don't see it looking 'round this neighborhood
What I see is it's no damn good
P1
With all this racing around barely getting by
There is one thing that I've realized
C1
I need a wife
Someone working to support my life
From the cooking and the cleaning,
To the shopping and the sleeping
It would help so much in getting by
If only I had myself a wife
V2
I haven't had a raise in years
And should be glad my job hasn't disappeared
That's what all the happy people say,
If you don't like it, you don't have to stay.
P2
We run this way and that
Collecting stuff like sewer rats
Sacrificing God-given freedoms
Feeding the material demons
C2
I need a wife
Someone working to support my life
From the cooking and cleaning,
To the shopping and the dreaming,
I could take another job
If only I had myself a wife.
V3
From my first day at work
I's never treated like a human
Always rushed beyond the max
With a layoff looming
P3
Threatened by the ax
Keeps the economy moving
B1
There's not enough time in the day
Working three part-time jobs
To keep the house from disarray
And grill the kebobs
What I wouldn't give to get-away
To the island of Oahu
Keep my hair from growing gray
And falling out in gobs
Ohhhhhhh
Outro
I need a wife
Someone to do the shopping
And the washing
The taxi service
And the mopping
I need a wife
Someone who pays the bills
Plans the thrills
Mops the spills
Sharpens the knives