Right for me, what's not working is this; theres to much faffing about getting to the hook,which does not happen !
you don't reach your chorus until 1.55....to long!..it's a catchy enough tune..
v1
Slow down if you want me to hear
What you're trying to say to me
Times change and I'm spreading my wings
But I don't wanna fly away
v2
We shine like the sun through the rain
( tempo picks up on the start of line 1 ..good)A million drops into one
New lives in a world that's so old
But love remains when it's gone
(between v2 and v3,,which is pre/c or chorus territory..theres an instrumental session,which dampens it all downv3
Mama said to me 'little bird'
(this v3 for me is a sort of a pre chorus,pre chorus..its a slave that serves no real purpose, it could be used after the first chorus?)You can fly when I'm gone
There's a rainbow that stays in your heart
Don't you worry 'bout the sun
climb
We start off little but grow so fast
Grow so fast, grow so fast
I'll make it work with the love I have
It's gonna last, it's gonna last
(you raise it here..and then drop it,,,the energies gone)....
.surplus to requirements..We start off little but grow so fast
Grow so fast, grow so fast
I'll make it work with the love I have
It's gonna last, it's gonna last
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Chorus
( just doesn't happen! flatI'll find my way in a world that turns
Make the most of life
I'll find my way, gonna be that girl
See the world through brand new eyes
I'll find my way, gonna make it work
Alternative chorusI'll find my way in a turning world
Making the most of my life,
gonna be that girl that does it right
See the world, shine tonight
im looking at it all..with brand new eyes
to make it work,,why not today
you know i'll stay if i find my way,
i'll find my way