Sorry for the late responses everyone!
@CaliaMoko - thanks Vicki - I'll think about that line. I was planning to add this to my hallowe'en collection which right now consists of one song about Zombies..
@Wolfini - cheers for commenting. Got preachy at the end? OK - will look into that
@Krisp - thanks for the kind comments. Think I'll leave horror in even though you're the second to give it a thumbs down. It sings so nicely and has a twisted rhyme with "store".
@diademgrove - thanks Keith - no music yet - maybe someone will give it a go?
@hardtwistmusic - hey Verlon - going to wait until I butcher it with music? haha OK - might be a while
@olivergearing - thx for the words of encouragement Oliver. I changed that line to "Smell of death" - hope that's better. We don't often smell dead men but death - maybe
@PopTodd - ha - you might be onto sth - phsyco
thx for commenting
@tomcrocus - thanks Tom!
@kaalbas thank you kind sir/ma'am !
@Vintage54 thanks vintage - nice to see you pop up. Now I can't be accused of stealing a melody if I haven't written it yet, can I?
BTW - still owe you some music - you must be getting p*ssed at the wait...
@Sing4me88 thank you for the nice comments. A belter eh? Well that's the hope...