Hi,
That was a great surprise to see the comments today. I am really pleased and took on board the suggestion for improvement and have gone further, changing the last part to a different verse. I hope the change works.
Neil . I hope you still like the words now they are not quite the same? Thankyou for your encouragement and will get in touch soon.
Alan .. thankyou, also, for your praise and suggestion to change that line
Now more lines have changed, for the better, I hope.
Marrianna
THE ROOFTOPS HAVE CRUMBLED
v1
The rooftops have crumbled to be seen no more
And walls when they tumbled fell to a last existing floor
Then the floor became rubble where the next place would stand
New walls and new rooftops, new structure, same land
Chorus
New structure in silver steel
Old framework torn down
Burnt timbers, new enterprise
New era, same town
v2
Where are the places I had known as a child?
I find bushes and brambles, tall flowers growing wild
In the grass, brown and tangled, running spiders ‘mid the sound
Of the bulldozer’s engines, new building, same ground
Chorus
New structure in silver steel
Old framework torn down
Burnt timbers, new enterprise
New era, same town
Bridge
Old homes on fire, they meant nothing any more
Families are forgotten, who had lived there years before
v3
Smoke clouds with cement dust blow around in the air
Sparking grey silhouettes from the past, everywhere
A faint orange colour screens new rooftops I see
Buildings for the future, new space-age, same me
Chorus
New structure in silver steel
Old framework torn down
Burnt timbers, new enterprise
New era, same town
Copyright Marrianna2015
