[Yodasdad]

Very impressive!

I don't mean this to sound condescending but from your picture you look quite young and I wasn't expecting anything as sophisticated. Book, cover, judge and all that.

Beautiful vocals, with some great melodic and harmonic content.

Some of the backing vox are really nice such as the 'oooh's' at 1:28.

This is very musical theatre in style so I would take the concept album one step further and go full on musical.

Well done.

Yodasdad

[ShinyThang]

Very accomplished piece of writing and fits the genre perfectly. Beautifully sung by Sis. Perhaps your final mix will have to introduce a little more emotion towards the end where the child is telling us she's scared but doesn't really sound it. But, being a musical, I guess you have all kinds of stage direction going on in your head which would probably work hand-in-hand to deliver the full impact. And you did say this is a rough mix. It's still pretty damn good though; lots going on and maintaining interest all the way through.

Excuse me for bringing it up but you don't look like you've seen that many summers by your avatar? I think you and your sister are going to go as far with music as want to go. As Del Boy would say 'The world's your lobster!' ... You're definitely too young for that reference.

[jacksimmons]

Thanks for the feedback guys, really appreciate it. @John, I'm a huge Queen fan so it's great to hear you found it reminiscent. I'm still trying to figure out how to get their massive BV harmony sound, though...

This is very musical theatre in style so I would take the concept album one step further and go full on musical.

I've been toying with this idea since conception, but think some songs I have so far don't quite take the leap and are more my usual style. I'll have to decide when the project is done. Would be amazing/hilarious to see this on stage somewhere, though.

Perhaps your final mix will have to introduce a little more emotion towards the end where the child is telling us she's scared but doesn't really sound it.

Excuse me for bringing it up but you don't look like you've seen that many summers by your avatar? I think you and your sister are going to go as far with music as want to go. As Del Boy would say 'The world's your lobster!' ... You're definitely too young for that reference.

Cheers ShinyThang, I'll revisit those vocals with my Sis and see what I can do about making them sound more emotional. And you're right, that reference is lost on me ahaha

Regarding my age, I think the avatar is probably quite kind. I'm actually 21. I've been writing since I was 16 and recording for the last few years.

[CaliaMoko]

Thanks for the feedback guys, really appreciate it. @John, I'm a huge Queen fan so it's great to hear you found it reminiscent. I'm still trying to figure out how to get their massive BV harmony sound, though

You probably already know they used the "wall of sound" technique by recording their voices over and over again to make it sound like a choir, right? After that it's probably some kind of mixing magic, with which I can't help.

[jacksimmons]

Thanks for the feedback guys, really appreciate it. @John, I'm a huge Queen fan so it's great to hear you found it reminiscent. I'm still trying to figure out how to get their massive BV harmony sound, though

You probably already know they used the "wall of sound" technique by recording their voices over and over again to make it sound like a choir, right? After that it's probably some kind of mixing magic, with which I can't help.

Yeah I believe they had 12 voices generally, three Freddie, three May, three Roger Taylor and three Deacon. I think they all tracked each harmony part. There's a little bit of magic that comes with four distinct voices that makes a harmony really hum. I might need to employ the rest of my family...

[ScottLevi]

Hey Jack,

Pretty fabulous to be honest, sound's like your on to something beautiful with your concept album if they're all of this quality.

So great that your working with your sister too, I've made a few tracks with my brother and I treasure that as when we've been the closest, so keep the moment!

No improvements from me, the vocals and overall production were most impressive.

[IronKnee]

Hey there Jack......I think this is outstanding. Kinda of a Mid-Night opera feeling. Very strong performances.It all works very well!
Really like the concept, and writing, as well!!!

                                                                        -Tom

[HenryOFarrell]

This vocal melody is superb, well done mate!

[mickyplankton]

This is epic. It's a beautiful song and love the arrangement. If I were to offer any suggestions it would be to stick with it and really go for a bombastic finish. This song can really soar. The only change I would consider would be to make the piano a little less jolty at 31 seconds. It pauses the song for a fraction too long. A minor point in the grand scheme of things!

[jacksimmons]

This vocal melody is superb, well done mate!

Thanks man, glad you liked it!

This is epic. It's a beautiful song and love the arrangement. If I were to offer any suggestions it would be to stick with it and really go for a bombastic finish. This song can really soar. The only change I would consider would be to make the piano a little less jolty at 31 seconds. It pauses the song for a fraction too long. A minor point in the grand scheme of things!

Wicked, thanks for the feedback. I was going for a bit of a baroque Pet Sounds thing with the bit at 30 secs. I think it's been a bit dvisive so I am condiering cutting it. I'm glad you considered it to be 'epic', that's some praise ahaha

Hey there Jack......I think this is outstanding. Kinda of a Mid-Night opera feeling. Very strong performances.It all works very well!
Really like the concept, and writing, as well!!!

Thanks a lot Tom! Glad you liked the concept - this is the first time I've ever attempted something with such a coherent story.

Pretty fabulous to be honest, sound's like your on to something beautiful with your concept album if they're all of this quality.

So great that your working with your sister too, I've made a few tracks with my brother and I treasure that as when we've been the closest, so keep the moment!

No improvements from me, the vocals and overall production were most impressive.

Thanks a lot Scott! I plan on posting more from the concept album in the coming weeks, so you'll have to be the judge of whether they're up to scratch or not. We're quite a musical family - my Dad is playing guitar on this track and most of the rest of the album. And he often pitches in with harmonies and things. It's a lot of fun.

Sorry to be bumping this again but I couldn't let everyone's great feedback go ignored. I'm taking this off soundcloud now for editing and mixing etc. Love you all x