Hello
So, I wrote this song. I'd like to get your opinions.
It's just me and an acoustic guitar. Kind of rock, folk rock, sort of thing.
Soundcloud Link:https://soundcloud.com/slotfyalqady/alone-in-thisYoutube Link:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SjZTwcpKtw4I think it's pretty straight forward why I wrote this song, and what it's about. The aim is venting more than anything else, really.
So, if you want to share your opinion in general,
is this any good?,
does it have potential, that kind of thing. Just because I've never played it to anyone before, so anything you can say would be helpful, really. If you have any
advice, any
weak points you see that need fixing, and
how to fix them. Last thing is this song's structure, I like it but not super confident at the same time, so if you have any opinions there, that would be great. Thanks
Lyrics:
I've got a burning soul
and the truth is
I am all alone
alone in this
I asked for help, it's overrated
they're lies they sell, & I hate it
just take this pill, & you'll sedate it
but I'm still numb, & suicidal
& it's the sun, & my idols
no where to run, it is final
I've got a burning soul
and the truth is
I am all alone
alone in this
it's flooding up, with me in a corner
I can't keep up, & I built these borders
the gates are shut, & they're my orders
but I will not speak, & bare my soul
it's mine to keep, so back away from the wall
I've declared defeat, & I'll silently crawl
everyday I rise, it all gets duller
I close my eyes, try to remember colors
so I lay to die, with no friend or a brother
& I was born
destined for this
a wall of thorns
the dark of the abyss
no crown or no throne
no star to miss
a wall around home
if that's what it is
& I am all alone
alone in this