Hi All,
I'd really appreciate some feedback on this song.
https://soundcloud.com/my-idiom/lightning-m-blair-2015For the first time I've forced myself to stick to a brief that is a little different to what I would normally write (or listen to). I tasked myself with writing a modern pop track suitable for a young female singer.
The recording has not come out as loud as I intended but thats something I'll probably post about on the recording forum. Please crank it up!
Any feedback gratefully recieved - structure, melody, harmony, instrumentation, production, lyrics etc etc.
Lightning - © M Blair 2015Verse 1
I got some vip tickets - o o oh
Out with my girls in the city - o o oh
Wearin more bling than fiddy - o o oh
Tonight the sky's the limit - o o oh
Verse 2
I got some money Lets blow it - o o oh
Walk in the club like we own it - o o oh
Look at me boys coz I'm showin - o o oh
Just what you want an you know it - o o oh
Bridge
Livin a life that's free - ohhh
Who knows where the night will lead - ohhh
Im rockin it can you feel - ohhh
My electricity - ohhh
Chorus
Coz I'm like lightnin
Release me I'm about to explode
I'm like lightnin
More energy than you can control
I'm burnin up don't wanna stop
Tonight I'm gonna reach the top
I'm like lightnin tonight
Verse 3
Hypnotic bass keeps pumpin - o o oh
Another coke with rum in - o o oh
My mind is over come an - o o oh
I hit the dance floor runnin - o o oh
Bridge
Livin a life that's free - ohhh
Who knows where the night will lead - ohhh
Im rockin it can you feel - ohhh
My electricity - ohhh
Chorus
Coz I'm like lightnin
Release me I'm about to explode
I'm like lightnin
More energy than you can control
I'm burnin up don't wanna stop
Tonight I'm gonna reach the top
I'm like lightnin tonight
Middle 8
When you see the sun come up don't expect me home by dawn
I'll still be on the floor somewhere whipping up the perfect storm